Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and avoid hesitations; use correct tenses and give a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details. For example, say how often you buy them using natural phrasing, name varieties clearly, and add a brief reason or preference. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words like 'usually' or 'for example'.

例: Yes, I love flowers. I usually buy them once a week — often roses, lilies or lotuses — because they brighten up my home and lift my mood.

提案: Clarify and organize your response: start with a direct topic sentence, then give specific details (who, what they like, and why). Avoid unclear phrases and pronunciation mistakes. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'because' to make the answer coherent. Replace unclear words with correct flower names or descriptions.

例: Yes, my mother loves flowers. For example, she prefers strongly scented varieties like jasmine and gardenias because their fragrance makes the house feel welcoming.

提案: Give a clear, structured description with correct grammar and specific locations. Use linking words such as 'in front of' and 'behind' without repetition. Mention types or colors if possible to add detail. Keep it concise (2–4 sentences).

例: Yes, there are many flowers around my house. In front of the house there is a small flower bed by the pool, and in the backyard there are several flower borders with colourful annuals and shrubs.

提案: Be more fluent and natural: use correct verb forms and linking words ('sometimes', 'when', 'and then'). Provide a reason why you photograph them and describe what you do with the photos. Limit to 2–4 clear sentences.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers in my garden. When I arrange fresh blooms in a vase, I take pictures and then send them to friends to share my happiness.

提案: Structure the answer: begin with a clear general statement, then give specific examples and use correct grammar and prepositions. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'on' for occasions. Keep sentences concise and natural.

例: Yes, sending flowers is very common in my country. For example, people often send flowers on birthdays, and husbands commonly give bouquets to their wives on wedding anniversaries.

× Yes, I do love flowers. I buy flowers uh, a time per week.

✓ Yes, I do love flowers. I buy flowers about once a week.

The original uses 'a time per week' which is unnatural and incorrect phrasing for frequency. This is a present tense usage issue: use 'once a week' or 'about once a week' to describe habitual actions.

× Sometimes, uh, I, I bought umm, umm, rose, sometimes lilies, uh, sometimes Lotus.

✓ Sometimes I buy roses, sometimes lilies, and sometimes lotuses (or lotus flowers).

The student mixed past tense 'bought' with a present habitual context. Use present simple 'buy' for repeated actions. Also noun forms: plural 'roses' and 'lotuses' (or 'lotus flowers') are needed for multiple items.

× For example, my mom, umm, prefer flowers with good smell such as umm, uh, judge me.

✓ For example, my mom prefers fragrant flowers, such as jasmine.

Pronoun problem partly, but primarily subject-verb agreement and wrong word choice. 'My mom' requires third person singular verb 'prefers' (Third person singular issue relates but listed here due to pronoun reference). 'Good smell' is unnatural; use 'fragrant'. 'Judge me' appears to be misheard; likely 'jasmine' (a flower) fits the context.

× Yeah, judge me. Is he her favorite flowers?

✓ Yes, jasmine is her favorite flower.

Sentence has multiple errors: wrong pronoun 'he', subject-verb and number agreement. Use 'is' correctly with singular subject and 'flower' singular for 'favorite flower'. Also clarify 'jasmine' as the flower.

× Yes, there are a lot of flowers around my house. Uh, in front is in front of my house is letters uh, there is a pool, pool, umm and uh, uh, behind the backyard is many other flowers.

✓ Yes, there are many flowers around my house. In front of my house there is a lawn and a pool, and in the backyard there are many other flowers.

Original is disfluent and has sentence structure problems. Use 'many' with countable plural 'flowers'. Correct word order: 'In front of my house there is...'. Use 'there are' for plural 'flowers' in the backyard.

× Sometimes I take photos of flowers in the garden, sometimes when I put some fresh flowers into a vase I will take photo umm umm to and send it to my friends.

✓ Sometimes I take photos of flowers in the garden. When I put fresh flowers into a vase I take photos and send them to my friends.

Mix of tenses and singular/plural issues. For habitual actions, use present simple throughout. Use plural 'photos' and refer to 'them' (the photos) when saying 'send them to my friends.'

× Share my happy.

✓ I share my happiness.

Fragment and incorrect word choice. Use full sentence with subject and noun: 'I share my happiness.' 'Happy' is an adjective; the noun is 'happiness.'

× Yes, sending flowers to friends is very popular in my country. Such as when my friends uh birthday I will send send flowers to her or husband will send flowers to a wife when wedding anniversary celebrate.

✓ Yes, sending flowers to friends is very popular in my country. For example, on a friend's birthday I will send flowers to her, and a husband will send flowers to his wife on their wedding anniversary.

Original contains sentence fragments and incorrect word order. Use 'For example, on a friend's birthday' for time expressions, correct possessive pronouns ('his wife') and proper phrasing 'on their wedding anniversary'. Also remove duplicated words and ensure complete sentences. }]} дано