Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details. Avoid hesitations and repetition, and correct small grammar issues (e.g., “flowers make you happy”). Use linking words like ‘for example’ to add clarity.

例: Yes, I love flowers, especially red roses and bright yellow marigolds. For example, red roses feel romantic to me, while marigolds cheer me up because of their vivid color and fragrance.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and one or two precise supporting details. Fix grammar (e.g., ‘she actually knows’). Use a linking word like ‘for instance’ to connect ideas. Avoid filler words like ‘actually’ and ‘but yeah’.

例: Yes, my grandmother loves flowers and knows the names of almost every plant. For instance, she can identify roses, lilies and chrysanthemums by sight, which I find impressive and inspiring.

提案: Give a clear, grammatical response and explain with a specific reason or example. Correct grammar (e.g., ‘people who live there’ and ‘pick them’). Use a linking phrase such as ‘however’ correctly and finish the thought.

例: Yes, there are quite a lot of flowers where I live. However, many people pick the flowers or trample them, so they don't last long in public parks.

提案: Start with a direct answer and give a specific frequency or example. Remove filler phrases like ‘I mean’. Use linking words such as ‘often’ or ‘for example’ to make the response natural and concise.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers when I go out. For example, I usually photograph flowers in local parks during weekend walks because I love their colors and shapes.

提案: Give a clear, grammatically correct statement with one or two specific conditions when people do send flowers. Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases (‘when it's when there is an O’). Use linking words like ‘only’ or ‘mainly’ to clarify frequency.

例: Not usually. People in my country mainly send flowers only on big occasions, such as weddings or funerals, rather than for everyday events.

× Yes I do love flowers, especially red roses and I don't know what is it called but the one in yellow, I don't know what it's called but I think that flowers makes you happy just seeing it or smelling it.

✓ Yes, I do love flowers, especially red roses, and I don't know what the one in yellow is called, but I think that flowers make you happy just by seeing or smelling them.

Pronoun and word order issues: 'what is it called' should be in indirect question order 'what the one in yellow is called'. 'Flowers makes' is subject-verb agreement error (plural subject requires 'make'). 'Seeing it or smelling it' uses 'it' singular for 'flowers'; use plural pronoun 'them' and a clearer gerund phrase 'by seeing or smelling them'. Add commas for clarity.

× Yes, I do. Actually. My grandmother, she loves flowers and she actually know every single one's name, which I don't, and that's so impressive.

✓ Yes, I do. Actually, my grandmother loves flowers and she actually knows every single one's name, which I don't, and that's so impressive.

Third person singular verb form: after subject 'she' the verb should be 'knows' not 'know'. Also avoid redundant subject pronoun 'she' after 'my grandmother' or keep without comma; punctuation adjusted for natural speech.

× I actually want to be like her.

✓ I actually want to be like her.

No grammatical correction necessary; sentence is correct. Included here to indicate checked item; keep as is.

× But yeah, I think that's hard, and only flower lovers can do that.

✓ But yeah, I think that's hard, and only flower lovers can do that.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It uses pronouns and structure appropriately.

× However I people who lives there mostly destroy them by picking it and I don't know.

✓ However, the people who live there mostly destroy them by picking them, and I don't know.

Multiple issues: missing article before 'people' and wrong verb agreement 'people who live' (plural 'live', not 'lives'). Pronoun mismatch 'picking it' should be 'picking them' referring to 'flowers'. Added comma and article 'the' for clarity.

× I mean, yes, I love taking pictures of anything I saw that I liked.

✓ I mean, yes, I love taking pictures of anything I see that I like.

Tense consistency: speaking about habits requires present simple 'see' and 'like', not past 'saw'/'liked'. Changed to present tense to match habitual action.

× So yes, I do take pictures of flowers when I go out or see them.

✓ So yes, I do take pictures of flowers when I go out or when I see them.

Sentence is mostly correct; added 'when' for parallel structure and clarity. Present simple is appropriate for habitual actions.

× No, uh, they don't send flowers. I mean, when it's when there is an O and a big occasion, they do.

✓ No, they don't usually send flowers. I mean, when there is a special or big occasion, they do.

Awkward phrasing and repetition: removed filler 'uh' and duplicate 'when it's when'. Replaced 'an O' (unclear) with 'a special' to convey intended meaning. Present simple 'don't send' is correct for general truth; 'they do' is fine for exceptions.

× But unless, no, they don't.

✓ But otherwise, no, they don't.

Awkward and unclear structure: 'But unless, no' is not standard. 'Otherwise, no, they don't' or 'But generally, no' provides clearer contrast. Kept negative response consistent.