Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and gives reasons, but the final sentence suggests you lacked time rather than interest. Connect the ideas more logically and, if possible, mention one thing you know or would like to learn about local history.

例: To be honest, I haven't learned much about my hometown's history because I've always been more interested in current events. There aren't many historical sites nearby, either. Still, I'd like to learn how the local fishing industry developed.

提案: The response has a useful reason and a linking phrase, but “loved to study elsewhere from kindergarten” is unnatural and unclear. Say that you attended school elsewhere from a young age, then briefly explain how you learned about the culture later.

例: No, I didn't learn much about my hometown's culture as a child because I went to school in another city from a young age. As a result, I started learning about local traditions on my own when I was older, especially by talking to my family.

提案: You give relevant location and descriptive details, but check the place name and whether it is a province or a city. Use a straightforward location phrase, then add one accurate detail about what the area is known for.

例: My hometown is in central Thailand, not far from Bangkok and close to the Gulf of Thailand. It's known for its fresh seafood and active fishing communities.

提案: Answer directly rather than repeating the question. Correct the singular/plural forms and use a simple comparison with Bangkok, followed by one or two clear features.

例: It's a relatively small place, especially compared with Bangkok. It has fewer people and much less traffic, so the atmosphere is quieter.

提案: The balanced opinion is a good approach, but “It's a mixed feeling” and “peed through” are unclear or unnatural. Use “I have mixed feelings,” explain the peaceful atmosphere, and say “without a car.”

例: I have mixed feelings about my hometown. On the one hand, I like how peaceful it is and how quiet life can be. On the other hand, public transport is limited, so getting around without a car is difficult.

提案: This is specific and personal. Correct the subject-verb agreement in “which make” and consider linking the market example more smoothly to your main point.

例: What I like most is how friendly and welcoming people are. For example, when I visit the local market, many of the sellers recognize me and greet me by name, which makes me feel at home.

提案: You answer directly and support your point with a relevant example. For a more natural response, hyphenate “time-consuming” and consider replacing “public transport options” with the more concise “public transport.”

例: I dislike the lack of public transport because it's inconvenient to get around without a car. The buses are often unreliable, which can make commuting to work stressful and time-consuming.

提案: The timeline is understandable, but “since” and “until” do not work together in this sentence. Say how old you were when you moved away, and use the past simple to describe the completed period.

例: I lived there from the time I was born until I was six. Then I moved to another city to study, although I still visit my family there.

提案: Your reason and decision are clear, but keep the tense consistent and make it clear whether you currently live there or are describing the past. Avoid switching from “there” to “you” by using “I.”

例: Not really. When I lived there, it was inconvenient because I didn't have a car and the public transport was unreliable. That's one reason I moved to an area that is easier to get around.

提案: Give your future answer clearly, then explain your current connection to the place. The phrase “I'll move aways and I was 6” is confusing; say that you moved away when you were six and now visit monthly.

例: No, I don't think I'll live there again for a long time. I moved away when I was six, and now I only go back about once a month to visit my family.

提案: Include a clear location sentence and then describe one or two distinctive features. Correct “an hour drive” to “an hour's drive”; “trolleys” does not fit here, so use “tourists” or “visitors.”

例: My hometown is about an hour's drive from Bangkok. It's best known for its fresh seafood, and many visitors come to try local dishes and buy seafood from the markets.

提案: The examples of seafood are relevant, but use the phrase “a reputation for.” The second sentence is unclear: say that tourists or visitors come to attend the annual festival.

例: My hometown is famous for its fresh seafood, especially crabs and prawns. It also holds an annual seafood festival that attracts many visitors.

提案: You answer the question and give a reason, but “my hometown history” needs a possessive form, and the two sentences repeat the same point. State that you studied elsewhere and add a brief detail about what you missed.

例: To be honest, I didn't learn much about my hometown's history at school because I studied in another city. So I missed lessons about local events and traditions.

提案: Your answer includes a clear observation and reason, but correct “who move” to “who moved” and make the opening comparison more natural. You could also mention one other reason young people might stay.

例: Yes, many young people who were born in my hometown still live there, unlike me, because I moved away. I think they stay mainly because their families are nearby, and some may also prefer the quieter lifestyle.

提案: This is a direct and relevant answer with a clear reason. To develop it slightly, mention which kinds of opportunities are limited or contrast the situation with a larger city.

例: Not really, because there aren't many job opportunities, especially in specialized fields. Young people may need to move to a bigger city like Bangkok to find a wider range of careers.

× Is this a small cities much smaller than Bangkok which fewer people are less traffic and less crowded?

✓ It's a small city, much smaller than Bangkok, with fewer people, less traffic, and fewer crowds.

The original is structured as a question, but it does not form a grammatical question or a complete statement. Use a statement to answer the examiner, and connect the comparisons with with.

× Is this a small cities much smaller than Bangkok which fewer people are less traffic and less crowded?

✓ It's a small city, much smaller than Bangkok, with fewer people, less traffic, and fewer crowds.

The singular phrase a small must be followed by the singular noun city, not cities. Use fewer with countable plural nouns such as people and crowds, and less with uncountable nouns such as traffic.

× It's a mixed feeling. On one hand, I like how peed through my hometown is, life is quiet there.

✓ I have mixed feelings. On the one hand, I like how peaceful my hometown is; life is quiet there.

It's a mixed feeling does not express the intended meaning naturally; I have mixed feelings is the appropriate sentence structure. The comma between two complete clauses creates a comma splice, so use a semicolon or make them separate sentences.

× But on the other hand, it doesn't have many public transport options so it's hard to get around without the car.

✓ But on the other hand, it doesn't have many public transport options, so it's hard to get around without a car.

Use a car when referring to any car in general. The car usually refers to a specific car that has already been mentioned.

× Whenever I go to the local market, every seller knows my name which make me feel at home.

✓ Whenever I go to the local market, every seller knows my name, which makes me feel at home.

The verb in the which clause refers to the preceding situation, which is singular, so use makes rather than make.

× I have lived here since I was born until I moved to study elsewhere when I was six years old.

✓ I lived there from the time I was born until I moved to study elsewhere when I was six years old.

The sentence describes a period of residence that ended when the speaker moved away. Use the simple past lived for this completed period, and use from ... until to mark its beginning and end.

× It was very inconvenient to live there if you don't own a car because public transport was unreliable.

✓ It was very inconvenient to live there if you didn't own a car because public transport was unreliable.

The sentence describes a past situation, so the conditional clause should also use the past tense: didn't own, not don't own.

× No, I don't think I'll continue living there. I'll move aways and I was 6 and now I only go back to visit my family once a month.

✓ No, I don't think I'll continue living there. I moved away when I was six, and now I only go back to visit my family once a month.

The speaker is describing a completed move in the past, so use moved away. The phrase I was six needs when to show the time of the move. Use six rather than the numeral 6 in formal writing.

× My hometown is an hour drive from Bangkok is it's well known for its fresh seafood.

✓ My hometown is an hour's drive from Bangkok, and it's well known for its fresh seafood.

The original joins two independent clauses with is, creating a run-on sentence. Join them with and. The standard expression for a journey lasting an hour is an hour's drive.

× It has a reputation in fresh seafood, especially crabs and prawns.

✓ It has a reputation for fresh seafood, especially crabs and prawns.

The conventional preposition in this expression is for: a place has a reputation for something.

× Many trolleys with to take part in their annual seafood festival.

✓ Many trolleys want to take part in its annual seafood festival.

With cannot be followed by to plus a base verb in this construction. Use want to take part to express the intended action. Use its to refer to the hometown's festival.

× Unlike me who move away, many young people born in my hometown still live there.

✓ Unlike me, who moved away, many young people born in my hometown still live there.

The speaker's move away happened in the past, so the verb in the relative clause should be moved, not move.