Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and false words, and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Pronunciation and word choice need attention (e.g., 'heavy scars' unclear).

例: Yes, I love flowers. For example, I enjoy roses and lilies because of their vibrant colours and pleasant fragrance, and I often grow bulbs and roots at home, which makes my garden look lively.

提案: Make the response grammatical and clearer. Use a topic sentence, then support with concise details and linking words. Correct verb forms and clarify relationships (e.g., 'many relatives' is unclear).

例: Yes, my mother loves flowers. She often receives bouquets from relatives, especially roses and lilies, because people give them as gifts on special occasions.

提案: Respond directly and avoid repetition. Use linking words to organise details and correct word choices (e.g., 'rotor' unclear). Keep to 2–3 clear sentences describing types and atmosphere.

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live. For instance, red and white roses and lilies grow in the parks, which creates a peaceful and attractive environment.

提案: Be concise and correct repetitive phrasing. Begin with a clear statement, then briefly explain why you prefer not to photograph them. Improve vocabulary ('fragments' incorrect; use 'fragrance').

例: I don't usually take many photos of flowers because I prefer to enjoy their fragrance and appearance in person rather than capturing them on my phone.

提案: Make the answer more concise and fluent. Use correct vocabulary and grammar, and avoid repeating the same idea. Provide a brief example of occasions when flowers are sent.

例: Yes, people frequently send flowers in my country, especially roses as a symbol of love; for example, bouquets are common on Valentine’s Day and at weddings to express affection.

× Absolutely yes.

✓ Absolutely.

Using 'yes' after 'absolutely' is redundant and unnatural in this context. 'Absolutely' alone clearly affirms the question. Use single strong adverb instead of combining both.

× I love different varieties of flowers like roses, marigolds, lilies or heavy scars because they are of different color and I also love the fragrance of the flower and and especially I have brought about, uh, roots.

✓ I love different varieties of flowers like roses, marigolds and lilies because they have different colors, and I also love the fragrance of the flowers. I especially like their roots.

Multiple issues: 'or heavy scars' is incorrect word choice; replace with appropriate flower name or remove. 'are of different color' should be 'have different colors' (adjective/adverb and plural agreement). 'the fragrance of the flower' should be plural to match 'flowers'. 'and and' is duplication. 'I have brought about, uh, roots' is awkward; likely meant 'I especially like their roots' — use clear phrasing. Keep parallel structure and correct adjective/adverb usage.

× Yes, my mother really love loves flowers and she enjoy receiving different varieties of flowers, plants and many relatives.

✓ Yes, my mother really loves flowers and she enjoys receiving different varieties of flowers and plants.

Subject-verb agreement: with singular subject 'my mother' use third person singular verbs 'loves' and 'enjoys'. 'and many relatives' is misplaced and incorrect; remove or rephrase if intended (e.g., 'and many relatives do too').

× Also has given gift to her different kinds of flowers like roses, lilies or Marigold.

✓ People also give her different kinds of flowers, such as roses, lilies or marigolds, as gifts.

Missing subject and incorrect word order: start with a subject ('People' or 'They'). 'has given gift to her' is incorrect tense/structure; use 'give her ... as gifts'. Use plural 'marigolds' and 'such as' for examples.

× Yes, when I leave I can find different varieties of flowers like or white roses and red roses.

✓ Yes, where I live I can find different varieties of flowers, such as white and red roses.

Typo 'leave' should be 'live'. 'like or' is incorrect; use 'such as' or 'like' without 'or'. Combine 'white roses and red roses' to 'white and red roses' for concision.

× And also you can also find the rotor and the lilies growing there.

✓ You can also find roses and lilies growing there.

'rotor' is incorrect word choice; likely 'roses'. Remove duplicate 'also' and unnecessary definite article 'the' before flower names when speaking generally.

× And you can you you can have a peaceful environment and natural beautiful.

✓ You can have a peaceful and naturally beautiful environment.

Repeated words 'you can you you can' are disfluent. Word order and modifier form: 'natural beautiful' is incorrect — use adjective order 'naturally beautiful' (adverb + adjective) or 'natural and beautiful' depending on intended meaning.

× I love watching the flowers and I the smell, the smell of the flowers is really elegant and it's so fragments so I really love them.

✓ I love looking at the flowers and their scent. The smell of the flowers is really pleasant and fragrant, so I really love them.

Grammar and word choice: 'watching the flowers' is acceptable but 'looking at' is more natural. 'I the smell' is missing verb. 'elegant' is odd for scent; use 'pleasant' or 'nice'. 'it's so fragments' is incorrect; intended 'fragrant' or 'fragrance'. Ensure correct adjective forms.

× But in my daily life I do not take that much photo of them.

✓ But in my daily life I do not take many photos of them.

Countable noun 'photo' requires plural 'photos' and quantifier 'many' rather than 'much'. Use 'take many photos' for frequency.

× Rather than rather than taking photos, I enjoy seeing them.

✓ Rather than taking photos, I enjoy just looking at them.

Duplicate phrase 'Rather than rather than' is error. 'Seeing them' is acceptable but 'looking at them' or 'just looking at them' is more natural in this context.

× Yes, many people in my country send flowers to their lob lob one because as we know, roses are the symbol of love where many loved one gives to each other to express their feelings to each other.

✓ Yes, many people in my country send flowers to their loved ones because, as we know, roses are a symbol of love and many loved ones give them to each other to express their feelings.

'lob lob one' is garbled; correct phrase 'loved ones'. Subject-verb agreement: 'many loved one gives' should be 'many loved ones give'. Use article 'a symbol' for general statement. Remove repetition 'to each other' once.

× So yes, many people in my country often send flowers to each other to express their love.

✓ So yes, many people in my country often send flowers to each other to express their love.

This sentence is correct; kept as is. It correctly uses plural pronouns and verbs and clearly states the idea.