Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сократите повторы и избегайте заполнителей («umm»). Начните с прямого топик предложения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных детали. Исправьте грамматику (например, «my favorite flowers is» → «my favourite flower is»). Пример плана: утверждение + краткая причина + конкретный пример из прошлого.

例: Yes, I love flowers. I grew up with a small garden and used to water it every day, so I especially like roses because of their scent and colour.

提案: Ответ неясен и грамматически некорректен. Дайте ясный топик и конкретный пример (кто именно и как проявляет любовь к цветам). Избегайте обобщений и обеспечьте связку причиной или примером.

例: Yes, my aunt loves flowers — she keeps many potted plants at home and spends weekends arranging bouquets for friends.

提案: Ответ содержит повторения и фразы без смысла. Дайте чёткое описание с конкретными примерами мест и видов цветов, используйте связки («for example», «especially») и избегайте беспорядочных слов.

例: Yes, there are many flowers in my neighbourhood, especially in public parks and private gardens — you can often see roses and lilies in spring.

提案: Фраза неструктурирована и содержит вопросы без смысла. Начните с прямого ответа, затем поясните, как часто и в каких ситуациях вы фотографируете (чёткое время/ситуация). Уберите лишние паузы и фрагменты.

例: Yes, I often photograph flowers, especially when someone gives me a bouquet — I usually take a photo to remember the gift and share it on social media.

提案: Уберите заполнители и исправьте порядок слов и согласование. Дайте более точные примеры поводов и, при возможности, уточните какие цветы или традиции связаны с этими событиями.

例: Yes, people often send flowers on special occasions, such as birthdays and New Year; for instance, roses and mixed bouquets are common gifts.

× I would say definitely yes. I'm actually a big fan of flowers and umm I had a garden when I was a child and since my childhood I love to water it and my favorite flowers is roses.

✓ I would definitely say yes. I'm actually a big fan of flowers. I had a garden when I was a child, and since my childhood I have loved watering it. My favorite flowers are roses.

Errors: incorrect present simple with 'love' for a situation continuing from the past; incorrect verb agreement 'is roses' with plural noun. Suggestions: use present perfect 'have loved' to show an action starting in the past and continuing to the present; match plural subject 'roses' with plural verb 'are'. Explanation in English: The phrase 'since my childhood' requires present perfect ('have loved') to connect past to present. 'Roses' is plural, so use 'are' not 'is'.

× I would definitely say yes because as a woman who adores the flower.

✓ I would definitely say yes because I am a woman who adores flowers.

Errors: sentence fragment and incorrect article 'the flower' and missing subject for the clause. Suggestions: include the verb 'am' after 'I' to complete the sentence; use plural 'flowers' without 'the' for general statement. Explanation in English: The original lacks a main verb and uses 'the flower' which implies a specific flower; for general liking use 'flowers'.

× Yes, there are quite a lot of flowers where I live. People occasionally water and water flowers, especially roses, lilies and people. It people and flowers make them.

✓ Yes, there are quite a lot of flowers where I live. People occasionally water the flowers, especially roses and lilies. People and flowers make the area beautiful.

Errors: redundant phrase 'water and water flowers', wrong list 'roses, lilies and people', and unclear sentence 'It people and flowers make them.' Suggestions: simplify to 'water the flowers'; list only plant types; clarify the intended meaning by saying 'People and flowers make the area beautiful.' Explanation in English: Fix repetition and incorrect addition of 'people' in the list of flowers; replace unclear pronoun usage with a clear noun phrase.

× Is a person who is a big fan of taking photos? I would say definitely yes, especially when somebody. Give me flowers as a gift, I always take photos of them.

✓ I am a person who is a big fan of taking photos. I would definitely say yes, especially when somebody gives me flowers as a gift; I always take photos of them.

Errors: question form used instead of statement, sentence fragment 'especially when somebody.' and incorrect capitalization. Suggestions: use declarative 'I am' to answer the question; join fragments and correct verb 'gives' for third person singular. Explanation in English: The response should be a statement, not a question. Also 'somebody gives' needs present simple third person singular.

× I would say definitely yes. In my country the majority of people umm or gives umm flower to others on special. Events, for example on birthdays and in the new year.

✓ I would definitely say yes. In my country the majority of people give flowers to others on special occasions, for example on birthdays and during the New Year.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'gives' with plural subject 'people'; missing plural 'flowers'; awkward phrase 'on special. Events'. Suggestions: use 'give' to match plural subject, use 'flowers', and replace with 'special occasions' and 'during the New Year' for natural phrasing. Explanation in English: 'People' is plural so the verb should be 'give'. Use 'occasions' for events and 'during the New Year' or 'for the New Year' for clarity.