Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify and organize your response. Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide one or two specific details. Avoid unrelated words. Use linking words if adding details.

例: Yes, I love flowers. For example, roses and marigolds are my favourites because roses smell sweet and marigolds are very bright, so they cheer me up.

提案: Make the sentence grammatically complete and add a brief reason or example. Use a linking word to connect the statements.

例: Yes, my girlfriend also loves flowers because she enjoys arranging bouquets; for instance, she often makes small arrangements for our dinner table.

提案: Be specific about the varieties and use plural forms correctly. Add a short detail about where they grow or which are most common, linked with a connector.

例: Yes, in my garden there are many varieties of flowers, such as roses, marigolds and jasmine, and most of them bloom in the spring and summer.

提案: Use correct tense and a clear adverb. Start with a direct answer, then give a concise reason and frequency. Avoid repeating words.

例: No, I don't usually take photos of flowers, but occasionally I will take a picture when I see an especially beautiful bloom while walking.

提案: Organize your idea and remove hesitations. Give a clear statement about common occasions and provide one or two examples with linking words.

例: Yes, people often send flowers on special occasions; for example, they give bouquets for birthdays, weddings or to wish someone well when they are ill.

× I like rose Marigold book cool.

✓ I like roses, marigolds, and books. They are cool.

The original sentence has wrong word order and missing plural forms. 'Rose' and 'Marigold' should be plural when speaking generally ('roses, marigolds'). Also items listed need commas and a coordinating conjunction 'and'. The adjective 'cool' should clearly modify a noun or be a separate clause; here 'They are cool' makes the meaning clear. Suggestion: list items with commas and use plural nouns for general statements.

× Yes, my girlfriend also loves flower.

✓ Yes, my girlfriend also loves flowers.

The noun 'flower' should be plural when referring to flowers in general. Use 'flowers' after 'loves' to indicate a general preference. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general likes (loves flowers).

× Yes, in my garden there are lots of varieties of flower.

✓ Yes, in my garden there are lots of varieties of flowers.

After 'varieties of' the noun should be plural: 'varieties of flowers.' Using plural matches the idea of multiple kinds. Suggestion: use plural form after 'varieties of'.

× No, most of the time I didn't take photos, but sometimes in occasionally.

✓ No, most of the time I don't take photos, but occasionally I do.

The student mixed past tense 'didn't' with a general habitual context; the question asks about daily life so present simple is appropriate ('don't take photos'). 'Sometimes in occasionally' is ungrammatical; use 'occasionally' or 'sometimes' and place the adverb correctly: 'occasionally I do' or 'I occasionally do'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and place adverbs like 'occasionally' before the main verb or at sentence end.

× Yes, uh, when they were when somewhere like waiting or uh, they want to, uh, wish someone.

✓ Yes, for example, when they are waiting somewhere or want to wish someone well.

The original has incorrect tense 'were' and duplicate 'when', awkward word order and missing objects. Use present simple 'are' for general situations and proper preposition 'waiting somewhere'. Add 'well' after 'wish someone' or specify what to wish. Suggestion: simplify the clause: 'when they are waiting somewhere or want to wish someone well'. Also remove filler words.