Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, tự nhiên và chính xác. Hãy loại bỏ các tiếng lắp, sử dụng câu chủ đề trực tiếp và bổ sung một vài chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: vị trí trong thành phố hoặc đặc điểm nổi bật) nếu cần. Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu và tránh nói tên đường không cần thiết trừ khi liên quan.

例: My hometown is Haiphong, a coastal city in northern Vietnam. It’s known for its busy port and historic architecture, and I grew up near the city center.

提案: Tránh lặp từ và tiếng lắp. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng nêu một hoặc hai điểm bạn thích, sau đó dùng liên từ (such as, and, also) để liệt kê chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ món ăn nổi bật, lễ hội, tính cách con người). Sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp như “friendly people”, “unique cuisine”, “seafood” một cách trôi chảy.

例: I like the friendly atmosphere of my hometown and its unique cuisine. For example, Haiphong is famous for fresh seafood dishes and local specialties that you can’t easily find elsewhere.

提案: Trả lời trực tiếp về thời gian sống hoặc mối quan hệ với nơi đó. Dùng câu rõ ràng: nêu nơi bạn sinh ra, nơi bạn sống hiện tại và tần suất bạn về thăm. Tránh rườm rà và tiếng lắp; dùng liên từ như “however” hoặc “but” để diễn đạt sự tương phản.

例: I was actually born in Hanoi and currently live there, so I haven’t lived in Haiphong. However, I visit Haiphong regularly to see my grandparents, usually a few times a year.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng về quan điểm (có/không/it depends) kèm lý do cụ thể. Tránh từ sai ngữ cảnh (ví dụ dùng 'Liverpool' nhầm). Nêu ít nhất hai lý do có dẫn chứng (cơ hội việc làm, chi phí, giáo dục, giải trí), và kết luận ngắn gọn. Dùng linking words như 'because', 'for example', 'however'.

例: I think Haiphong can be a good place for young people because there are growing job opportunities in shipping and manufacturing. For example, new factories and the port create entry-level jobs, and the cost of living is lower than in Hanoi, which helps young people save money.

× Well, umm, my hometown is located in Haiphong uh Chengzheng St.

✓ Well, umm, my hometown is located in Haiphong on Chengzheng Street.

The preposition 'in' is correct for a city (in Haiphong) but for a street within a city use 'on' before the street name. Also 'St.' should be expanded to 'Street' for clarity. Suggestion: say 'located in Haiphong on Chengzheng Street.'

× Well, that's an interesting question for me. Umm, my hometown is uh, famous in uh, uh, polite people and friendly, uh, which has very cultural and, uh, special cuisine, like, umm, a special food, a seafood and uh.

✓ Well, that's an interesting question for me. Umm, my hometown is famous for its polite and friendly people, and it has a very rich and distinctive cuisine, such as special seafood dishes.

Use 'famous for' not 'famous in'. Adjectives describing people should be placed before the noun ('polite and friendly people'). 'Very cultural' is unnatural; use 'very rich' or 'culturally rich'. 'A seafood' is incorrect; 'seafood' is an uncountable noun and should not have an indefinite article. Suggestion: 'famous for its polite and friendly people' and 'distinctive cuisine, such as seafood dishes.'

× Uh, in, in the real, uh, event, I don't live in this place because I was born in Hanoi. Uh, but sometime I also spend my time for, visit this place for, uh, to visiting my grandparents.

✓ Actually, I don't live there now because I was born in Hanoi. But sometimes I also visit my grandparents there.

'In the real event' is awkward; use 'actually'. 'I don't live in this place' -> 'I don't live there now' is more natural. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'I also spend my time for, visit this place for, uh, to visiting' mixes forms; use simple present 'I sometimes visit my grandparents there.' Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use 'sometimes' + base verb 'visit.'

× I think my hometown is hard, uh, more, uh, more opportunity for young people, for, uh, Liverpool and accommodation because umm, if young people live here, we will have a many chance for uh, uh, more adaptation with environment.

✓ I think my hometown offers more opportunities for young people, especially in employment and accommodation, because if young people live here, they will have many chances to adapt to the environment.

'Hard' is wrong here; use 'offers' or 'has'. 'More opportunity' should be plural 'more opportunities'. 'Liverpool' is likely wrong word; context suggests 'employment' or 'livelihood'. 'A many chance' is incorrect; use 'many chances' or 'a good chance'. 'Adaptation with environment' should be 'adapt to the environment.' Suggestion: use 'offers more opportunities', 'employment', and 'many chances to adapt.'