Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Keep your answer direct and concise with correct grammar and a clear topic sentence. Fix verb agreement and reduce redundancy. Use one linking phrase to add a brief reason or example. Aim for 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I love flowers. They make me feel happy and relaxed whenever I see them in a shop, because their colors and scent brighten my mood.

提案: Avoid long repetitive clauses and use clearer phrasing. Start with a direct response, then give one specific reason using a linking word. Correct awkward expressions like “don't understand the value of flowers that they have.”

例: No, not really. Most of my friends and family prefer practical gifts, so they rarely appreciate flowers; I’m probably the only one who actively enjoys them.

提案: Use natural noun forms and smoother linking phrases. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add a contrasting detail with a linking word. Correct phrasing like “they are not” to “there aren’t many.”

例: Not many, no. There are more trees in my city, but if you visit the nearby National Nature Park you can see many flowers, especially in spring.

提案: Keep answers natural and concise, fixing awkward phrases like “daily basis.” Use one linking word and give a brief specific example of when you take photos.

例: Yes, I often photograph flowers because they’re rare in my town; I take pictures when I visit the park so I can remember their colors and shapes.

提案: Correct grammar and unclear phrases. Start with a direct answer, then give a clear example of occasions and avoid confusing wording like “listening and giving flowers.” Use one linking word to connect ideas.

例: Yes, people often send flowers for birthdays, weddings and funerals. For instance, it’s common to give a bouquet on someone’s birthday or to bring flowers to a wedding ceremony.

× Yes I do because every time I see flowers at store they always makes me feel happy and relaxed so I really love flowers.

✓ Yes, I do, because every time I see flowers at the store they always make me feel happy and relaxed, so I really love flowers.

The verb 'makes' does not agree with the plural subject 'flowers'. Use 'make' for plural subjects. Also add 'the' before 'store' and commas improve clarity. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject number and include necessary articles.

× No I don't because all my friends and family dislike flowers because they don't understand the value of flowers that they have.

✓ No, I don't, because all my friends and family dislike flowers; they don't understand the value of the flowers they have.

The clause 'that they have' is awkward; replace with 'they have' and use a semicolon or period to separate ideas. Also add 'the' before 'flowers' to indicate specific possessions. Clarify pronoun reference by restructuring the sentence.

× No, they are not. I see more trees than flowers in my city, but when you go to Nature National Nature Park near my house, you can see a lot of flowers.

✓ No, there are not many. I see more trees than flowers in my city, but when you go to the Nature National Park near my house, you can see a lot of flowers.

The reply 'No, they are not' is incorrect for 'Are there a lot of flowers...'; use 'No, there are not many' (there be issue but fits subject-verb agreement). Also 'Nature National Nature Park' repeats words; correct to 'the Nature National Park' and add 'the' before park. Ensure correct existential construction: 'there are' for existence.

× Yes I do because it's really rare for me to see flowers in my daily basis, especially in my town, so I usually take photos of them otherwise I might forget.

✓ Yes, I do, because it's really rare for me to see flowers in my daily life, especially in my town, so I usually take photos of them; otherwise I might forget.

'Daily basis' is incorrect collocation here; use 'daily life'. Add commas and a semicolon before 'otherwise' for clarity. Ensure articles and fixed expressions are used correctly.

× Yes they do because they usually give flowers to others people when birthdays or some special occasions.

✓ Yes, they do, because people usually give flowers to others on birthdays or on special occasions.

'Others people' is incorrect; use 'others' or 'other people' but better restructure: 'people give flowers to others'. Also 'when birthdays' should be 'on birthdays'. Use preposition 'on' for days/occasions.

× So it's really common in listening and giving flowers.

✓ So it's really common to give and receive flowers.

The phrase 'in listening and giving flowers' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use the verbs 'give and receive' to express the common practice. This corrects word choice and sentence structure.