Name— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, avoid unclear references (e.g. “HP”) and unnecessary words, and keep it within 2–3 sentences. Add one brief reason or example using a linking word.

例: Yes, it's usually easy for me to remember people's names because I have a good memory. For example, I often recall the names of new classmates after meeting them once.

提案: Give a clearer method or strategy. Begin with a topic sentence describing a way you remember names, then support it with one specific detail using a linking word (e.g. “for example” or “because”). Avoid repetition and long hesitations.

例: I usually remember names by repeating them silently after being introduced because repetition helps me fix the name in my mind. For example, if someone says their name is Sarah, I silently repeat “Sarah” a few times and associate it with a detail like her hairstyle.

提案: Provide a concise, coherent emotional response. Start with a direct statement of feeling, then briefly explain why, using linking words (e.g. “because” or “when”). Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

例: It depends, but I usually feel a little disappointed when someone I like forgets my name because it suggests they weren't paying attention. However, I understand it can happen, so I don't get very angry.

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one short reason or strategy using a linking word. Correct common errors (e.g. “impolite”, “embarrassing”, “forget someone’s name”).

例: No, I don't often forget names because I try to remember them on purpose. For instance, I make a mental note of a person's face and name right after meeting them to avoid awkward situations.

× Yes, I have good memory so I always remember the right name of HP.

✓ Yes, I have a good memory, so I always remember the correct name of people.

Missing article before 'memory' and incorrect adjective choice and phrasing. Add 'a' before 'good memory' (article error) and use 'correct' rather than 'right' for names; 'the right name of HP' is unclear — use 'the correct name of people' or specify a person. Also add a comma before 'so' for clarity.

× Well, it's hard to say I just remember it.

✓ Well, it's hard to say; I just remember them.

Sentence is run-on and pronoun agreement is wrong. Use a semicolon or period to separate clauses and use 'them' to refer to 'names' (plural). This fixes structure and pronoun reference.

× I don't know why and I don't have some special skills.

✓ I don't know why, and I don't have any special skills.

Use 'any' with negative sentences instead of 'some'. Also add a comma before 'and' for readability.

× I just remember it.

✓ I just remember them.

Pronoun agreement: 'it' is singular but refers to 'names' (plural). Use 'them' for plural antecedent.

× It's easy for me.

✓ It's easy for me to remember names.

Sentence is vague; add 'to remember names' to clarify what 'it' refers to. This improves clarity and completes the idea.

× Um it depends on the situation.

✓ Um, it depends on the situation.

Missing comma after the discourse marker 'Um'. Adding the comma improves natural spoken punctuation.

× If I really like the person I met and I really want to I really wanted to let leave him or her a very strong impression.

✓ If I really like the person I meet and I really want to, I really want to leave a very strong impression on him or her.

Mixed tenses and incorrect verb forms: 'met' (past) should be 'meet' (present) to match general situation; 'I really wanted to let leave' is ungrammatical — use 'I really want to leave'. Also use 'leave an impression on someone' (preposition use). Add commas for clarity.

× I'll feel some sadness. I'll feel some sadness for the

✓ I'll feel sad.

Repetition and incomplete fragment. Use 'I'll feel sad' to express the idea concisely. Remove the incomplete trailing fragment.

× No, actually I'm not usually forget people's name because I think it's very unpolite and it's very embarrassed too when you forgot someone's name when you are talking.

✓ No, actually I don't usually forget people's names because I think it's very impolite and it's embarrassing when you forget someone's name while talking.

Multiple errors: verb and auxiliary order — use 'I don't usually forget' not 'I'm not usually forget' (present simple). 'People's name' should be plural 'people's names'. 'Unpolite' is incorrect; use 'impolite'. 'It's very embarrassed' should be 'it's embarrassing' (incorrect use of adjective vs. adverb). Tense consistency: 'you forgot someone's name when you are talking' should be 'you forget... while talking'.

× So I always remember their names in my mind to avoid that circumstances.

✓ So I always keep their names in mind to avoid those circumstances.

Incorrect preposition and noun forms: use 'keep in mind' not 'remember in my mind'. 'That circumstances' should be plural 'those circumstances'. Adjust verb phrase accordingly.