Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (singular/plural agreement), and avoid repetition. Use one or two specific reasons and a linking phrase. For example, say which flower you prefer and why, and give a brief personal detail.

例: Yes, I love flowers. I especially like sunflowers because their bright color lifts my mood, and I often grow them on my balcony to make my home feel cheerful.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and follow with specific details using correct grammar. Replace vague phrases with precise descriptions and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, several people I know love flowers. For instance, my mother is an avid gardener who spends hours tending roses, and a close friend often sends floral bouquets for special occasions.

提案: Be direct and correct grammar (use 'not many' or 'few' and match verbs). Give a reason and one specific example, using linking words to structure the answer.

例: Not many, unfortunately. I live in a rural area with many trees and wild plants, but cultivated flowers are rare, so I miss seeing colorful blooms in my neighborhood.

提案: Organize the response: start with a clear statement, then give specific habits and a short reason using linking words. Avoid filler words and correct tense/agreement.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers. Whenever I see an attractive bloom I photograph it on my phone to save the memory, and I especially photograph flowers my boyfriend gives me because they are special to me.

提案: Answer clearly and provide organized supporting details: mention typical occasions and cultural reasons. Remove irrelevant personal anecdotes or present them briefly and connect with linking words.

例: Yes, people commonly send flowers for celebrations such as birthdays, graduations and weddings. Flowers are seen as a traditional and beautiful gift, and some people also give them for personal reasons, like expressing affection.

× Yes, I really love flowers because it makes things so beautiful and I like sunflower roses to live.

✓ Yes, I really love flowers because they make things so beautiful, and I like living with sunflowers and roses.

The sentence has subject-verb agreement and word choice problems. 'Flowers' is plural, so the verb should be 'make' not 'makes' (Present tense issue). 'I like sunflower roses to live' is ungrammatical; likely intended meaning is 'I like living with sunflowers and roses' or 'I like sunflowers and roses.' Use parallel structure and correct nouns.

× That kind of flower is my favorite flower.

✓ That kind of flower is my favorite.

Using 'that kind of flower' is singular, so 'is' is correct but saying 'my favorite flower' repeats meaning. Remove redundancy: 'That kind of flower is my favorite.' This addresses redundancy and plurality clarity (Singular and plural issue).

× Umm, I think someone that I know love.

✓ Umm, I think someone I know loves flowers.

Missing object and subject-verb agreement. 'Someone that I know' (subject) requires third-person singular verb 'loves' (Incorrect use of pronouns and subject-verb agreement). Also include the object 'flowers' to complete the idea.

× Lovers are my friend and my family.

✓ Yes, people who love flowers are my friends and family.

'Lovers' is awkward and 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to match 'family' as a group. Better phrasing: 'people who love flowers' and plural nouns (Incorrect use of pronouns/word choice).

× My mother loves flowers so much.

✓ My mother loves flowers so much.

This sentence is correct. It uses simple present to describe a habitual fact. No change needed.

× Sadly to say there's no a lot of flowers where I live.

✓ Sadly, there are not a lot of flowers where I live.

Incorrect 'there's' + 'a lot of' with plural 'flowers'. Use plural 'there are' and negate properly: 'there are not a lot of flowers' (There be issue).

× In my place it's countryside so there's a lot of trees and plants but not flowers so and that's makes me so sad.

✓ I live in the countryside, so there are a lot of trees and plants but not many flowers, and that makes me very sad.

Use correct preposition 'in' and article 'the' with 'countryside'. 'There's a lot of trees' is wrong; use 'there are a lot of trees'. 'Not many flowers' is natural. Remove extra 'so' and correct 'that's makes' to 'that makes' (Incorrect use of prepositions and subject-verb agreement).

× Of course, every time I see flower I love taking pictures of it and just put on my phone and uh this flower is I love it.

✓ Of course, every time I see a flower I love taking pictures of it and just put them on my phone; I really love that flower.

Missing article 'a' before 'flower'. Use plural pronoun 'them' when referring to pictures, and rephrase awkward clause 'this flower is I love it' to 'I really love that flower'. Verbs are present habitual so keep present tense (Present tense issue, article error).

× And also when my boyfriend gave me a flower, I take a lot of pictures of it.

✓ And also when my boyfriend gave me a flower, I took a lot of pictures of it.

The time clause 'when my boyfriend gave me a flower' sets past time, so main clause should use past tense 'took' rather than present 'take' (Past tense issue).

× Umm yes because they used to give something beautiful during celebration like birthday, graduation and wedding.

✓ Umm yes, because they usually give something beautiful for celebrations like birthdays, graduations, and weddings.

'Used to' implies past habit; here meaning is general present habit, so use 'usually'. Use plural forms for countable events and correct preposition 'for' celebrations (Modal verb usage/word choice).

× They just we usually use flower and also like what I'm said, every time you have a monsoon my boyfriend gives flower so yes.

✓ We usually give flowers, and as I said, every time there is a celebration my boyfriend gives me flowers, so yes.

Original has mixed subjects and verbs and incorrect tense and articles. Clarify subject 'we', plural 'flowers', and correct reference 'as I said'. Replace 'monsoon' which is incorrect context with 'celebration' if intended; keep consistent tense. Fix conjunction and sentence structure (Incorrect conjunction use/ sentence structure errors).