Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question (yes/no) and avoid minor grammar errors and redundancy. Use one linking phrase to add a brief specific reason and a short personal example. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Not exactly; I enjoy looking at flowers because they help me relax. For example, when I need a break I walk to the nearby park to see the beds of roses. Since moving to London, I’ve grown fond of roses in particular because they are so common and well cared for here.

提案: Answer directly and correct simple grammar (use correct verb forms). Provide one clear supporting detail and link it logically. Avoid unnecessary historical facts unless they directly support your point.

例: Yes, my mother-in-law loves flowers. She is an expert in ikebana and often explains the meaning behind each arrangement. Because she grew up in Kyoto, she learned traditional floral art from a young age.

提案: Start with a concise topic sentence and use one linking word to add a specific detail (types of flowers, places). Avoid repeating the same idea (stress relief) multiple times; combine related ideas into one coherent sentence.

例: Yes, there are many flowers near my home in London. For example, local parks have beds of roses and seasonal cherry blossoms, so I often visit them to relax and enjoy the scenery.

提案: Give a direct answer and be specific about frequency or purpose. Avoid repeating reasons; combine them into one fluid supporting sentence using a linking phrase (for example/because).

例: Yes, I often photograph flowers when I visit nearby parks and share the best shots with my wife in Japan because she loves seeing London’s plants. I also keep the photos to look at when I need a quick mood boost.

提案: Provide a clear, concise general statement followed by a specific example. Correct small grammar points (use 'an easy and inexpensive way' instead of 'the easiest and cheapest'). Keep it to two sentences for clarity.

例: Yes, people in Japan often give flowers on special occasions like anniversaries and birthdays because it’s an easy and thoughtful way to show appreciation. For example, I sent lilies to my mother last Mother’s Day.

× I sometimes amazed by her knowledge about ikebana, which is one of the traditional Japanese styles flower arrangements.

✓ I am sometimes amazed by her knowledge about ikebana, which is one of the traditional Japanese styles of flower arrangement.

The original sentence omits the auxiliary verb 'am' needed with the adjective 'amazed' to form a correct passive-state description (be + past participle) and misorders/omits preposition and singular noun form: 'styles flower arrangements' should be 'styles of flower arrangement' or 'styles of flower arrangements'. The correction adds the missing verb 'am' and fixes the noun phrase to 'styles of flower arrangement' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use 'I am sometimes amazed' or 'I am sometimes amazed by her knowledge' and use 'style(s) of flower arrangement' depending on singular/plural intent.

× I have become to love roses because they are the national flower of the United Kingdom.

✓ I have come to love roses because they are the national flower of the United Kingdom.

The phrase 'become to love' is not idiomatic. The correct expression is 'come to love' or 'have come to love' to indicate a gradual change. Changing 'have become to love' to 'have come to love' fixes the verb collocation. Suggestion: use 'come to' + verb (bare infinitive) when describing developing feelings.

× I sometimes snap flowers when I go out and walk around the parks near my home, and I also look at them later when I feel stressed.

✓ I sometimes snap photos of flowers when I go out and walk around the parks near my home, and I also look at them later when I feel stressed.

The verb 'snap' usually requires an object specifying what is snapped; 'snap flowers' can be misinterpreted as physically snapping the flowers. Use 'snap photos of flowers' or 'take photos of flowers' to clarify that you are photographing them. Suggestion: use clear object phrases with 'snap' or prefer 'take photos of' for formality.

× this is one of the easiest and cheapest way to show respect and appreciation.

✓ this is one of the easiest and cheapest ways to show respect and appreciation.

After the phrase 'one of the' the noun should be plural ('ways') because it refers to one item in a group of ways. The original uses singular 'way', which is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use plural nouns after 'one of the' (one of the best ways, one of the main reasons).

× As for me, I sent some lilies to my mother on Mother's Day in May.

✓ As for me, I sent some lilies to my mother on Mother's Day in May.

The sentence is grammatically correct in past tense and matches the context, so no change is necessary. It is included to confirm correct usage: 'sent' is the correct past tense form of 'send' for a completed past action.