Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid filler words (uh, um). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples using linking words. Correct basic grammar (e.g., “memorising numbers is difficult for me”). Aim for 2–3 sentences, varied vocabulary (remember, recall, retain).

例: I’m reasonably good at remembering places and routes, but I struggle with numbers. For example, I can recall streets and signs easily, whereas I often forget phone numbers or codes.

提案: Give a direct answer, then provide one clear example and a reason if possible. Remove repetition and filler words. Use correct tense and sentence structure (e.g., “I often forgot important instructions in college”). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like because or for example.

例: Yes, I have. For example, in college I often forgot important instructions for assignments because I was juggling several classes, so I missed deadlines sometimes.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence listing the main things, then give 1–2 specific details. Avoid repetition and correct possessives and plural forms (e.g., “my mother’s medication,” “my homework”). Use linking words like such as or for example to organize ideas.

例: In my daily life I need to remember bills, my mother’s medication schedule, and my children’s meals. For example, I make a short checklist each morning so I don’t forget to prepare their food or pay bills on time.

提案: Give a concise method-based answer with clear sequence and linking words. Avoid repetition and awkward tense (use present simple for routines). Mention one or two tools and a short example of how you use them. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I usually write important tasks in my iPhone Notes and on a paper checklist. Each evening I open my notes and update the list so I don’t forget anything the next day.

× It depends on what I should remember.

✓ It depends on what I should remember.

No article error; sentence is acceptable. (Included for completeness.)

× For example, I memorise the places that I went, the roads, uh, the, uh, the signs I see in the street.

✓ For example, I memorise the places I went to, the roads, and the signs I see on the street.

Subject-verb agreement is fine, but prepositions and sentence structure were incorrect or missing. Added 'to' after 'went' and changed 'in the street' to 'on the street' for correct collocation; added 'and' to join items clearly. Suggestion: Use parallel structure when listing and check verb + preposition combinations (go to, see on).

× But for example, the numbers, I really don't remember the numbers very well.

✓ But, for example, numbers, I really don't remember very well.

Redundant repetition 'the numbers' is unnecessary and article use can be omitted when speaking generally. Use plural without 'the' to refer to numbers in general. Suggestion: Omit repeated nouns and unnecessary articles when speaking about things in general.

× Like memorising the numbers are a little bit difficult for me to remember to remember.

✓ Like memorising numbers is a little difficult for me.

Subject 'memorising numbers' is singular (a gerund phrase) so it requires singular verb 'is', not 'are'. Also removed repeated 'to remember' and tightened wording. Suggestion: Identify the subject as a gerund phrase and use singular verb; avoid repetition.

× Yes, of course, uh, it's happened a lot for me, especially when I am in my college.

✓ Yes, of course, it has happened to me a lot, especially when I was in college.

Use present perfect 'has happened' for past experiences with present relevance; 'I am in my college' should be past 'I was in college' to match time reference. 'To me' is natural collocation. Suggestion: Match tense to the time frame being discussed and use natural collocations (happen to someone).

× Umm, I forget some instructions and important thing that I should do have been done, but uh, life is going, I think is everyone get, uh, to, uh, forget something is very important to.

✓ I forgot some instructions and important things that I should have done, but life goes on. I think everyone occasionally forgets something important.

Original sentence mixes tenses and has poor structure. 'Should have done' expresses obligation in the past that was not completed. 'Life goes on' is the correct idiom. Use 'everyone' with singular verb 'forgets' and 'occasionally' clarifies frequency. Suggestion: Break long sentences into shorter ones, use 'should have + past participle' for unrealized past obligations, and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× So I need to remember in my daily lives, for example, my bills that I need to take my my important things of giving my mother their medications and helping my kids with some food and and a lot of things I need to be remembered.

✓ So in my daily life I need to remember things like paying bills, giving my mother her medications, helping my kids with food, and many other tasks.

Use singular 'daily life' rather than 'daily lives' since speaker refers to their own life. Corrected plurality and pronouns: 'mother her medications' not 'their'. Rephrased 'I need to be remembered' to active 'I need to remember' or 'I need to remember to do'. Suggestion: Use correct possessive pronouns and active voice; use 'daily life' for personal routines.

× For example, also my homeworks that I need.

✓ For example, also my homework that I need to do.

'Homework' is an uncountable noun and should not be made plural as 'homeworks'. Added 'to do' to complete the thought. Suggestion: Use uncountable noun 'homework' and complete sentence with a verb phrase.

× I learned a new tip to remember important things, for example, to write them in my iPhone note or in my paper and the pen and I and I make sure that after I arrive home or every single day I open my book or the notes.

✓ I learned a new tip for remembering important things: for example, writing them in my iPhone notes or on paper with a pen, and I make sure that after I arrive home each day I open my notes.

Use 'for remembering' (verb + -ing) after 'tip for'. 'iPhone note' should be plural 'notes' or 'note app'; 'on paper' is correct preposition. Simplified repetitive 'I and I' and 'every single day' to 'each day'. Suggestion: Use 'tip for + -ing' and prefer concise phrasing; ensure correct prepositions ('on paper').

× So I would have been writing everything important that I need to remember.

✓ So I write down everything important that I need to remember.

'Would have been writing' is wrong here; the speaker intends a habitual present action, so simple present 'write down' is appropriate. Also 'write down' clarifies the action. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions and use 'write down' to indicate recording information.