Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify and correct grammar, use a topic sentence then specific example. Avoid vague phrases and redundant words. Keep within 3–4 sentences and use linking words (for example, because, so).

例: Yes, I have a good memory, especially for experiences. For example, when I travelled abroad with my parents, I could clearly remember places we visited and activities we did. Because I enjoy recalling those moments, they stay vivid in my mind.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence, then explain your method briefly and give a short example. Avoid repeating the same idea ("check my schedule" twice). Use linking words like because and therefore for coherence.

例: No, I rarely forget important things because I keep a daily schedule. I write tasks and appointments there and check it every morning, so I can plan my day and avoid missing anything important.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence naming the main thing you must remember, then add a reason and a brief consequence. Correct grammar (everyday vs. every day, send -> sends) and tighten phrasing to be more natural.

例: I need to remember to check my email every day because my teachers often send important messages. If I read emails promptly, I can respond quickly and stay up to date with assignments.

提案: Organize the answer: start with the method (notebook), then explain how you use it step by step. Fix grammar and vocabulary (‘bought at Muji’, ‘things’, ‘when I finish something I highlight it’). Keep sentences concise and use linking words like then and afterwards.

例: I use a notebook I bought at Muji to record my tasks and appointments. Every morning I review the list, tick completed items, and highlight priorities so I don't forget urgent tasks.

× Yes, I'm good at memory rising since especially some travel experiences that I visit abroad with my parents, I usually remember a lot of experience there.

✓ Yes, I have a good memory, especially for travel experiences when I visit other countries with my parents; I usually remember many things from those trips.

This sentence has multiple problems: incorrect phrase 'memory rising' and awkward structure. It requires sentence restructuring (Grammar problem type ID 26: Sentence structure errors) and word choice (treated as 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Use 'have a good memory' not 'good at memory rising'; use 'when I visit other countries' instead of 'that I visit abroad'; and 'many things' instead of 'a lot of experience'. Suggestions: break into clearer clauses, use correct collocations ('have a good memory', 'travel experiences', 'visit other countries'), and ensure noun phrases match meaning.

× No, because I usually write all the things I need to do on my schedule, so I always check my schedule every day so I never forget something important in my life.

✓ No, because I usually write all the things I need to do in my schedule and check it every day, so I never forget anything important.

Problems: incorrect preposition 'on my schedule' should be 'in my schedule' (ID 11: Incorrect use of prepositions), redundancy and awkward repetition (ID 26: Sentence structure errors), and 'something important' is better as 'anything important' in this negative context (ID 14: Incorrect use of quantifiers). Improve by combining clauses to avoid repetition and using correct preposition and quantifier for negatives.

× I need to remember checking my e-mail everyday because my teacher usually send some important mail to me. So I need to ensure those emails and I will reply to my teachers.

✓ I need to remember to check my email every day because my teacher usually sends important emails to me, so I make sure to reply to my teachers.

Errors include wrong verb form after 'remember' (should be 'remember to check' not 'remember checking') which is ID 8: Verb + -ing form, incorrect adverb spelling 'everyday' vs 'every day' (ID 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs), subject-verb agreement 'teacher ... sends' (ID 2: Third person singular issue), and plural/article issues with 'mail/emails' (ID 22: Article errors/22). Suggestions: use 'remember to check', 'every day' as two words for frequency, ensure third-person singular adds 's', and use 'emails' for countable messages.

× I have a notebook I bought a Muji, a Japanese store and I usually write all the thing I need to do on this notebook and I will check it every day to ensure all my schedule and when I finish someone I will highlight on.

✓ I have a notebook I bought at Muji, a Japanese store. I usually write everything I need to do in this notebook and check it every day to keep track of my schedule; when I finish something, I highlight it.

Multiple issues: missing preposition 'at Muji' (ID 11), missing articles 'a notebook I bought at Muji' (ID 17/22 Article errors), 'all the thing' should be 'everything' (ID 13), incorrect preposition 'on this notebook' should be 'in this notebook' (ID 11), awkward phrase 'ensure all my schedule' should be 'keep track of my schedule' (ID 26), and 'when I finish someone' is wrong pronoun 'someone' should be 'something' and need to 'highlight it' (ID 12 Incorrect use of pronouns). Suggestions: use correct prepositions, articles, replace 'all the thing' with 'everything', and use 'highlight it' to refer to the completed item.