Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and incorrect singular/plural forms. Use linking words if adding reasons.

例: Yes, I love flowers very much because they make me feel calm and happy. For example, I spend time watering and caring for them every morning, and I enjoy arranging bouquets to decorate my home.

提案: Start with a direct answer and then give clear specific details using correct verb forms and linking words. Avoid repetition and correct article use.

例: Yes, my parents are passionate about flowers. They run a large flower nursery that is like a shop, where they grow many different species and sell them to local customers.

提案: Answer directly, use a concise topic sentence, then add one specific reason or detail linked with a connector. Remove filler words and repetitions.

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live because my parents own a large flower center. As a result, the neighbourhood has beds of roses and seasonal blooms throughout the year.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific example of when or how you take photos. Use linking words to connect reason and example, and avoid repeating phrases.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers because I find their colors and shapes beautiful. For instance, I photograph them every morning when the light is soft and then share the best pictures on my social media.

提案: Give a more confident and structured answer: start with a direct statement, then add a specific example of occasions when people send flowers. Avoid hesitations and fillers.

例: I think people in my country sometimes send flowers, especially for special occasions. For example, flowers are commonly sent for weddings, funerals, and to congratulate someone on a new job.

× Yes, I love it so much, flower.

✓ Yes, I love flowers so much.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect because 'flowers' is plural. Use the plural noun 'flowers' to match the subject and avoid singular pronoun. Also 'flower' as a standalone word is unnatural here; use 'flowers'. Suggestion: use 'I love flowers so much.'

× It's my life because I do anything for them life.

✓ They are my life because I would do anything for them.

Original is ungrammatical and has incorrect word order and verb form. Replace 'It's my life' with 'They are my life' to match plural 'flowers', and use conditional 'would do anything' for willingness. Remove the redundant 'life' at the end. Suggestion: 'They are my life because I would do anything for them.'

× Yes, it's my mom and dad who grows flowers and there have a a big flower center.

✓ Yes, my mom and dad grow flowers, and they have a big flower center.

Use plural verb 'grow' to agree with plural subject 'my mom and dad' (subject-verb agreement). Replace 'it's' with nothing; say 'my mom and dad'. 'There have' is incorrect; use 'they have' to refer to the parents. Remove duplicated 'a'. Suggestion: 'My mom and dad grow flowers, and they have a big flower center.'

× It's like it's like a shop, yes.

✓ It's like a shop.

The phrase repeats 'it's like' unnecessarily. Simplify to 'It's like a shop.' Also unnecessary filler 'yes' can be omitted. Suggestion: 'It's like a shop.'

× Yes, there are a lot of flowers because our center of flowers, it's really, it's really big and my parents do it.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of flowers because our flower center is really big, and my parents run it.

Improve 'our center of flowers' to 'our flower center' and avoid repeated 'it's really'. Use 'is' after the noun for description. 'My parents do it' is vague; use 'my parents run it' to show ownership/operation. Ensure 'there are a lot of flowers' remains correct. Suggestion: 'Yes, there are a lot of flowers because our flower center is really big, and my parents run it.' },{