Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中有语法错误和表达不自然的地方，例如“when I under pressure”应为“when I am under pressure”。建议注意时态和句子结构，使表达更流畅自然。同时，回答中有些冗余，可以更简洁地表达观点。

例: I usually eat snacks when I am under pressure because they help me relax. For example, before an important exam, eating snacks allows me to refresh my mind and take a short break from studying, which reduces my stress.

提案: 回答中有语法错误，如“sometimes to eat them”应为“sometimes eat them”，并且有口语填充词“uh”影响流畅度。建议减少口语填充词，注意语法准确，同时可以用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: No, I don't think eating snacks is healthy because most of them contain a lot of sugar and oil, which can be harmful if eaten frequently. However, I sometimes eat them to relax and reduce my stress.

提案: 回答中有多处语法错误和表达不清，如“caddies”应为“candies”，“cost me have a badly bad denti dentist dental pro”表达混乱。建议加强语法和词汇的准确使用，避免重复和错误，表达要清晰。

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. I used to buy chocolates and candies almost every day. These habits caused me to have dental problems later.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误，如“are really suit”应为“really suit”，以及“are refresh”应为“refresh”。建议注意主谓一致和动词形式，使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I enjoy a variety of snacks, especially sweet ones such as chocolates and cakes, which really suit my sweet tooth. I also like sour snacks because they refresh my mind.

× When I under pressure, I more likely to eat snacks because it's a good way to avoid.

✓ When I am under pressure, I am more likely to eat snacks because it's a good way to avoid stress.

句子中缺少动词be的形式，'under pressure'前应加上'be'动词，且'more likely'前应加上'be'动词，表示现在时态。

× For example, if I prepare an important exam on eating some snacks help me refresh my mind and take a short break from studying, which makes me feel less stress.

✓ For example, when I prepare for an important exam, eating some snacks helps me refresh my mind and take a short break from studying, which makes me feel less stressed.

原句结构混乱，'if I prepare an important exam on eating some snacks'不通顺，应改为'when I prepare for an important exam, eating some snacks helps...'，同时动词help应加s以符合主语单数。

× However, I sometimes to eat them to, uh, relax and uh, reduce my stress.

✓ However, I sometimes eat them to, uh, relax and, uh, reduce my stress.

'sometimes'后不应加不定式'to eat'，应直接用动词原形'eat'。

× Umm these habits cost me have a badly bad denti dentist dental pro.

✓ Umm these habits caused me to have bad dental problems.

原句时态错误且表达不清，'cost me have'不正确，应使用过去式'caused me to have'，并且'denti dentist dental pro'应改为'dental problems'。

× I enjoy a variety of snacks, especially sweet ones such as chocolates and cakes are really suit my sweet tooth.

✓ I enjoy a variety of snacks, especially sweet ones such as chocolates and cakes, which really suit my sweet tooth.

原句中'are really suit'结构错误，应改为'which really suit'，使句子结构完整且语法正确。

× I also like sour food, sour snacks as they are refresh my mind.

✓ I also like sour food and sour snacks as they refresh my mind.

'are refresh'语法错误，应改为动词原形'refresh'，且连接词应为'and'使句子通顺。