Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản (số nhiều/số ít, động từ), loại bỏ lặp từ và làm câu tự nhiên hơn. Hãy mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ loại hoa hoặc cảm xúc) và dùng liên từ để nối ý cho mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they symbolize love and peace. For example, roses make me feel romantic while lilies create a calm atmosphere, so I often enjoy having them at home.

提案: Tránh khẳng định quá rộng ("all women") và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (đại từ, động từ). Nên trả lời trực tiếp rồi nêu một ví dụ cụ thể về người bạn biết và cảm xúc của họ để thuyết phục hơn.

例: Yes, I know many people who like flowers, especially my sister who keeps a small bouquet on her desk. She says flowers cheer her up after a long day, so she often buys tulips or carnations.

提案: Sửa đại từ (my father — he) và danh từ số nhiều/số ít, sắp xếp câu cho tự nhiên hơn. Bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể về khu vườn hoặc những hoạt động liên quan để làm câu phong phú hơn, dùng liên từ để nối ý.

例: Yes, there are many flowers near my home because my father has a large garden where he grows roses, sunflowers and lilies. Living there helps me relax and clear my mind when I walk among the plants.

提案: Sửa cấu trúc động từ và danh từ (take photos, the beauty, these plants), bỏ tiếng lấp lửng (umm). Nên nói 1–2 câu ngắn gọn về tần suất chụp và lý do cụ thể để tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers because they capture the beauty of nature. For instance, I photograph morning dew on roses to remember peaceful moments and it always cheers me up.

提案: Sửa ngữ pháp (men/women, send/sends), tránh lặp từ và tiếng tắc lưỡi. Trả lời rõ ràng về thói quen xã hội rồi nêu ví dụ cụ thể về những dịp và ai gửi cho ai.

例: Yes, men often give flowers to women on special occasions such as Valentine's Day, weddings and anniversaries. However, people also exchange bouquets at graduations or when visiting someone in hospital.

× Yes, I really love flowers because of flowers, a symbol for love, a peaceful and the beautiful song.

✓ Yes, I really love flowers because they are a symbol of love, peaceful, and beautiful.

The sentence incorrectly mixes noun phrases and articles. Use a pronoun 'they' to refer to flowers and correct adjective/adverb forms: 'a symbol of love' not 'a symbol for love'; remove 'the' before 'beautiful' and use parallel adjectives 'peaceful and beautiful'. Also 'song' is incorrect contextually; replaced with 'beautiful'. Suggestions: use pronouns for cohesion and keep adjective parallelism.

× I think flowers is the most beautiful things in the world.

✓ I think flowers are the most beautiful things in the world.

Subject 'flowers' is plural, so the verb must be plural 'are' not 'is'. Also 'things' is plural and matches. Suggestion: match verb number with subject: plural subjects take plural verbs.

× Yes, I think all women all love flowers because we just love the beautiful, the charming and the symbol of flowers.

✓ Yes, I think all women love flowers because we just love their beauty, charm, and symbolism.

Redundant 'all' and incorrect noun forms. Use possessive pronoun 'their' to describe attributes of flowers, and use nouns 'beauty, charm, symbolism' instead of adjectives with articles. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use correct noun forms.

× When someone's bring me flowers, it is great.

✓ When someone brings me flowers, it is great.

Incorrect verb form 'bring' after singular 'someone'. Use third person singular 'brings'. Also avoid contraction 'someone's' which suggests 'someone is' or 'someone has'; use 'someone'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and avoid ambiguous contractions.

× Are there a lot of flowers where you live?

✓ Are there a lot of flowers where you live?

This question is already correct. 'There are' structure is appropriate for asking about existence/quantity. No change needed.

× Yes, my father has a big garden and she plants so many flowers like rose, sunflower and a Lily.

✓ Yes, my father has a big garden and he plants so many flowers like roses, sunflowers, and lilies.

Pronoun 'she' contradicts 'my father'; use 'he'. Use plural nouns for examples: 'roses, sunflowers, lilies' and remove unnecessary article 'a' before Lily. Suggestion: keep pronouns consistent and pluralize common nouns when listing examples.

× I think living in this condition makes me feel, unwind and refresh my mind.

✓ I think living in this environment helps me relax and refresh my mind.

Unnatural phrase 'makes me feel, unwind' and 'this condition' is awkward. Use present tense 'helps me relax' and the noun 'environment'. Suggestion: use appropriate verbs for mental states and smooth collocations: 'relax and refresh my mind.'

× Yes, I think take a photos of flowers is a way to memorize the beautiful of this plants because the picture makes me feel happy and umm love the life.

✓ Yes, I think taking photos of flowers is a way to remember the beauty of these plants because the pictures make me feel happy and love life.

Missing gerund form: use 'taking' as subject. Plural 'photos' and 'these plants' require agreement. 'Memorize the beautiful' is incorrect; use 'remember the beauty'. 'Picture' should be plural to match 'photos'. Suggestion: use gerund for activities and correct noun forms.

× In my country the the male usually send flowers to female uh, in special day like uh, Valentine or uh, other celebration umm uh, in daily life and they still.

✓ In my country men usually send flowers to women on special days like Valentine's Day or other celebrations, and they sometimes do so in daily life.

Use plural 'men' and 'women' instead of 'the male'/'female'. Use preposition 'on' for days: 'on special days'. 'Valentine' should be 'Valentine's Day'. The original sentence ends abruptly; 'they sometimes do so in daily life' completes the idea. Suggestion: use correct nouns for people and correct prepositions for time expressions.