Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 说话要更直接并且注意发音和用词准确性。尽量减少犹豫词（如 "umm"）和重复表达，句子控制在不超过五句内；先给出主题句，然后用一两句具体细节支持，注意单词拼写或发音（memorising, comparing, revision, revising）。可以用连接词如 "because", "for example" 来使表达更连贯。

例: Yes, I'm quite good at memorising. For example, when I study biology I can remember small technical details more quickly than my classmates because I use active revision techniques like flashcards and spaced repetition.

提案: 回答要更具体并去掉泛泛而谈的陈述，避免冗长和语法错误。先直接回答问题（Yes/No and brief topic sentence），然后举一个具体例子说明发生了什么、造成了什么后果以及你如何解决。使用连接词如 "for example", "as a result", "so" 来理清逻辑。

例: Yes, I have. For example, last month I forgot my phone on a bus and realised it only after I reached home, so I called the bus company and tracked it down with the driver's help.

提案: 回答应更清晰、句子更简练，并注意语序和语法（例如 "when my karate training is", "how long it lasts", "when I need to be picked up"）。先给出要点句（I need to remember...），再列举两到三个具体事项并用连接词衔接。减少口头填充词。

例: I need to remember my daily schedule. For instance, I keep track of my classes, the time and duration of my karate training, and when I need to be picked up so I can coordinate with my family.

提案: 保持回答简洁并修正表达错误（例如 "a planner that runs the whole year" 或 "for the whole year"），减少重复和犹豫语。先陈述主要方法（I prefer writing things down），然后给出具体细节和原因，用连接词如 "because" 或 "so" 来说明好处。

例: I prefer writing important things down in a paper planner because I find it easier to remember notes I physically write. For example, I keep a yearly planner so I can look back at past plans and reminders even years later.

× I will say that I'm pretty good at memoring stuff because when I'm comparing with my refission with others, I found out I'm quite good at revising things like biology, picking up some small details and technical umm, things quicker than other people.

✓ I will say that I'm pretty good at memorising stuff because when I compare myself with others, I found that I'm quite good at revising things like biology, picking up small details and technical things quicker than other people.

错误类型为动词+ -ing（Grammar Problem Type 8）。原句中“memoring”拼写错误且应为“memorising”（动名词/现在分词形式）；但更大的问题是短语“when I'm comparing with my refission with others”结构不当：应使用一般现在时或一般过去时来表示比较的习惯或经历，且“compare”后应接“myself”，而“refission”为拼写/词汇错误，应去掉。把“when I'm comparing”改为“when I compare”，使时态和语义更自然；将“picking up some small details and technical umm, things”中的“some”可删去以更简洁，且“technical things”不需逗号。建议：注意动词ing形式的拼写（memorising），使用正确的代词（myself），并根据上下文选择适当时态（习惯比较用一般现在时/过去经验用一般过去时）。

× I will say that I'm pretty good at memoring stuff because when I'm comparing with my refission with others, I found out I'm quite good at revising things like biology, picking up some small details and technical umm, things quicker than other people.

✓ ...when I compare myself with others, I find that I'm quite good at revising...

错误类型为过去时问题（Grammar Problem Type 5）。原句中同时出现“I will say...”“when I'm comparing...”“I found out I'm...”时态混乱。若表达一般事实或习惯，应使用一般现在时（I compare ... I find）；若表达过去经历，应保持过去时的一致性。这里根据上下文更合适使用一般现在时，故把“found out”改为“find”。建议：保持时态一致，叙述习惯性特点用一般现在时。

× I will say that I'm pretty good at memoring stuff because when I'm comparing with my refission with others, I found out I'm quite good at revising things like biology, picking up some small details and technical umm, things quicker than other people.

✓ I will say that I'm pretty good at memorising stuff because when I compare myself with others, I find that I am quite good at revising subjects like biology and at picking up small, technical details quicker than other people.

错误类型为句子结构错误（Grammar Problem Type 26）。原句冗长且结构重复（多次插入不必要的短语），有拼写和词序问题。将句子拆解并重组：明确主句和从句，使逻辑清晰；将“technical things”改为“technical details”更准确；在“small, technical details”中调整形容词顺序。建议：写长句时先理清主从关系，删去多余词汇，保持词序和搭配准确。

× Of course, I would say everyone in the world would have ever forgotten something. I have a few occasions that I forgot my phone, forgot my locker, keys of this small stuff, but at the end I found a way through it. So overall it's quite good.

✓ Of course, I would say everyone in the world has forgotten something. I have had a few occasions when I forgot my phone, my locker key, and other small things, but in the end I found a way to deal with it. So overall it's not too bad.

错误类型为过去时问题（Grammar Problem Type 5）。原句中“would have ever forgotten”时态和助动词搭配错误，且“have ever”在此语境不合适；应使用现在完成时或一般现在（has forgotten）。短语“ I have a few occasions that I forgot”也不自然，应改为“I have had a few occasions when I forgot...”。“keys of this small stuff”表达错误，改为“my locker key and other small things”。建议：遇到表示经历的句子，使用现在完成时（have/has + 过去分词）；注意固定搭配（occasions when）。

× I have a few occasions that I forgot my phone, forgot my locker, keys of this small stuff, but at the end I found a way through it.

✓ I have had a few occasions when I forgot my phone, my locker key, and other small things, but in the end I found a way to get through it.

错误类型为介词/介词短语使用错误（Grammar Problem Type 11）。原句中“occasions that”应为“occasions when”；“keys of this small stuff”介词用法和名词搭配不当，应为“locker key”或“keys to my locker”，“at the end”在此处更自然为“in the end”或“eventually”。建议：学习常见搭配（occasions when, in the end, keys to/locker key），注意介词短语的固定用法。

× Well I always have to remember what I have on that day. I'm in lesson time because I'm still a student and I will have to remember when is my karate training, how long is it, When do I umm need to be pick up so I can communicate well with my family and umm know what to do.

✓ Well, I always have to remember what I have on that day. I'm in class because I'm still a student and I have to remember when my karate training is, how long it lasts, and when I need to be picked up so I can communicate well with my family and know what to do.

错误类型为现在时问题（Grammar Problem Type 6）。原句中“I'm in lesson time”表达不自然，应为“I'm in class”；“I will have to remember when is my karate training”中疑问句语序被嵌入从句，需用陈述语序“when my karate training is”；“When do I ... need to be pick up”时态/语序和被动形式错误，正确为“when I need to be picked up”。建议：在宾语从句中使用陈述句语序，注意被动语态和动词形式（picked up）。

× I prefer writing it down, umm, I know some people in modern society, umm, like to remember everything on their phones, but I'm not this kind of person.

✓ I prefer writing things down. I know some people in modern society like to remember everything on their phones, but I'm not that kind of person.

错误类型为动词+ -ing 及句子结构（Grammar Problem Type 8/26）。原句“prefer writing it down”可以，但更自然为“prefer writing things down”以对应泛指事物；另外句子中过多填词（umm）和逗号导致断句不清，最后“this kind of person”在口语可用，但书面或更标准表达为“that kind of person”。建议：使用更自然的搭配（prefer writing things down），注意断句和代词使用。

× I have a planner that umm, runs the whole year 3 and I love writing things down so when it's 10 years after I can still have a look on it.

✓ I have a planner that covers the whole year and I love writing things down so that even 10 years later I can still look back at it.

错误类型为句子结构错误（Grammar Problem Type 26）。原句“runs the whole year 3”不合逻辑且含义不明，应改为“covers the whole year”或“runs for the whole year”；“so when it's 10 years after I can still have a look on it”应为“so that even 10 years later I can still look back at it”。此外介词“on”用错，正确为“look at”或“look back at”。建议：表达时间段用cover/run for the year；表示“多年后回看”用“10 years later/after”并用“look back at”。