Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail. Use correct articles, pronouns and simpler sentence structures. Also avoid repetition and keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I do. I especially like roses because they are a traditional way to show love. For example, giving someone a red rose usually means you care about them, so people often give roses on special occasions.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence naming the person, then add a specific detail about what they do with flowers. Reduce hesitations and correct pronouns. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'for example' or 'she often'.

例: Yes. My grandmother loves flowers and keeps many plants in our small home garden. For example, she spends most mornings watering roses and arranging potted plants, so the garden always looks well cared for.

提案: Answer directly then give one or two specific supporting facts. Fix grammar (use 'definitely not', 'rarely see', 'designated areas'). Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use a linking word such as 'however' to contrast.

例: No, definitely not. I live in Kuwait, which is mostly desert, so I rarely see flowers in my neighborhood. However, there are some designated farms and covered gardens where many flowers are grown.

提案: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a direct answer, then explain briefly why with one clear reason. Avoid repetitions and filler words. Use correct verb forms and pronouns.

例: No, I don't. I'm not comfortable using my phone camera and I often feel shy taking pictures in public, so I rarely photograph flowers.

提案: Answer clearly then give a specific example of when flowers are given. Correct grammar (use 'rarely', 'occasions', 'visit someone in hospital'). Avoid vague phrases like 'special movement' and use linking words such as 'however' or 'for example'.

例: No, people rarely send flowers regularly. However, they do give flowers on special occasions; for example, visitors often bring flowers when they visit someone in the hospital to wish them a speedy recovery.

× Yes definitely I like flowers especially a roses because this is easy way to explain your feeling to the others.

✓ Yes, definitely I like flowers, especially roses, because this is an easy way to express your feelings to others.

The article 'a' before 'roses' is incorrect because 'roses' is plural and does not need 'a'. 'This is easy way' needs the indefinite article 'an' before a noun phrase starting with a vowel sound, and 'explain your feeling' should be 'express your feelings' for natural collocation and plural consistency. Remove 'the' before 'others' as it is unnecessary. Suggestion: remove 'a' before plural nouns, use 'an easy way', and use 'express' with plural 'feelings'.

× For example if you give if you love to someone to you should be you give him, give him or her to red rose.

✓ For example, if you love someone, you should give him or her a red rose.

The original sentence has extra words and incorrect word order. 'Give to someone' is incorrect here; use 'give someone'. 'Should be you give' is ungrammatical. Also use the article 'a' before 'red rose' and place it correctly: 'a red rose'. Suggestion: simplify the conditional structure: 'if you love someone, you should give...' and use correct article placement before singular countable nouns.

× It means you express your feelings towards them.

✓ It means you express your feelings toward them.

'Towards' is not wrong, but in this context 'toward' is more common in American English; either is acceptable. The main issue was pronoun clarity: 'them' refers to the person you love, which is fine. Suggestion: keep pronoun reference clear; use 'toward' or 'towards' consistently.

× Well, in my friend circles, uh, I have no idea who loves the flower or no, but yeah, I remember, uh, my grandmother, she really likes flowers and different types of plant, plant plants.

✓ Well, in my friend circles, I have no idea who loves flowers, but I remember my grandmother; she really likes flowers and different types of plants.

'The flower' is incorrect because the speaker means flowers in general — use plural 'flowers'. 'Different types of plant' needs plural 'plants'. Remove filler words and redundant repetition. Suggestion: use plural nouns when speaking generally and avoid repeating words.

× In our home there is a small garden, uh, where I saw our grand grandmother.

✓ In our home there is a small garden where I saw my great-grandmother.

'Grand grandmother' is nonstandard; 'great-grandmother' is correct. Also remove the filler 'uh' and unnecessary comma. 'There is' is acceptable. Suggestion: use standard kinship terms and avoid fillers.

× She spent most of their time in the garden.

✓ She spent most of her time in the garden.

The possessive pronoun should agree with the subject 'She', so use 'her' instead of 'their'. Suggestion: match singular subjects with singular possessive pronouns.

× Are there a lot of flowers where you live?

✓ Are there a lot of flowers where you live?

This examiner question is grammatically correct; no change needed.

× Well, uh, in definitely no, because I live in Kuwait and this is a desert area.

✓ Well, definitely not, because I live in Kuwait and it is a desert area.

'In definitely no' is incorrect word order; use 'definitely not'. 'This is a desert area' can be 'it is a desert area' for clarity. Suggestion: place adverbs correctly and use 'not' to negate.

× So in my surrounding there is, uh, rarely I saw, I seen a flowers, uh, but yeah, there is, uh, some designated, there's some, uh, designated areas.

✓ So in my surroundings, I rarely see flowers, but there are some designated areas.

Use plural 'surroundings' and present tense 'see' to match ongoing situation. 'I seen' is nonstandard; use 'saw' for past or 'see' for present. 'A flowers' is incorrect; remove article and use plural 'flowers'. Use 'there are' for plural 'areas'. Suggestion: choose correct tense and article for countable nouns and use 'there are' for plural existence.

× We call them a covered.

✓ We call them covered areas.

'A covered' is incomplete and wrong; use a noun 'covered areas' or another noun phrase. Suggestion: include the noun when using adjectives like 'covered'.

× There is a lots of farms out there.

✓ There are a lot of farms out there.

Use 'there are' with the plural noun 'farms'. 'A lots' is incorrect; use 'a lot of' for plural. Suggestion: use 'there are' for plural existence and correct quantifier 'a lot of'.

× Uh, no, actually, uh, I am a not good uh, in using a mobile uh, mobile phone cameras.

✓ No, actually I'm not good at using mobile phone cameras.

'I am a not good' is wrong order; use 'I'm not good'. The correct preposition is 'good at'. Remove repeated 'mobile' and 'a' before 'mobile phone cameras'. Suggestion: use 'not good at' plus gerund for ability with activities.

× So when I when I was in a public place, so feeling shy to take a pictures so.

✓ So when I am in a public place, I feel shy about taking pictures.

Use present tense 'am' to match habitual action. 'Feeling shy to take a pictures' is incorrect: use 'feel shy about taking pictures' and remove extra articles. Suggestion: use 'feel shy about' + gerund to describe reluctance and correct tense for habitual actions.

× When in my country rarely we saw the people who given the flowers to the others.

✓ In my country we rarely see people giving flowers to others.

Word order 'When in my country rarely we saw' is awkward. Use present simple for habitual actions: 'we rarely see'. 'Given the flowers' should be 'giving flowers'. Remove 'the' before 'others'. Suggestion: use subject-verb-object order and correct verb forms for gerunds.

× But yes there is some special movement when people visit some special movement that time people are giving the flowers to the other.

✓ But there are some special moments when people visit; at those times people give flowers to others.

'Movement' is the wrong word; 'moments' or 'occasions' fits. Use 'there are' for plural 'moments'. 'Giving the flowers to the other' should be 'give flowers to others' in simple present for habitual action. Suggestion: choose correct nouns (moments/occasions) and use simple present for repeated actions.

× For example, when someone in at between the hospital, so when they visit the hospital for their best wishes and fully.

✓ For example, when someone is in the hospital, visitors bring flowers to wish them well.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and wrong prepositions: 'in at between the hospital' is ungrammatical. 'For their best wishes and fully' is unclear; 'to wish them well' conveys intended meaning. Suggestion: simplify the sentence: 'when someone is in the hospital, visitors bring flowers to wish them well'.