Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and precise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct word choice (use 'lilies' not 'Lilium' for common speech), avoid redundancy, and limit length to 2–4 sentences. Use linking words to add one specific detail (reason or example).

例: Yes, I love flowers, especially lilies, because of their elegant shape and strong scent. For example, white lilies in my garden always brighten my mood and smell wonderful when they bloom.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: begin with a direct topic sentence, use correct verbs and nouns (e.g., 'is fond of flowers' or 'likes flowers'), avoid confusing phrases ('loves ladies' is unclear). Add a supporting detail explaining how your mother shows this interest.

例: Yes, my mother is fond of flowers and often buys bouquets for special occasions. For instance, she usually sends roses on birthdays and decorates the house with fresh blooms during festivals.

提案: Make answers more concise and accurate: use present tense consistently, avoid filler words, and use linking words to connect points (e.g., 'and' → 'also'/'in addition'). Provide one specific example of a park or flower type to make it vivid.

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live. For example, Central Park has large beds of tulips and roses that bloom in spring, and many residents grow potted flowers on their balconies.

提案: Be succinct and natural: start with a clear negation then give a concise reason using correct grammar ('in person' instead of 'in face'). Optionally add a brief contrast or exception to enrich the answer.

例: No, I don't usually take photos of flowers because I prefer to enjoy them in person rather than through a camera. However, I might take a picture if a bloom is especially unusual or beautiful.

提案: Clarify and be specific: use precise phrasing ('common' or 'popular' rather than 'very important'), avoid hesitations, and give a concrete example of occasions or types of flowers used to illustrate the point.

例: Yes, sending flowers is common in my country; people give bouquets for weddings, funerals and birthdays. For example, red roses are popular for romantic occasions, while white chrysanthemums are often used at funerals.

× Yes, I really love flowers, especially the Lilium one because it has very good skins and I think they're very beautiful and of various colors of them make me feel interested.

✓ Yes, I really love flowers, especially the lily, because it has very nice petals and I think they are very beautiful; their various colors interest me.

Errors: 'Lilium one' is awkward — use common name 'lily'. 'Very good skins' is incorrect word choice and plural form; 'petals' is appropriate. 'They're' refers to flowers (plural) so use 'they are' or 'they're' and then restructure second clause to avoid 'of various colors of them make me feel interested' which is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use clear nouns (petals), correct agreement (they are), and a simpler clause ('their various colors interest me').

× Yes, my mother is willing to flowers and she really like to get flowers for special occasions and also she loves ladies too, she found them really amazing.

✓ Yes, my mother likes flowers and she really likes to get them for special occasions; she also loves giving them to women because she finds them amazing.

Errors: 'is willing to flowers' is ungrammatical — likely intended 'likes' (verb choice). 'She really like' is subject-verb agreement error (she likes). 'She loves ladies too' is awkward and possibly incorrect vocabulary; 'giving them to women' clarifies action. 'She found them' mixes tenses — use present 'finds' to match general habit. Suggestion: use correct verb choice 'likes', ensure 'likes' for third person singular, and keep tense consistent (present simple for habitual actions).

× Yes, we have lots of parks with different types of flowers in various colors and they were beautiful and they have very good smell. And umm, local residents also plant flowers.

✓ Yes, we have lots of parks with different types of flowers in various colors; they are beautiful and have a very pleasant scent. Also, local residents plant flowers.

Errors: 'they were beautiful' uses past tense but context describes current state — use present 'they are'. 'They have very good smell' is awkward; use 'have a very pleasant scent' or 'smell nice'. Suggestion: maintain present tense for general facts and use natural collocations ('pleasant scent').

× No I don't because I prefer enjoy the flowers in face rather than take a photo of them because I don't find it interesting to take pictures of flowers.

✓ No, I don't because I prefer to enjoy the flowers in person rather than take photos of them; I don't find photographing flowers interesting.

Errors: 'prefer enjoy' needs infinitive 'to enjoy' or gerund 'enjoying' after 'prefer'. 'In face' is incorrect preposition/phrase — use 'in person'. 'Take a photo of them' is acceptable but 'take photos' is more natural. Suggestion: use correct verb form after 'prefer' and idiomatic expressions ('in person'), and simplify repetition by using 'photographing flowers'.

× Yes, sending flowers to others is very important in my country and they send flowers to their loved ones to celebrate special occasions and also show their, uh, relationship with them.

✓ Yes, sending flowers is very important in my country; people send flowers to their loved ones to celebrate special occasions and to show their affection.

Errors: 'they send' is vague but acceptable; clearer to use 'people send'. 'Also show their, uh, relationship with them' is awkward and redundant — 'relationship with them' is unclear and 'show their affection' is a natural phrase. Suggestion: use a general subject 'people', avoid filler words, and choose concise noun 'affection' or 'feelings' to express intent.