Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and concise: start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar and word choice, avoid repetition, and add one specific reason or example. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "because", "and"). Keep to under five sentences.

例: Yes, I love flowers. I enjoy looking at them and buying them sometimes because their scent helps me relax and makes my home feel brighter. For example, I often buy a small bouquet of roses to put on my kitchen table because they lift my mood.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and correct vocabulary, and give specific details. Use linking words for coherence (e.g., "for example", "so"). Correct misplaced words and tenses ("Christmas" likely incorrect; use "chrysanthemums" if intended). Keep answers concise.

例: Yes, a good friend of mine loves lavender and chrysanthemums because their scent helps him relax after a busy day. For example, he keeps a small bunch on his desk so he can smell them while he works and reduce stress.

提案: Give a direct answer, fix wrong word choices, and include one or two specific examples of local flowers and seasons. Use a linking phrase to add contrast (e.g., "however"). Avoid unrelated words like "roads" or "recessions".

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live. My town has parks and gardens where you can see cherry blossoms in spring and chrysanthemums in autumn. However, it does depend on the season, and I especially enjoy them when they are in full bloom.

提案: Answer directly and correct word choices and grammar. Explain briefly why and add one specific example or exception using a linking word (e.g., "because", "but"). Keep it natural and under five sentences.

例: No, I hardly ever take photos of flowers because I rarely visit parks. When I do go out for a walk, I usually focus on exercising and don't stop to take pictures, although I sometimes take a quick photo if I see an unusual bloom.

提案: Good structure and relevant examples. Fix small inaccuracies and wording ("send them to funerals" not "send them food to funerals"). Add one specific cultural detail or common flower type to enrich the answer and use linking words (e.g., "for example", "also").

例: Yes, people often send flowers for special occasions. For example, they give bouquets for birthdays and anniversaries, and they also send funeral wreaths to express sympathy. In my country, lilies and roses are commonly used for these occasions.

× Yes, I'd approvals anatomy enjoy looking at them but also by them sometimes because they help me relax and motivate me to hard work work harder.

✓ Yes, I enjoy looking at them and sometimes buying them because they help me relax and motivate me to work harder.

The original sentence contains multiple incorrect words and word order which create sentence structure errors (ID 26). 'I'd approvals anatomy' and 'by them' are incorrect word choices; 'buying' is the correct verb form and should follow 'sometimes'. 'to hard work work harder' is ungrammatical; use the infinitive 'to work' with 'harder' as an adverb. Suggestion: remove extraneous fragments, choose correct verbs ('enjoy', 'buy'), and place modifiers in the proper order: 'sometimes buying them', 'help me relax and motivate me to work harder.'

× Yes, one of my friends likes lavender and Christmas because their scent helps him relax and wind after busy day.

✓ Yes, one of my friends likes lavender and chrysanthemum because their scent helps him relax and unwind after a busy day.

This sentence mixes errors: 'Christmas' is incorrect as a flower name and should be 'chrysanthemum'; that's a word choice rather than grammar, but pronoun use 'their scent helps him' is inconsistent: 'their' (plural) with 'him' (singular). However the scent of those flowers (plural) can be referred to as 'their scent' if speaking generally, but better to keep agreement: use 'their scent helps him relax and unwind after a busy day.' The main targeted grammar issue is inconsistent pronoun reference (ID 12). Also 'wind' should be 'unwind' (verb) and 'after busy day' needs article 'a'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree with the noun they refer to and use correct verbs and articles.

× He often keeps a small bunch of his desk to reduce stress while he works.

✓ He often keeps a small bunch on his desk to reduce stress while he works.

The original uses 'of his desk' which is incorrect preposition choice; the correct preposition for location is 'on' (ID 11). Suggestion: use 'on his desk' to indicate something placed atop the desk.

× Yes, there are a lot of flowers where I live. My town has many parks and gardens so I can see a wide variety of roads, such as cherry blossoms in spring and recessions in autumn.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of flowers where I live. My town has many parks and gardens so I can see a wide variety of trees and flowers, such as cherry blossoms in spring and roses in autumn.

The sentence contains incorrect nouns 'roads' and 'recessions' that break meaning and are not grammatical tense errors per se; focusing on present-tense consistency (ID 6), the verbs 'are', 'has', 'can see' are correct. However the main issues are wrong word choices: use 'trees and flowers' or 'plants', and 'roses' instead of 'recessions'. Suggestion: choose accurate nouns and keep present-tense verbs as used.

× Of course it depends on the season, but I always enjoy seeing them when they bloom.

✓ Of course it depends on the season, but I always enjoy seeing them when they bloom.

No correction needed; pronoun 'them' correctly refers back to 'flowers' and verb 'bloom' matches plural subject. This entry is included to show no change required (ID 12).

× No, I hardly ever take photos of provides.

✓ No, I hardly ever take photos of flowers.

The word 'provides' is incorrect; likely a mistaken word. The correct object is 'flowers'. This is a wrong word choice rather than pure pronoun error, but mapped to pronoun/word misuse (ID 12). Suggestion: use the correct noun for the object of 'take photos of.'

× I rarely visit parks or gardens and when I go out I usually walk around so I don't stop to photograph for this.

✓ I rarely visit parks or gardens, and when I go out I usually walk around, so I don't stop to take photographs for that purpose.

The original uses 'photograph for this' which is awkward; preposition and noun choice are incorrect (ID 11). 'Take photographs' is the correct verb phrase and 'for that purpose' clarifies intent. Suggestion: use standard collocations 'take photographs' and clearer prepositional phrases.

× For example, they give flowers to friends and family for birthdays and anniversaries, and they also send them food to funerals to pay their respects.

✓ For example, they give flowers to friends and family for birthdays and anniversaries, and they also send them to funerals to pay their respects.

The phrase 'send them food to funerals' is incorrect preposition and extra word 'food'; likely intended 'send them to funerals' meaning send flowers to funerals (ID 11). Suggestion: remove 'food' and use 'send them to funerals' or 'send flowers to funerals' for clarity.