Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence naming your hometown, then add one or two specific supporting details using correct prepositions and verb forms. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy.

例: I come from Fontanka, a small coastal town near Odessa. It is popular with tourists because it sits next to the sea and has many hotels and guesthouses, which makes it lively in the summer.

提案: Respond with a clear topic sentence stating what you like, then give specific reasons or examples. Fix grammar (e.g., use 'near' or 'by the sea'), reduce repetition, and use linking words such as 'because' or 'so'.

例: I love that my hometown is by the sea because I can relax on the beach and enjoy the scenery. For example, I often spend weekends there with my family, having picnics and swimming.

提案: Use the correct tense and a simple, direct sentence to answer duration questions. Say how long you have lived there using either present perfect with 'for' or a phrase like 'since I was born'. Avoid extra words like 'old' in this context.

例: I have lived there since I was born — for sixteen years.

提案: Give a direct opinion sentence and support it with two specific reasons or examples. Vary vocabulary to avoid repetition (e.g., 'popular', 'trendy', 'attractive') and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: Yes, it is. There is a large shopping mall near my home that attracts many young people because it has cafes, cinemas and fashion stores, so teenagers often hang out there after school.

× My hometown is in the countryside of Odessa and it's very popular place for tourists is called Fontanka because we are live the next to the sea and reserve lots of different hotels.

✓ My hometown is in the countryside of Odessa; the very popular place for tourists is called Fontanka because we live next to the sea and there are lots of different hotels.

Errors: incorrect pronouns and word order ('we are live' should be 'we live'), missing 'there' for existential construction, and awkward sentence structure. Suggestions: break into clearer clauses, use 'there are' for existence, use 'live' not 'are live', and place modifiers next to nouns. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× I really admire that we have seen next to our my hometown and and I can enjoy and relax there and also have a great time with my family or friends.

✓ I really like that we have the sea near our hometown, and I can relax and enjoy my time there with my family or friends.

Errors: incorrect pronouns and possessive placement ('our my hometown' is redundant), misuse of 'have seen' (wrong verb choice), and repetition 'and and'. Suggestions: use 'the sea near our hometown' or 'the sea is near our hometown', use simple verbs 'relax and enjoy', remove duplicate conjunctions. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× I have been lived there for since my birth. It's for 16 years old.

✓ I have lived there since I was born. I am 16 years old.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'have been lived' (should be present perfect 'have lived' or present perfect continuous without passive), incorrect use of 'for since' (use either 'for' with duration or 'since' with a point in time), and incorrect age expression. Suggestions: use 'have lived' with 'since' and state age as 'I am 16 years old'. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Yes, of course, there is a shopping mall next to my home and it's very popular and it's a very trendy place for teenagers and lots of different people.

✓ Yes, of course, there is a shopping mall near my home; it's very popular and a trendy place for teenagers and many other people.

Errors: repetition and word choice ('next to my home' is acceptable but 'near my home' is smoother), 'lots of different people' is awkward. Suggestions: use 'there is' correctly, avoid repetition of 'it's', and replace 'lots of different people' with 'many other people' or 'people of all ages'. Grammar problem type ID: 3