Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar and concise supporting details. Avoid fillers and unclear phrases. Mention a specific flower or why you like flowers and use linking words to make it coherent.

例: Yes, I love flowers. For example, I have a jasmine plant called Rajinikanth near my front door, and its fragrance fills the house every evening. Because of the scent, it creates a pleasant atmosphere and brightens my mood.

提案: Start with a topic sentence and give specific details using correct grammar and linking words. Replace vague or incorrect phrases with clear descriptions (e.g., types of flowers, how they use them).

例: Yes, my mother and my sister love flowers. They grow several kinds in our garden, such as roses and jasmine, and often cut them to decorate the house. As a result, our home usually smells fresh and looks colorful.

提案: Give a clear, structured response: state whether there are many flowers, then give specific examples and use linking words. Avoid repetition and filler sounds.

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live. There are public parks and several household gardens, so people plant a variety of species like marigolds and hibiscus. Consequently, many trees and flower beds are now fully grown and bloom throughout the year.

提案: Answer directly and give specific reasons, using correct grammar and linking words. Explain when and why you photograph flowers and how it makes you feel.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers. When I walk outside, I capture pictures to remember beautiful colors and shapes, and these photos cheer me up when I look at them later.

提案: Provide a clear, organized answer: state the general custom, then give specific occasions and examples. Use correct vocabulary instead of unclear words and avoid hesitation.

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers on special occasions. For instance, during festivals, graduation ceremonies, or teacher appreciation events, people give bouquets to show respect and congratulations.

× Yes I love flowers in my home here I've been on one of the flower St. with its name is Rajinikanth.

✓ Yes, I love flowers at my home. There is a street here named Rajinikanth where there are many flowers.

Original sentence mixes tenses and uses incorrect verb forms ('I've been on one of the flower St. with its name is Rajinikanth'). The correct form uses 'There is' to introduce the street and present simple to describe a general fact. Use 'at my home' not 'in my home' for liking flowers located at home and restructure the clause for clarity.

× In every winning umm they spending the smell.

✓ Every morning they spread the scent.

'In every winning' is incorrect; likely intended 'every morning'. 'They spending the smell' uses wrong verb form and article. Use simple present 'they spread the scent' to describe habitual action and include the definite article 'the' before 'scent' for a specific smell.

× It has a good smell and to cover my home with the smell.

✓ It has a pleasant fragrance and it fills my home with the scent.

Phrase 'to cover my home with the smell' is awkward. Use 'fills my home with the scent' or 'fills the house with the fragrance.' 'Has a good smell' is better expressed as 'has a pleasant fragrance.'

× Yes, my mother and my sister loves flowers so much.

✓ Yes, my mother and my sister love flowers very much.

Compound subject 'my mother and my sister' is plural so verb should be 'love' not 'loves.' Also use 'very much' for emphasis instead of 'so much' if preferred; both are acceptable.

× They brought many types of flowers.

✓ They buy or bring many kinds of flowers.

'Brought' is past tense but context implies habitual action; use 'buy' or 'bring' in simple present. Also 'types of flowers' is acceptable but 'kinds of flowers' is more natural.

× She like a rose raging on the Gandharaj umm many days uh and then they collected in my home.

✓ She likes roses, especially the Gandharaj variety; she keeps them for many days and then brings them home.

Subject-verb agreement: 'She like' should be 'She likes.' 'A rose raging on the Gandharaj' is unclear; likely 'the Gandharaj variety' or 'Gandharaj roses.' Use present simple for habitual actions and clarify sequence: keeps them for days then brings them home.

× In my home area, there have lots of places, free places.

✓ In my neighborhood, there are many open spaces.

Use 'there are' for plural existence, not 'there have.' 'Home area' is better as 'neighborhood.' 'Free places' is unclear; 'open spaces' or 'public spaces' is more natural.

× So they collected many types of flower strip and then the, uh, put in in mud that time.

✓ So they collect many kinds of flower saplings and plant them in the soil.

'Many types of flower strip' is incorrect; likely 'flower saplings' or 'flower strips' meaning small plants. Use present simple for habitual action. 'Put in in mud' should be 'plant them in the soil.'

× Uh, the flowers, uh, uh, tree is growing up yes now, currently.

✓ The flower trees are growing now.

Use plural 'trees' if more than one; 'growing up' is colloquial — 'growing' or 'are growing now' is correct. Avoid redundant 'yes now, currently.'

× Yes, I take a random photos in my daily life because of all flowers so when I see it as a memory I have to make me happy or sometimes flowers so feel me look good.

✓ Yes, I take random photos of flowers in my daily life because they make me happy when I look at them.

Use plural 'photos' without 'a' and 'random photos of flowers.' 'Because of all flowers' is incorrect; specify 'because they make me happy.' Remove unclear phrases like 'make me look good.' Keep simple cause-effect structure.

× Yes I take a random photos in my daily life because of all flowers so when I see it as a memory I have to make me happy or sometimes flowers so feel me look good.

✓ Yes, I take random photos of flowers daily because seeing them later makes me happy.

Simplify and use gerund forms where appropriate: 'seeing them' to express the action of viewing photos. Avoid mixing tenses and confusing pronouns.

× Is in my country people send a lot of flower to each other, especially in occasionally they send flowers to others.

✓ In my country, people send a lot of flowers to each other; especially on special occasions they send flowers to others.

Start with 'In my country' not 'Is in my country.' Use 'flowers' plural and 'on special occasions' instead of 'in occasionally.'

× Uh, it's uh, flower packet or umm if someone a good Osage or annual UMM program, they send flowers to teachers or sometimes students.

✓ They send bouquets of flowers, for example during religious ceremonies or annual programs; they often give them to teachers or sometimes to students.

'Flower packet' is unnatural; 'bouquet' or 'bunch of flowers' is correct. 'Someone a good Osage' unclear — likely 'during religious occasions' or 'special occasions.' Use plural agreement and clearer nouns.