Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly and avoid exaggerated or redundant phrasing such as “one of the most fabulous places I have ever seen in my life.” Use the correct spelling, “Kandy,” and give one specific geographical or cultural detail.

例: I was born and raised in Kandy, a city in central Sri Lanka. It is surrounded by green hills and is famous for its beautiful scenery and cultural heritage.

提案: Use natural collocations such as “peaceful surroundings,” “scenery,” and “surrounded by.” Remove the repeated idea of enjoying your hometown and complete the final sentence smoothly. Avoid fillers and connect the reason with “because” or “so.”

例: What I like most is the peaceful atmosphere and beautiful scenery. Kandy is surrounded by green hills and gardens, so I feel relaxed whenever I return home.

提案: The answer is clear, but use the present perfect correctly with “for”: “I have lived there for more than 25 years.” If you have moved away, clarify how long you lived there before moving.

例: I was born and raised there, and I lived there for more than 25 years before moving here. So, Kandy has been my home for most of my life.

提案: Organize the response into a clear opinion, two reasons, and a conclusion. Correct “higher quality educational institutes” to “high-quality educational institutions,” and avoid the incomplete sentence “young people can develop their life and career.”

例: Yes, definitely. Kandy is a good place for young people because it has several high-quality educational institutions and a friendly community. These advantages can help them develop both personally and professionally, although career opportunities are somewhat limited.

提案: Avoid repetition and unfinished clauses, and use accurate grammar and punctuation. Say “Kandy was the last kingdom of Sri Lanka” rather than “one of the ancient kingdoms” if that is your intended point. Link the historical fact to your school experience clearly.

例: Yes. We learned about Kandy’s history at school because it was the last kingdom of Sri Lanka. We also studied its royal traditions and its importance in the country’s cultural history.

提案: Give a direct answer about childhood learning before describing a landmark. Use the correct name, “the Temple of the Tooth,” and replace the unclear final sentence with a precise conclusion about Kandy’s culture.

例: Yes, I learned about Kandy’s culture from my family and at school. For example, the Temple of the Tooth is one of the most important Buddhist sites in Sri Lanka, and local festivals also helped me understand the city’s traditions.

提案: State clearly whether Kandy is a large or small city, then support your answer with examples. Avoid repeating “all” and do not separate the relative clause from the sentence before it.

例: Kandy is a medium-sized city rather than a large one. However, it has most of the facilities people need, including schools, hospitals, shops, and reliable public services.

提案: This is direct and well supported. Use “Kandy” consistently and replace the slightly awkward conditional phrase with “If I had the opportunity” or simply explain one reason you would return.

例: Yes, I really like Kandy because it is peaceful, scenic, and close to my family. If I had the opportunity, I would definitely return and settle there.

提案: Give the negative point directly instead of saying “nothing comes into my mind.” Correct “if I had quiet space” to “if I could change one thing,” and use the natural expression “traffic is a major problem.”

例: The main thing I dislike is the traffic. Many roads are narrow and become very congested, so I would improve the transportation system and widen some of the main roads.

提案: Clarify whether you currently live there, since the answer shifts between past and present. Use “live in Kandy” rather than “live in town,” and combine the final fragments into one complete sentence.

例: Yes, I enjoy living in Kandy because my parents and many of my relatives are there. I also love the natural surroundings and friendly community, which help me feel relaxed.

提案: The main idea is understandable, but the answer contains several broken and unclear phrases. Use the first conditional correctly—“If I have the chance, I will…”—and explain how the city helps you instead of adding unrelated words such as “drive.”

例: Yes, I hope to live there for a long time if I have the opportunity. Kandy has the facilities I need, and its peaceful environment helps me recover from the stress of daily life.

提案: Use a simple descriptive structure: location, landscape, and a notable feature. Remove fillers and unclear phrases such as “one of the most iconic places they are” and “relaxing week walk.” Say “a small river runs through the city” if that is what you mean.

例: Kandy is in the central region of Sri Lanka. It is surrounded by green mountains and contains several parks where people can relax. A small river also runs through the city, adding to its scenic character.

提案: Correct the opening to “Kandy is famous,” and use the accurate landmark name, “the Temple of the Tooth.” Avoid repeated self-corrections and explain its importance and tourism in two clear sentences.

例: Kandy is especially famous for the Temple of the Tooth, one of the most important Buddhist sites in Sri Lanka. It attracts both local and international visitors who come to experience its religious traditions, festivals, and beautiful surroundings.

提案: This answer is relevant and has supporting details, but avoid repetition such as “tourists and international visitors.” Correct “about candy in throughout” to “about Kandy throughout,” and use “the Temple of the Tooth.”

例: Yes, we studied Kandy’s history throughout our school years because it was the last kingdom of Sri Lanka. We also learned about important sites such as the Temple of the Tooth, which still attracts many visitors.

提案: Correct the unclear phrase “a mix of paper” to “a mix of people” and avoid repeating “many young people.” Introduce the University of Peradeniya once and connect it naturally to the number of young residents.

例: Yes, there are many young people in Kandy. The University of Peradeniya is nearby and attracts students from across Sri Lanka, so the city has a lively and youthful atmosphere.

提案: The balanced opinion is effective, but correct “there are no much opportunities” to “there are not many opportunities,” and replace “work with the nature” with “work in environmental fields.” Use a clear contrast with “however.”

例: Kandy is not the best place for every career because there are limited opportunities in technology and heavy industry. However, it is a good option for young people interested in education, tourism, or environmental work because of its universities and natural surroundings.

× the picturesque sceneries in my hometown

✓ the picturesque scenery in my hometown

Scenery is an uncountable noun and is not normally used in the plural form. Use scenery when referring to natural views in general.

× It is surrounded with green spaces

✓ It is surrounded by green spaces

The standard expression is surrounded by, not surrounded with, when describing something that encircles a place or object.

× I always enjoy visiting there and. This makes me comfortable when I go back to my home town.

✓ I always enjoy visiting there, and this makes me feel comfortable when I go back to my hometown.

The original wording contains an incomplete sentence and an unnecessary full stop. Join the related ideas with and. Also, feel comfortable is the natural verb phrase.

× I have lived there more than 25 years.

✓ I have lived there for more than 25 years.

Use for before a period of time to show duration. For example, I have lived here for ten years.

× it has several higher quality educational institutes

✓ it has several high-quality educational institutions

High-quality is the natural compound adjective in this context, and institutions is the more appropriate noun for schools or educational organizations. The article is not needed after several.

× young people can develop. Their life and career with the good surrounding if they live in my hometown.

✓ young people can develop their careers in a good environment if they live in my hometown.

The original second sentence is incomplete because develop needs an object in this context. Combine the ideas into one complete sentence and use their careers rather than their life and career.

× one of the ancient kingdoms in Sri Lanka

✓ one of the ancient kingdoms in Sri Lanka

This phrase is grammatically correct because one of must be followed by a plural noun. No change is needed, but the noun should remain plural after one of.

× we had to learn about our my hometown's history

✓ we had to learn about my hometown's history

Our and my are conflicting possessive determiners. Use only one possessive determiner. Because the speaker is referring to one hometown, my is appropriate.

× so it as I remember it was the last Kingdom in Sri Lanka and. It has a great history.

✓ As I remember, it was the last kingdom in Sri Lanka, and it has a great history.

The original sentence contains unnecessary words and an incorrect sentence break. Use the introductory phrase As I remember followed by a complete clause. Kingdom should not be capitalized here because it is not a proper name.

× my hometown has several historically and culturally important landmarks

✓ my hometown has several historically and culturally important landmarks

This sentence is grammatically correct. Historically and culturally are adverbs that correctly modify important in the compound description.

× the Temple of Tooth Relic

✓ the Temple of the Tooth Relic

The established name is the Temple of the Tooth. The definite article the is needed before Tooth because it refers to a specific relic.

× it all I believe candy and culture is already also is good together

✓ I believe that Kandy's culture and history are closely connected.

The original sentence has an incorrect word order and repeated verbs. Use a clear subject, verb, and complement. Culture and history are plural subjects, so use are.

× Kandy's culture and history is closely connected

✓ Kandy's culture and history are closely connected

Culture and history form a compound plural subject joined by and, so the plural verb are is required.

× I would not say it Candy is a big city.

✓ I would not say that Kandy is a big city.

The original sentence contains an unnecessary pronoun and incorrect word order. After I would not say, use the clause that Kandy is a big city.

× all other essential services which are required for a quality lifestyle. So it has almost everything. Which people need.

✓ It has all the essential services that people need for a good quality of life.

Which people need is an incomplete sentence and should be joined to the preceding idea. Combining the clauses creates a complete and natural sentence.

× if I had quiet space, especially to improve the transportation system

✓ if I could change one thing, it would be improving the transportation system

Quiet space does not express the intended meaning. Use the preposition and structure change one thing to introduce a specific improvement.

× the traffic condition is a headache

✓ the traffic conditions are a headache

Traffic conditions is the natural plural expression when referring to the overall state of traffic. The plural subject requires are.

× the roads are quite narrow and the traffic condition is. A headache.

✓ the roads are quite narrow, and the traffic conditions are a headache.

A headache is incorrectly separated from its verb. Keep the complement with the verb are and join the two related clauses with a comma and and.

× almost all my relatives were there, even my parents still live there

✓ almost all my relatives live there, and my parents still live there

The question asks about the speaker's present situation, so live is needed instead of were. Use the present tense for relatives who currently live in the hometown.

× It always makes me comfortable and. Relaxes my mind.

✓ It always makes me feel comfortable and relaxes my mind.

The original wording splits one predicate into two fragments. Keep both verbs in the same sentence. After makes me, use feel, while relaxes has the subject it.

× if I had the chance I will continue living there

✓ if I had the chance, I would continue living there

This is a second conditional sentence. Use would in the main clause when the if-clause uses the past form had.

× it is one of the best places to live and spend, drive if it's already necessary, facilities and at most importantly the.

✓ It is one of the best places to live because it has all the necessary facilities and helps people recover from daily stress.

The original sentence contains several incomplete and incorrectly ordered phrases. Replace them with complete clauses that clearly express the intended meaning.

× It helps to the strength from our daily stress and enjoy.

✓ It helps us recover from daily stress and enjoy life.

Help is followed directly by an object, not by to in this structure. Use helps us recover, and use from after recover to identify the source of the stress.

× Have a relaxing week walk even.

✓ People can even take a relaxing walk there.

The original phrase is incomplete and uses the wrong noun phrase. Use take a walk, and include a subject and a complete verb phrase.

× There's a small rack going through.

✓ There is a small track running through the area.

The phrase there is correctly introduces the existence of something, but rack is the wrong word. Track is the appropriate noun, and running through is the natural participial phrase.

× Kandy famous among Buddhists especially because of the iconic temple of 23 Lake

✓ Kandy is famous among Buddhists, especially because of the iconic Temple of the Tooth.

The original sentence has no verb. Add is after Kandy. The name of the landmark should also be written as the Temple of the Tooth.

× which is a religiously important place for almost Buddhist

✓ which is a religiously important place for almost all Buddhists

Buddhist is a countable plural noun when referring to people, so it needs the plural form Buddhists. Almost all is the correct quantifier before the plural noun.

× for almost Buddhist

✓ for almost all Buddhists

Almost cannot directly modify the noun Buddhist in this meaning. Use almost all before a plural countable noun: almost all Buddhists.

× it is a tourist city I would say

✓ I would say that it is a tourist city.

The original phrase is understandable, but the reporting phrase is placed awkwardly. Use that to introduce the clause and place I would say at the beginning for a clearer structure.

× many people come and visit Candy

✓ many people come to visit Kandy

Come is normally followed by to before an infinitive of purpose. Also, visit does not need an additional preposition before its object.

× we had to learn a lot about candy in throughout our school days

✓ we had to learn a lot about Kandy throughout our school days

In and throughout cannot be used together here. Throughout correctly expresses the whole period of the speaker's school days.

× a culturally important landmark, the Temple of Tooth relic

✓ a culturally important landmark, the Temple of the Tooth

The proper name should be the Temple of the Tooth. The phrase is a singular landmark, so the singular form landmark is correct.

× Yes, I would say Candy is has a mix of paper, including young youngsters

✓ Yes, I would say Kandy has a mix of people, including many young people.

The original sentence incorrectly uses two verbs, is and has, and paper is the wrong noun. Use has with the noun people. Youngsters and young people are redundant together.

× especially there's a top ranked university in Kandy, University of Peradeniya

✓ This is especially because there is a top-ranked university in Kandy, the University of Peradeniya.

There is is used with the singular noun university. The university's name is specific, so it should be introduced with the definite article the.

× a top ranked university

✓ a top-ranked university

Top-ranked is a compound adjective and should be hyphenated when it comes before the noun. The adjective order itself is correct.

× There are no much opportunities in candy

✓ There are not many opportunities in Kandy.

Opportunities is a plural countable noun, so use many rather than much. In a standard negative sentence, use are not many.

× continue their career in education industry

✓ continue their careers in the education industry

Use the plural careers when referring generally to different people's careers. The specific field is the education industry, so it needs the definite article the.

× work with the nature

✓ work in a nature-related field

Work with the nature is not a natural expression for an occupation. Use work in a nature-related field to describe employment connected with nature.