Name— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons. Use linking words (for example, because, so) correctly and correct small grammatical errors (e.g., "people's" and removing duplicate words).

例: No, I find it difficult to remember people's names. This is mainly because I have social anxiety, so I often avoid eye contact and don't form a strong visual memory of faces. As a result, I struggle to link names with faces.

提案: Provide a clear method and give a short example. Use linking words to show sequence or result (for example, 'usually', 'then', 'so'). Fix unclear phrases ("extend" is incorrect here).

例: I don't use a formal technique; usually I try to meet the person again soon and repeat their name. For example, when I meet a colleague, I say, "Nice to meet you, Sarah," and then use their name in conversation so I remember it.

提案: Clarify the emotion and avoid unclear expressions. Begin with a direct statement of feeling, then give a brief reason. Correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., "never spiritual" is incorrect, use "not offended" or "not bothered").

例: I'm usually not offended when people forget my name because I know I forget names too. Therefore, I don't expect others to remember my name, especially if we don't meet often.

提案: Give a clear yes/no response and add a concise explanation with a specific detail or example. Remove filler words and repeated phrases. Use linking words like 'because' to explain the reason.

例: Yes, I often forget people's names because I don't focus on their faces or repeat their names. For instance, I sometimes meet someone twice before I can recall their name.

× I really find it difficult to remember people' names and match them with their faces.

✓ I really find it difficult to remember people's names and match them with their faces.

The possessive of people is people's not people'. This is a singular/plural punctuation issue: people is plural and the possessive uses an apostrophe + s. Use people's names to show names belonging to people.

× I think that has to do with my social anxiety that that I don't really look into their eyes, so I don't really remember their face so I can remember their names too.

✓ I think it has to do with my social anxiety: I don't really look them in the eyes, so I don't remember their faces and I can't remember their names either.

Multiple issues: repeated 'that that' and incorrect pronoun/phrase order. 'Look into their eyes' is better as 'look them in the eyes.' 'Remember their face' needs plural 'faces.' 'So I can remember their names too' is contradictory; intended meaning is inability, so 'I can't remember their names either.' Fix sentence flow and pronoun usage.

× There is no specific technique I just extend if I see them again and I will keep asking till I remember their names.

✓ There is no specific technique. I just wait to see them again and I keep asking until I remember their names.

Run-on sentence and wrong verb 'extend' used instead of 'wait.' Split into two sentences. 'Till' is informal; 'until' or 'until I remember' is clearer. Use present simple 'I keep asking' to indicate habitual action.

× Never spiritual because I also can't remember names so I don't feel like it is a bit dee someone doesn't remember my names because I'm not a famous partner, so it's not their duty to remember by my name.

✓ Never offended, because I also can't remember names, so I don't feel bad when someone doesn't remember my name; I'm not famous, so it's not their duty to remember my name.

Many word choice errors: 'spiritual' should be 'offended'; 'dee' unclear -> 'bad'; 'my names' should be singular 'my name'; 'partner' wrong -> remove; 'remember by my name' -> 'remember my name.' Rephrase to natural English and correct adjective/adverb usage and noun number.

× Yes, isn't like forgetting their names is just like I just can't recall what their names are like I just completely forget.

✓ Yes, it's not that I forget their names; it's that I simply can't recall their names — I just completely forget.

Original has informal fillers and incorrect contraction 'isn't like.' Use 'it's not that' and proper clause structure. Ensure subject-verb agreement with 'it's' and remove repetitive 'like' and 'just' to make statement clear.