Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够直接，语句断断续续且有多次犹豫词（uh, umm），影响流利度和连贯性。内容较模糊，缺少清晰的主题句与具体细节。建议：1) 开始时用一句明确的主题句直接回答（如："Not really, I find it difficult to memorise factual information."). 2) 避免重复的停顿词，练习短句并用1–2个支持细节（原因或例子）。3) 控制答案长度在最多5句内，保持自然表达。

例: Not really — I find it difficult to memorise factual information for exams because I get nervous and forget details. However, I remember emotional events much better, such as family gatherings or trips, because they are associated with strong feelings. To improve, I often use simple techniques like making summaries or visual notes to help me recall facts.

提案: 表达含混且自相矛盾（先说会忘，然后又说没有忘），影响内容清晰度。语言上有语法错误和重复。建议：1) 直接回答是否忘记过重要事情并给出清晰例子（若没忘可说明原因）。2) 使用连接词（because, so）组织句子，避免重复。3) 修正语法（例如："I haven't done that"或"I have never forgotten anything important"）。

例: No, I have never forgotten anything important because I keep a daily to-do list and set phone reminders. For instance, I always write down deadlines and appointments in my planner so I can check them regularly and avoid missing anything important.

提案: 回答包含关键信息，但语句不够流畅且有重复和语法问题。细节可以更具体（例如提到具体的时间表或优先事项）。建议：1) 开头用主题句概括要记住的主要事项。2) 用连接词列举具体项目并给出一两个具体例子（例如课程时间、家庭纪念日）。3) 避免多余的停顿词并改正语法（"I am a student"而非"I am student present"）。

例: As a student, I need to remember deadlines and my daily class schedule. For example, I have to submit assignments by Friday and attend lectures at 9 am and 2 pm. I also remember important family dates, such as my parents' birthdays, and I usually plan gifts or calls in advance.

提案: 这是最清晰的一题，表达了具体方法并给出例子，但有重复和小语法错误（"I will I will", "for them for"）。建议：1) 去除重复并把内容压缩为最多5句。2) 使用更自然的表达（例如："I make a daily to-do list and set phone reminders"). 3) 可以补充说明具体方法的成效（比如如何帮助记住）。

例: I make a daily to-do list and set reminders on my phone to remember important tasks. For example, if my mother's birthday is next week, I set an alert to buy a gift and prepare a card a few days in advance. This system helps me avoid missing deadlines or special occasions.

× Umm, it's hard to say when I was remem when I was recite my, uh, knowledge for my exam.

✓ Umm, it's hard to say when I try to recall my knowledge for an exam.

句子结构混乱且时态与动词形式不当。原句中出现“when I was remem when I was recite”是断续且重复的表述，应使用不带进行式的动词短语“try to recall”来表达“尝试回忆”。建议把冗余碎片去掉，使用完整的动词短语，保持时态一致。

× I'm not very easy to remember something, but if I just want to remember some happy memories, for example, uh, for uh, forget.

✓ I'm not good at remembering things, but if I just want to remember some happy memories it's easier.

“not very easy to remember something”语法不当，形容词与动词搭配错误。应使用“good at remembering”或“not good at remembering”。此外，末尾的“for example... forget”是不完整且混乱的表达。建议使用完整句子并用-ing形式作为动名词（remembering）。

× Uh, yeah, I will. I will say I haven't do that because I'm I'm a person who listed my To Do List every day.

✓ Uh, yeah. I'd say I haven't done that because I'm a person who makes a to-do list every day.

“haven't do”应使用过去分词“done”来构成现在完成时，符合语法要求。另外“listed my To Do List”用词也不自然，应该用“make/keep a to-do list”。建议记住现在完成时结构：have/has + 过去分词。

× So I can remember something, rely on my reli, rely on my textbook and my list.

✓ So I can remember things by relying on my textbook and my list.

原句缺少介词短语连接，且“rely on my reli”为口误残留。正确用法是“rely on”后接宾语，或者使用动名词结构“by relying on”。建议使用“by relying on”明确行动方式。

× Oh for me, as I am student present, so I need to remember umm, when to submit my homework and everyday's course arrangement uh, and also I need to remember my daily life, things such as my parents, uh, birthday and I.

✓ Oh for me, since I'm a student now, I need to remember when to submit my homework and my daily class schedule, and also things in my personal life such as my parents' birthdays.

“as I am student present”表达不自然，需用现在时短语“since I'm a student now”。“everyday's course arrangement”应为“daily class schedule”。“my parents, uh, birthday and I”结构错误，需改为“my parents' birthdays”。建议整理信息顺序并使用正确的名词所有格形式。

× As I said that before, I will I will make A to To Do List every day and set reminders on my phone so it can remind me to do things every day.

✓ As I said before, I make a to-do list every day and set reminders on my phone so they remind me to do things.

原句中时态混用（will I will make）和冗余（A to To Do List）。由于是习惯性动作，应使用一般现在时“make”。此外，“so it can remind me”中的代词应与复数“reminders”一致，改为“they remind me”。建议去掉重复词，保持时态一致并确保代词指代正确。

× For example, if my mother's birthday is coming next week, I will set a reminder to buy a gift for them for.

✓ For example, if my mother's birthday is coming next week, I will set a reminder to buy her a gift.

原句中“buy a gift for them for”代词不一致且多余。母亲是单数，应使用“her”。此外结尾“for”多余，应直接说“buy her a gift”。建议注意代词单复数一致并去掉多余介词。