Name— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ปรับโครงสร้างประโยคให้ตรงประเด็น ใช้ประโยคเริ่มต้นชัดเจน และหลีกเลี่ยงคำซ้ำซ้อน เช่น อธิบายเหตุผลสั้น ๆ ว่าทำไมจำชื่อยาก รวมทั้งใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้อง (เช่น "group" แทน "pair" ถ้ามีหลายคน) ควรจำกัดความยาวไม่เกิน 3–4 ประโยค และใช้ linking word เช่น "because" เพื่อความเชื่อมโยง

例: Not really. I find it difficult to remember people's names because when there is a large group I get overwhelmed and forget many names. I usually only remember the names of people I speak with more than once.

提案: ใช้โครงสร้างที่ชัดเจนและให้รายละเอียดเพิ่มเติม เช่น อธิบายขั้นตอนที่ทำและผลลัพธ์ ใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมเหตุผล และแก้ข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์ (เช่น "three or both times" ควรเป็น "three or four times" หรือ "a few times")

例: If I want to remember someone's name, I usually repeat it two or three times when I first hear it. I also try to use their name during the conversation so it sticks in my memory.

提案: ประโยคเริ่มต้นควรตอบตรงคำถาม (ความรู้สึกเมื่อคนลืมชื่อคุณ) แล้วอธิบายเหตุผลอย่างชัดเจน แก้คำศัพท์และไวยากรณ์ที่ผิด (เช่น "chose" เป็น "shows") และอย่าใช้ประโยคยาวเกินไป ให้เชื่อมด้วยคำว่า "because" หรือ "because it shows"

例: I feel a bit disappointed when people can't remember my name because it shows they did not pay attention. On the other hand, I feel pleased when someone remembers my name because it shows they want to build a relationship.

提案: เริ่มด้วยประโยคสั้น ๆ ตอบตรงคำถาม แล้วให้ตัวอย่างเป็นประโยชน์ แก้ไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ (เช่น "people names" → "people's names", "if don't pay attention" → "if I don't pay attention", และ "furnit" → ควรเป็น "meet" หรือ "talk to") ใช้ linking words เช่น "for example" และ "also" อย่างถูกต้อง

例: Yes, I often forget people's names. For example, I can't remember the names of friends from primary school because I haven't seen them for many years, and I also forget names of new acquaintances if I don't pay attention when we meet.

× I usually can't remember that all because if this pair have a lot of people I can't remember it all.

✓ I usually can't remember all of them because if this place has a lot of people I can't remember them all.

Subject and noun number: 'that all' is incorrect; use 'all of them'. 'pair' is wrong word—likely 'place' or 'party'. 'have' should be 'has' to agree with singular noun. Pronouns must match plural 'people' with 'them'. Suggestions: choose the correct noun (place/party), ensure subject-verb agreement (singular noun + has), and use appropriate pronouns (them for people).

× If I want to remember someone's name I usually repeat it three or both times when I first hear it

✓ If I want to remember someone's name, I usually repeat it three or four times when I first hear it.

Number expression: 'three or both times' is ungrammatical. Use a clear plural number phrase like 'three or four times'. Also add a comma after the conditional clause for clarity. Suggestions: use correct numeric expressions and punctuation; avoid 'both' unless referring to two items.

× I feel happy when people remember my name because it chose they want to build a relationship with me

✓ I feel happy when people remember my name because it shows they want to build a relationship with me.

Pronoun and verb choice: 'it chose' is incorrect. The intended verb is 'shows' (or 'means'). Also pronoun order: 'they' should follow the verb. Suggestions: use 'shows' to indicate implication and ensure correct word order 'it shows that they...'; 'that' can be added for clarity.

× I often forget people names.

✓ I often forget people's names.

Possessive form is required: 'people' must be in the possessive form 'people's' to modify 'names'. Suggestions: use apostrophe + s for irregular plural possessive, e.g., 'people's names'.

× For example, I sometimes can't remember the name of friends from primary school because I haven't seen them for many years and I also forget names of new acquaintances if don't pay attention when we furnit.

✓ For example, I sometimes can't remember the names of friends from primary school because I haven't seen them for many years, and I also forget the names of new acquaintances if I don't pay attention when we meet.

Multiple issues: 'name of friends' should be 'names of friends' (plural agreement). Missing subject 'I' in 'if don't pay attention' must be included. 'furnit' is not a word; context suggests 'meet' or 'are introduced'—use 'meet'. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. Suggestions: ensure plural agreement, include required subjects in conditional clauses, and use correct verbs for meeting people.