Name— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Старайтесь формулировать предложение чётко и грамматически правильно. Уберите лишние слова и повторения. Дайте ясное утверждение в первой фразе, затем короткое объяснение с конкретным примером. Обратите внимание на времена, артикли и порядок слов (например: "for me" вместо "for me is").

例: For me, it is not difficult to remember people's names because I read a lot, which helps my memory. For example, I usually remember classmates' names and birthdays.

提案: Уточните последовательность действий и используйте связующие слова для логичности. Избегайте буквальных переводов («write to my books») — используйте естественные выражения. Добавьте конкретику: где вы записываете, как часто повторяете. Следите за артиклями и предлогами.

例: First, I ask their name and repeat it aloud. Then I write it in a notebook and review my notes later to help me remember.

提案: Исправьте грамматику и идиоматичность. Фраза «I don't be angry» неверна — используйте «I'm not angry». Уточните причину спокойно и уберите бессмысленные части (например «my mother can buy my name» непонятно). Дайте одно-два предложения с логическим объяснением.

例: I'm not angry when people forget my name because it's uncommon and hard to pronounce. I usually just repeat it politely so they remember next time.

提案: Выражайте условие ясно и используйте правильные формы глаголов. Избегайте словесной путаницы («remind» вместо «remember»). Дайте конкретный противопоставляющий пример и используйте связку «however» или «but».

例: It depends on the name. If a name is simple, I usually remember it, but I sometimes forget unusual or complicated names.

× I scenes for me is not difficult because I read a lot of books and I remind everything for example names pupil or dates birthday

✓ It seems to me it is not difficult because I read a lot of books and I remember everything, for example pupils' names or birth dates

The sentence has multiple structural and word-choice errors. 'I scenes for me' should be 'It seems to me' (impersonal expression). 'is not difficult' needs a clear subject 'it'. 'remind' is the wrong verb; use 'remember'. 'names pupil' should be 'pupils' names' (possessive plural). 'dates birthday' should be 'birth dates' or 'dates of birth'. Punctuation and conjunctions are needed to separate clauses. Suggestion: break into smaller clauses, use correct verbs and possessive forms. Next steps: Practice impersonal expressions (It seems to me...), use 'remember' vs 'remind', and form possessive plurals by adding apostrophe after s.

× As the first tool I ask them their name and then I write to my books and read

✓ First, I ask them their name, then I write it in my notebook and read it

'As the first tool' is unnatural; use 'First' or 'The first thing I do'. 'write to my books' is incorrect preposition and noun choice; use 'write it in my notebook'. Also include the object 'it' referring to the name and parallel verbs 'write it and read it'. Suggestion: Use 'in' for writing into something and a singular noun like 'notebook' or 'book' when appropriate.

× I think I don't be angry because it's normal when people can't remember my name because my name is so difficult and sometimes my mother can buy my name

✓ I think I am not angry because it's normal when people can't remember my name; my name is difficult and sometimes even my mother forgets it

Multiple verb form errors: 'I don't be angry' is incorrect; use 'I am not angry'. 'my mother can buy my name' is nonsense here; likely intended 'forget my name'. 'can' is unnecessary. Also combine clauses more clearly and use 'even' to stress. Suggestion: Use correct verb 'am', correct lexical verb 'forget', and avoid 'can' unless expressing ability or possibility.

× I think it depends on people's name. For example, if people names be too easily I can remind but if people names can be difficult sometimes I don't mind

✓ I think it depends on people's names. For example, if people’s names are very easy I can remember them, but if names are difficult sometimes I don't

Errors with plural agreement and verb form: 'people's name' should be plural 'people's names'. 'if people names be too easily' uses wrong verb and adverb; use 'are very easy'. 'remind' is wrong verb; use 'remember them'. 'can be difficult' is awkward; simple present 'are difficult' fits. 'I don't mind' changes meaning; likely 'I don't' (meaning I don't remember). Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement, use correct adjectives/adverbs ('easy' not 'easily'), and choose 'remember' not 'remind'.