Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear, concise response and organize ideas: state your preference, explain why with specific reasons, and avoid grammar errors. Use correct noun forms and simple linking words (because, and, so). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I love flowers, especially sunflowers. I prefer sunflowers because they look bright and cheerful and to me they symbolize happiness and strong friendship.

提案: Answer directly and clearly: name the person and explain a specific reason why they like flowers. Use correct pronouns and avoid repetition. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and include a linking word (because, so).

例: Yes, I have a friend who loves flowers, especially roses. She became fond of them because a novel she enjoyed described a character who always received roses, so they remind her of that story.

提案: Be direct and specific about your area: say whether there are many flowers and give one clear reason or personal wish. Use correct sentence structure and linking words (however, but, so). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Not many flowers grow where I live because it is mostly urban with few gardens. However, I wish there were more, and I would love to live near a field of sunflowers because they look lovely and cheerful.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail about when or why you photograph flowers. Use correct verb forms and a linking word (for example, recently, because). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers because I enjoy capturing their colors. For example, recently I photographed many flowers in a local park while walking in the morning.

提案: Answer directly about common customs, then add a clear personal opinion. Use simple, correct sentences and avoid unclear phrases. Use linking words like however or sometimes. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers for celebrations or funerals. However, some people prefer to give practical gifts, and personally I would rather give a book if I had the chance.

× Yes, I definitely love flowers, especially sunflower in overflower.

✓ Yes, I definitely love flowers, especially sunflowers in fields of flowers.

The noun 'sunflower' should be plural 'sunflowers' when speaking generally. 'Overflower' is not correct; likely intended 'fields of flowers' or 'flower fields'. Use plural nouns for general statements and correct collocation 'fields of flowers'. Suggestion: use 'sunflowers' and 'flower fields'.

× I love sunflower the best, but it means happiness and it prefer to kind of friendship, healthy friendship.

✓ I love sunflowers the best; they symbolize happiness and represent a kind of healthy friendship.

Pronouns must agree in number with their antecedents. 'Sunflower' should be plural 'sunflowers', so pronouns should be 'they' and 'represent' (plural). 'Prefer' is incorrect here; 'prefer' means 'to like more' and is not appropriate. Use 'symbolize' and 'represent' for meanings. Also reword 'kind of friendship, healthy friendship' to 'a kind of healthy friendship' for clarity.

× Yes that I have a friend who love to to lose the most and I think she love that shoeless because of 1 fictional novel that he really loved to read and if I have a chance to give that truly I really want to.

✓ Yes, I have a friend who loves them the most, and I think she loves those flowers because of a fictional novel she really liked, and if I had the chance I would really like to give them to her.

Pronoun and agreement issues: 'who love' should be 'who loves' to agree with singular 'friend'. 'To to lose the most' unclear; assumed 'loves them the most'. 'She love' -> 'she loves'. 'That shoeless' unclear; interpreted as 'those flowers'. '1' should be 'a'. Pronoun 'he' mismatches 'she'; change to 'she'. Tense and conditional: 'if I have a chance' -> 'if I had the chance' or 'if I have the chance' depending; here conditional 'would like to give' fits with 'if I had the chance'.

× No, definitely that is any flower around my area that I wish it could be a round of flowers that around the flowers where I live in especially I really want to live in the crown of sunflower because I think you look really.

✓ No, there are not many flowers around my area; I wish there were fields of flowers where I live. I especially want to live near a field of sunflowers because I think it looks beautiful.

Multiple errors: use plural for 'flowers' and correct existential construction 'there are not many flowers' rather than 'that is any flower'. 'A round of flowers' is incorrect—use 'fields of flowers'. 'Crown of sunflower' unclear—use 'field of sunflowers' or 'a field of sunflowers'. Pronoun and verb agreement fixed: 'I wish there were' (subjunctive) and 'it looks beautiful'.

× Yes, definitely. I am that kind of person who always take photos when I see that I love or I interested.

✓ Yes, definitely. I am the kind of person who always takes photos when I see something I love or find interesting.

Subject-verb agreement: 'who always take' should be 'who always takes' because 'who' refers to singular 'person'. Use appropriate relative clause: 'when I see something I love' and 'find interesting' instead of 'I interested'. Use 'find' to form the adjective complement.

× Recently I have a lot of photo which I took.

✓ Recently I have taken a lot of photos.

Plural form 'photos' required. 'A lot of' should modify plural noun. The original word order 'I have a lot of photo which I took' is awkward; prefer present perfect 'I have taken a lot of photos' or 'I have a lot of photos that I took'. Suggestion: use 'I have taken a lot of photos recently.'

× Yes, but I think there's a really it come with that once a personality, if one is the one to send a flower or bouquet to someone, in their mind they would.

✓ Yes, but I think it depends on the person's personality; if someone decides to send flowers or a bouquet to another person, they usually have a reason in mind.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'There's a really it come with that once a personality' is incorrect. Use 'it depends on the person's personality' to express conditional. 'If one is the one to send' is awkward; use 'if someone decides to send'. Modal/auxiliary usage: 'they usually have a reason in mind' clarifies intent.

× So I couldn't jam that clearly indirectly, but in my personality, I really want to send a book to someone if I have a chance.

✓ So I couldn't express that clearly or indirectly, but personally I would really like to give a book to someone if I had the chance.

'Jam' is incorrect verb here; likely meant 'express'. 'In my personality' is unnatural; use 'personally'. Use conditional 'if I had the chance' with 'would really like' for hypothetical. Also 'send a book' -> 'give a book' is more natural for a gift.