Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直观，但语言和结构有明显问题：句子不够自然，语法和用词错误（如“most of the story I heard learn”应调整），信息重复且有些不连贯。要改进：1) 开头用主题句直接回答并简短解释；2) 用正确的时态和语序；3) 用连接词使细节更连贯；4) 避免冗长或不相关的信息。示例句子不要超过5句。

例: No, I'm not very good at memorising things. I usually rely on my parents and friends to remind me about events. For instance, my parents once told me I had been bitten by a dog when I was a child, but I don't remember it myself. Generally, I remember important things only when someone repeats them to me.

提案: 回答包含经历，但表达不够清晰，语法时态混乱（如“once I need to, I needed to take an RT”），细节不够具体（什么是RT？何时发生？后果如何？）。改进建议：1) 使用清晰的主题句说明忘记的是什么；2) 提供具体情境（时间、地点、后果）；3) 使用连词（for example, because, so）使逻辑清楚；4) 检查时态和名词单复数。

例: Yes, I once forgot an important appointment because I didn't plan my schedule properly. A few months ago I had to take a bus for an exam, but I didn't check the timetable and missed the bus, so I had to wait for another hour and arrived late. Since then I always check times and write them down.

提案: 回答主题明确，但表达可更精炼、准确：存在语法和词序问题（如“there's once I went”）；细节可更具体（如何安排课程与兼职冲突？结果如何？）。改进建议：1) 直接给出主题句并用一两句说明原因；2) 用具体例子描述冲突和结果；3) 使用连接词（because, so, however）提高连贯性；4) 保持句子不超过5句。

例: I need to remember my daily schedule the most because I balance classes and a part-time job. For example, once I went to work when I was supposed to attend a class, so I missed the lecture and had to ask for notes. Now I plan my week in advance to avoid clashes.

提案: 回答清楚且实用，但有语法和措辞问题（如“set exam day or anniversary date to in calendar apps”，“that won't be stress”）。可以更自然并稍作扩展：1) 用简洁主题句说明方法；2) 说明如何具体使用（提醒方式、提前多久）；3) 用连接词和正确短语表达效果；4) 控制在5句内。

例: I usually set reminders in my calendar app to remember important dates. For example, I add exams and anniversaries with alerts a few days and one hour before, so I have time to prepare and I don't feel stressed.

× No I'm not.

✓ No, I'm not.

原句缺少逗号导致书写不符合英语标点习惯。建议在口语或书面中在否定回应的“I”前后适当使用逗号，以明确停顿和语气。

× I think most of the story I heard learn from my parents and my friends.

✓ I think most of the stories I heard were learned from my parents and my friends.

原句结构混乱：'most of the story' 应为复数 'most of the stories'；动词时态与语态不正确，应使用过去被动 'were learned' 或过去完成视上下文。建议使用复数名词并使用被动语态来表示“被...告诉/学到”。（涉及复数问题和被动，但按要求只标示为句子结构错误）

× I don't memorize things on my own.

✓ I don't memorize things by myself.

原句语义可通，但更自然的表达是 'by myself'。建议在表示独立完成某事时用 'by myself'。

× For example, when I was a kid my parents told me I got bitten by a dog, but I don't remember that.

✓ For example, when I was a kid my parents told me I had been bitten by a dog, but I don't remember that.

描述过去发生并在更早时间点完成的动作，应使用过去完成时 'had been bitten'。原句用简单过去 'got bitten' 与主句 'my parents told me' 的时间关系不够清晰。建议用过去完成时表示在被告知之前已发生的动作。

× Yes, I have forgotten something important because I'm not keen on listing the things I need to prepare or plan my schedule.

✓ Yes, I have forgotten something important because I'm not keen on listing the things I need to prepare or planning my schedule.

原因从句中并列两项时，动词形式应保持一致。原句中 'listing' 与 'plan' 形式不一致，应改为 'listing' 与 'planning' 或 'list' 与 'plan'。此处保持进行动名词形式更自然。

× For example, once I need to, I needed to take an RT but I didn't check the time schedule, so I wait for another hours.

✓ For example, once I needed to take an RT but I didn't check the timetable, so I waited for another hour.

句子时态应统一为过去时：'needed' 和 'didn't check' 已是过去，后文应为 'waited' 而不是 'wait'。另外 'time schedule' 不自然，应改为 'timetable' 或 'schedule'；'another hours' 数量和单复数不一致，改为 'another hour'。建议统一使用过去时并注意可数名词单复数。

× I think the schedule is the most important thing I need to remember in my daily life because I need to take care of my classes and my part time job at the same time.

✓ I think the schedule is the most important thing I need to remember in my daily life because I need to take care of my classes and my part-time job at the same time.

原句主要问题是 'part time' 应作复合形容词连字号 'part-time'。建议在复合形容词前加连字符，保证书写规范。

× For example, there's once I went to my workplace but that time I need to go to my classes so I just messed up.

✓ For example, once I went to my workplace but at that time I needed to go to my classes, so I just messed up.

原句时态和结构混杂：'there's once' 不自然，应去掉 'there's'；'that time I need to go' 与上下文不一致，应改为过去时 'at that time I needed to go'。建议去掉多余短语并统一使用过去时态。

× I'm convinced that setting a reminder on calendar apps is a good way for me to remember important things.

✓ I'm convinced that setting reminders on calendar apps is a good way for me to remember important things.

原句 'a reminder' 与泛指习惯不匹配，通常用复数 'reminders' 表示多次或各种提醒。建议使用复数以更自然地表达习惯做法。

× For example, I will set exam day or anniversary date to in calendar apps to help me to remember those date and that won't be stress.

✓ For example, I will set exam days or anniversary dates in calendar apps to help me remember those dates and that won't be stressful.

原句问题较多：'set ... to in' 结构错误，应为 'set ... in'；名词单复数不一致，应把 'exam day or anniversary date' 改为复数 'exam days or anniversary dates'；'help me to remember' 可简化为 'help me remember'；'that won't be stress' 应改为形容词 'stressful'。建议调整介词位置、注意名词单复数一致并使用正确的形容词形式。