Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), correct vocabulary (e.g. "jasmine" not "jamba"), and use 2–3 supporting details with linking words. Mention where you grow them and why you like red ones with one reason. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I love flowers, especially red ones because they look vibrant and cheerful. I grow roses and jasmine in my garden, and I enjoy caring for them because planting relaxes me and brightens my home.

提案: Clarify who you mean and use correct pronouns. Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Remove irrelevant or confusing comments. Use simple past/present tense consistently.

例: Yes, my close friend loves flowers. She often asks me for a flower and her husband surprises her with flowers in the morning on special occasions.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific location detail using linking words. Use correct nouns (e.g. "jasmine"), singular/plural agreement and avoid vague words like "lovers"—say "flower beds" or "garden". Keep sentences short and accurate.

例: Not many flowers grow near my home because I live in a rural area. However, there are many flower beds in the nearby park where you can see red roses and jasmine.

提案: Be direct and organize the answer: state frequency, then give specific situations using linking words like "usually" or "sometimes". Correct grammar (e.g. "I don't have much time"). Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

例: Sometimes I take photos of flowers, especially when I visit the park or see attractive displays outside someone's house. I often upload the best pictures to social media, but I don't do it regularly because I don't have much free time.

提案: Give a clear general statement, then add two specific examples of occasions when flowers are given. Use correct vocabulary ("bouquets", "weddings", "birthdays") and avoid unclear phrases like "a lot of papers". Keep it concise and coherent.

例: Yes, people in my country often give flowers. For example, it's common to bring bouquets to birthdays, weddings, and funerals as a sign of respect or celebration.

× Yes I love flowers especially I love red flowers because uh it's my weakness and fresh flower are more like in my garden.

✓ Yes, I love flowers. Especially, I love red flowers because they are my weakness and fresh flowers are more common in my garden.

Pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to 'red flowers' (plural) so use 'they'. 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' to match meaning. Also 'are more like in my garden' is awkward; correct to 'are more common in my garden.' Use commas for clarity.

× I also grow the some flowers like rose flower and jamba flowers.

✓ I also grow some flowers like roses and jamba flowers.

Article 'the' is unnecessary before 'some'; 'rose flower' should be plural 'roses' to match 'some flowers.' Ensure consistent plural forms.

× Yes I know my friend who is loves flower they always just want a flower from me and from her her husband.

✓ Yes, I know a friend who loves flowers; they always want a flower from me and from her husband.

Remove extra 'is' before 'loves'. Use 'a friend' for indefinite reference. 'Flower' should be plural 'flowers' to match general meaning. 'They' can be used as a singular gender-neutral pronoun; remove duplicated 'her'.

× But sometime he just remembered when he'll get up early in the morning and he want like a flower form their husband.

✓ But sometimes he remembers when he gets up early in the morning and he wants a flower from his husband.

'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. Use present simple 'remembers' and 'gets' for habitual actions. 'He wants' requires third person singular 'wants'. 'Form' is a typo for 'from'. Use 'his husband' to match pronoun gender.

× So he is just I'm sad that he just loved his bloggers.

✓ So I am just sad that he only loved his bloggers.

Original mixes subjects 'he' and 'I'm' causing confusion. Clarify speaker: 'I am sad that he only loved his bloggers.' 'Just' placed twice is redundant; 'only' clarifies limitation. 'Loved' may be past or present—use past if referring to a past action.

× No, there is not plenty of flowers where I live because I live in the area outside and there is no too much flowers nearest to me.

✓ No, there are not many flowers where I live because I live in an outside area and there are not many flowers near me.

'There is' should be 'there are' for plural 'flowers' (subject-verb agreement). 'Not plenty of' is unidiomatic; use 'not many'. 'Area outside' better as 'outside area' or 'an area outside'. 'Nearest to me' -> 'near me.'

× But near the park of my house there is a lot of lovers.

✓ But near the park by my house there are a lot of flowers.

'Lovers' is incorrect word choice for 'flowers'. 'There is a lot of' should be 'there are a lot of' for plural. 'Near the park of my house' better as 'near the park by my house.'

× There are variable. There is a red flowers and jamberry flowers also available.

✓ There are various types. There are red flowers and jamberry flowers available as well.

'Variable' is wrong choice; use 'various' or 'various types'. Use 'There are' for plural. 'A red flowers' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' and use plural agreement.

× Well, let's depend on the situation.

✓ Well, it depends on the situation.

'Let's depend' suggests a suggestion but speaker means a statement about habit: 'It depends.' Use correct structure for explaining conditional/habitual behavior.

× Sometime I just take a a lot of pictures of flowers in daily life because I like it.

✓ Sometimes I take a lot of pictures of flowers in my daily life because I like them.

'Sometime' -> 'Sometimes' for frequency. Remove duplicate 'a'. 'Daily life' better as 'my daily life'. 'It' should be 'them' referring to 'pictures' or 'flowers' (plural).

× Whenever I go to the park, if I see their flowers in any front of their house then I take some pictures and upload on the social media.

✓ Whenever I go to the park, if I see flowers in front of someone's house, I take some pictures and upload them to social media.

Use 'flowers' without 'their' unless a specific owner is meant; 'any front of their house' is ungrammatical — use 'in front of someone's house.' 'Upload on the social media' -> 'upload them to social media.' Include object pronoun 'them' for 'pictures.'

× But most of the time I just ignore it because I have not a lot of time to take these pictures.

✓ But most of the time I just ignore them because I do not have a lot of time to take these pictures.

'Ignore it' should be 'ignore them' referring to pictures. Use 'do not have' (do-support) for present simple negative. 'Have not a lot of time' is unidiomatic; 'do not have a lot of time' is correct.

× Yes, in my country, a lot of papers, the sunflowers are either especially the flowers or send the flowers with each other.

✓ Yes, in my country, people often give flowers to each other on special occasions.

'A lot of papers' is wrong word choice; should be 'people.' The original sentence has confusing structure; simplify to clarify common practice. 'Sunflowers' and other fragments were irrelevant or mistranslated.

× Most of the people uh, take the flowers when they go to their birthdays or any, any events.

✓ Most people take flowers when they go to birthdays or other events.

'The people' -> 'Most people'. 'Their birthdays' could be 'birthdays' in general. Remove filler 'uh' and duplicate 'any'. Use 'other events' instead of 'any, any events.'

× So they just prefer to give the flowers or the bouquet of the flowers.

✓ So they prefer to give flowers or bouquets of flowers.

Unnecessary definite articles 'the' before general nouns; remove them when speaking generally. Use plural 'bouquets' to match general practice.