Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: まずは文法と語順の誤りを直し、情報を簡潔に述べる練習をしてください。具体的には主語＋動詞の基本構造を意識し、複数のアイデアを言うときは短い文に分けて明瞭に伝えることが大切です。また、地理的な説明では前置詞（in, on, at, near, outskirts of）を正しく使うように練習しましょう。例文を暗唱して自然な言い回しを身につけると良いです。

例: My hometown is called Shiva. It’s a small town on the outskirts of the city, and there is a train connection to the city center.

提案: まず主題文で明確に答え、その後に具体的な詳細（理由や頻度）をつける練習をしてください。冠詞や名詞の単複数（a/the, beach/beaches）に注意し、文をつなぐときは接続詞（and, because, so）を自然に使うように練習しましょう。語彙は日常的な表現で十分なので、正確さを優先してください。

例: My favorite place in my hometown is the beach because it is very large and peaceful. I often go there with my dog to walk along the shore and relax.

提案: 現在完了形（have lived）と過去形の使い分けを学んでください。『生まれてからずっと住んでいる』なら“have lived”を使い、年数を言うときは正確に年を伝える練習をしましょう。余分な言い直しや混乱を避けるため、簡潔に一文で答える癖をつけてください。

例: I have lived there since I was born, so I have lived in Shiva for 18 years.

提案: 理由を述べるときは一つか二つの明確なポイントを挙げ、それぞれを短く説明してください。冗長な表現や重複（my in my, very young people living there）を避け、語順と冠詞に注意しましょう。接続語（because, so, therefore）を正しく使い、具体例（activities, clubs）を加えると説得力が増します。

例: Yes, I think it is a good place for young people because the local community is friendly. Also, there are many young people living there, so it’s easy to meet friends and join social activities.

× My hometown names is Shiva.

✓ My hometown's name is Shiva.

The subject 'hometown' is singular, so use 'name' (singular) and possessive form 'hometown's'. Also 'names is' is incorrect word order and plural. Use 'My hometown's name is Shiva.' Suggestion: Use possessive + singular noun: 'My hometown's name is ...'.

× Shiva is placed at outskirt and you can take a train for go to city and take on our.

✓ Shiva is located on the outskirts, and you can take a train to go to the city.

Use 'located' instead of 'placed' for towns, 'on the outskirts' is correct preposition and plural form, and 'take a train to go to the city' uses 'to' for direction. Remove 'take on our' which is ungrammatical. Suggestion: Use set phrases: 'located on the outskirts' and 'take a train to the city.'.

× My favorite? Spot in my hometown is beach.

✓ My favorite spot in my hometown is the beach.

Remove the question mark and combine words: 'favorite spot' is a noun phrase. Add definite article 'the' before 'beach'. Suggestion: Use 'My favorite spot in my hometown is the beach.'.

× My hometown have a very big beach.

✓ My hometown has a very big beach.

Hometown is singular, so the verb should be 'has' not 'have'. Suggestion: Match singular subjects with singular verbs: 'hometown has.'.

× I love that and I usually go there with my dog.

✓ I love it, and I usually go there with my dog.

Use 'it' to refer to 'the beach' (pronoun agreement). The original tense is fine; change 'that' to 'it' for natural reference. Suggestion: Use 'it' for things previously mentioned: 'I love it.'.

× I was living there since when I was born so that mean I living in 18 minute no 18 year.

✓ I have lived there since I was born, so that means I have been living there for 18 years.

Use present perfect 'have lived' with 'since' for an action continuing from past to present. 'Since I was born' is the correct clause. Use 'that means' for present meaning and 'have been living there for 18 years' to state duration; use 'years' not 'minute'. Suggestion: Use present perfect with 'since' and 'for' with a period: 'I have lived there since I was born; that means I have been living there for 18 years.'.

× It was long time.

✓ It has been a long time.

To describe a duration up to now, use present perfect 'has been' and include an article 'a'. Suggestion: Say 'It has been a long time.'.

× Yes, because my hometown's people are very kind and my in my hometown, very young people living there, so young people can make a friend easily.

✓ Yes, because the people in my hometown are very kind, and many young people live there, so it is easy for young people to make friends.

Use 'the people in my hometown' for natural phrasing. 'Very young people living there' is ungrammatical; use 'many young people live there'. 'Make a friend easily' is better as 'make friends easily' or 'it is easy for young people to make friends.' Suggestion: Use natural collocations: 'the people in my hometown', 'many young people live there', and 'make friends easily.'.