Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more accurate and concise: give correct geographic details, a clear topic sentence, and one brief supporting detail. Avoid grammatical errors (e.g., 'a city with long history' -> 'a city with a long history').

例: I’m from Sanya in Shanxi Province. It’s in northwest China and is a city with a long history, known for its preserved traditional architecture.

提案: Make the answer natural and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar (e.g., 'is convenient for travel'), and use linking words to list specifics. Name transport modes correctly and avoid unclear phrases like 'red has underground'.

例: I like that my hometown is convenient for travel. For example, there are frequent buses, a subway system and plenty of shared bikes, so it’s easy to get around.

提案: Provide a direct, grammatically correct response and add one concise supporting detail using a linking word. Use 'lived there' with duration and a clear reference point.

例: I have lived there for 20 years since I was a child. Because of that, most of my family and friends still live in the same city.

提案: Be specific and accurate: compare correctly ('more job opportunities than in other cities'), explain why, and avoid unclear phrases ('take care of my families'). Use linking words to give reasons and a short example or result.

例: Yes, it is a good place for young people because it offers more job opportunities than nearby cities and affordable housing, so many young professionals can build careers and support their families.

× I'm from Sanya in Shanxi province.

✓ I'm from Sanya in Hainan province.

The sentence's grammar is fine, but the preposition 'in' is correct. However the original place 'Sanya' is actually in Hainan province, not Shanxi. Use correct proper noun to avoid factual error. Suggestion: check proper nouns and locations before answering.

× It is in the northwest of China and my hometown is a city with long history.

✓ It is in the northwest of China, and my hometown is a city with a long history.

Two issues: missing article 'a' before 'long history' (Article errors, ID 22) and missing comma before coordinating conjunction joining two independent clauses (sentence structure, ID 26). Use 'a long history' and add a comma: '...China, and my hometown...'. Suggestion: Add the indefinite article before singular noun phrases that need one and punctuate compound sentences with a comma before 'and' when joining independent clauses.

× My hometown has convenient for traveling.

✓ My hometown is convenient for traveling.

The original uses 'has convenient' which is ungrammatical: 'convenient' is an adjective and should be linked with a copular verb 'is' (incorrect use of adjectives, ID 13). Suggestion: Use 'is convenient' or 'has convenient transportation' depending on meaning.

× There are many public transportations.

✓ There is a lot of public transportation.

'Transportation' as an uncountable noun should not take plural 'transportations' (quantifier/noun use, ID 14). Also 'there is' matches uncountable singular (there be issue, ID 3). Suggestion: Use 'a lot of public transportation' or 'many public transport options'.

× For example, red has underground and shared bikes.

✓ For example, the city has a subway and shared bikes.

Original 'red has underground' is unclear and ungrammatical. Likely intended 'the city has an underground/subway system and shared bikes.' Errors: wrong word choice and sentence structure (ID 26) and article use ('a subway') (ID 22). Suggestion: Use 'the city has a subway and shared bikes' or 'there is an underground system and shared bikes'.

× I have lived for 20 years, since I was a kid.

✓ I have lived there for 20 years, since I was a kid.

Missing object 'there' to indicate location (sentence structure, ID 26). Present perfect 'have lived' is correct to describe duration up to now. Suggestion: Include 'there' after 'lived' when referring to living in a place: 'I have lived there for 20 years.'

× Yes, there are more job opportunities than other cities and it can take care of my families.

✓ Yes, there are more job opportunities than in other cities, and it can take care of my family.

Multiple issues: comparison requires a preposition or clause ('than in other cities') (incorrect comparison object, ID 19 / preposition, ID 11). 'Families' is incorrect; 'family' as a collective noun fits here (pronoun/noun use, ID 12). 'It can take care of my family' uses 'it' to refer to the city (acceptable), but consider 'it can provide for my family' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: Use 'than in other cities' and singular 'family' or 'my families' only if multiple families are meant.