Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more specific and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. how often you write), then give one brief supporting detail. Avoid vague phrases like “some famous books.” Use natural phrasing and correct grammar (e.g. “I write quick notes and sometimes copy my favourite quotes from books”).

例: I write fairly often — usually quick notes several times a week. For example, I jot down ideas, grocery lists, and sometimes copy favourite quotes from books to remember them.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence stating what you like to write, then give one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid filler words and vague categories like “or something.” Fix grammar: use verbs correctly (e.g. “I prefer rewriting passages that are meaningful, such as extracts from romantic novels, because…”).

例: I prefer rewriting meaningful passages, especially extracts from romantic novels, because I enjoy their expressive language and it helps me learn new vocabulary.

提案: Give a clearer, grammatically correct answer with a simple reason and a linking word. Replace long, unclear clauses with one or two concise sentences. Use correct verb forms and prepositions (e.g. “I wouldn’t write them in the first place”).

例: No, I don’t think what I write would change. Because I only write things I’m sure about, I wouldn’t start writing something unless I believed in it.

提案: State your preference clearly (typing or handwriting) and give one concrete reason using a linking word. Correct grammar (e.g. “I prefer typing because people use email and digital documents more now”). Avoid general phrases like “in our whole society.”

例: I prefer typing because most communication is digital now — people use email and documents, which is faster and easier to edit than handwriting.

提案: Begin with a clear frequency statement, then explain briefly how and why. Use correct prepositions and word forms (e.g. “I keep a journal twice a week. I usually write short entries in the morning and at night about things that happened”). Avoid vague wording like “whatever happened.”

例: I keep a journal twice a week. I usually write short entries in the morning and at night to record important events and my thoughts from the day.

提案: Give a clearer structure: state one or two methods and explain why each is useful, using linking words. Remove hesitations and correct grammar (e.g. “I mainly write short notes about important conversations because it’s quick and easy”).

例: Besides journaling, I take quick notes on my phone about important conversations and events because it’s fast and helps me remember details later.

× Yes, I write quick notes or sometimes rewrite my favorite quote from some famous books.

✓ Yes, I write quick notes or sometimes rewrite my favorite quotes from some famous books.

Plural of 'quote' should match 'some famous books' and general practice: use plural 'quotes' when referring to multiple examples. This is a singular/plural consistency issue; change 'quote' to 'quotes' to agree with 'some famous books'. Use: 'rewrite my favorite quotes from some famous books.'

× I prefer to rewrite something important than nonsense. Uh, romantic novels or something.

✓ I prefer to rewrite something important rather than nonsense, for example romantic novels.

Use 'rather than' for contrasts, not 'than' alone after 'prefer to'. Also improve clarity by combining the fragments into one sentence and providing an example. This fixes conjunction choice and sentence structure.

× No, I don't because if I wasn't sure about whatever I am writing and I don't believe on it, I never start write, uh, those at first.

✓ No. I don't, because if I am not sure about what I am writing and I don't believe in it, I never start writing those things in the first place.

Multiple issues: tense consistency (use present 'am not sure' to match habit), incorrect preposition 'believe on' should be 'believe in', and 'start write' requires gerund 'start writing'. Also 'whatever' is replaced by 'what' and 'those' clarified as 'those things'. Corrections follow present-tense habitual action.

× I prefer to writing because in our whole society people use e-mail files, word and documents more than handwriting or even some traditional mails.

✓ I prefer writing because in our society people use e-mails, Word documents and files more than handwriting or traditional mail.

'Prefer to writing' is incorrect; use 'prefer writing' or 'prefer to write'. 'E-mail files, word and documents' is unclear: use 'e-mails, Word documents and files'. 'Traditional mails' should be 'traditional mail' or 'postal mail'. Also simplify 'our whole society' to 'our society' for natural phrasing.

× Twice a week I really pay attention about my journal and at the morning and the night is time for writing quick memory about whatever happened in my day.

✓ Twice a week I pay attention to my journal, and in the morning and at night I write quick notes about whatever happened during my day.

'Pay attention about' is incorrect preposition; use 'pay attention to'. 'At the morning' should be 'in the morning'; 'the night' becomes 'at night'. 'Quick memory' is unnatural; use 'quick notes'. Also move adverb 'really' or omit it for clarity. This fixes prepositions, adverb placement and noun choice.

× Simply writing whatever happened, uh, especially about the conversation, which is important for me. And uh, I believe it's a quick and easier to write about.

✓ I simply write whatever happened, especially conversations that are important to me, and I believe it's quick and easy to write about them.

Sentence fragments and incorrect forms: 'Simply writing' should be 'I simply write' to include subject and verb. 'About the conversation' should be plural 'conversations' or 'the conversation' clarified; use 'conversations that are important to me'. 'A quick and easier' is incorrect comparative/adjective use; use 'quick and easy'. Add 'them' to refer back to 'conversations'. This corrects sentence structure, prepositions and adjective usage.