Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は主題を示していますが、文法ミスと不自然な表現が目立ちます。例えば「which is countryside」→「which is in the countryside」、「still live to there」→「still live there」、「I often visited them」→「I often visit them/visit them often」。また時制（一貫した現在形または過去形）に注意し、情報を1〜2文で端的にまとめると良いです。接続詞（becauseなど）を使って理由を明確にしてください。

例: My hometown is Tochigi, which is in the countryside of Japan. My parents and my husband still live there, so I visit them often.

提案: 答えに感情の変化があり良いですが、文法や語順、時制が不自然です。例えば「I love there」→「I love it now」、「there are many Hot Springs」→小文字と単語の扱いを統一。「whenever I go my hometown, I visited Hot Springs」→「whenever I go to my hometown, I visit the hot springs」。また情報を繋ぐためにthough/but/nowなどの接続表現を適切に使ってください。

例: To be honest, I used to find it boring when I was young, but now I love it because there are many hot springs. Whenever I visit my hometown, I usually go to a hot spring.

提案: 文法上の誤り（“lived there for 18 years old”は不自然）と時制の混乱があります。正しくは「I lived there until I was 18」や「I lived there for 18 years」。また「After graduation, I moved to UH Tokyo to study in the university」も冗長なので「After graduating, I moved to Tokyo to attend university」のように簡潔に。時制は過去形で統一してください。

例: I lived there for 18 years. After graduating from high school, I moved to Tokyo to attend university.

提案: 意見は明確ですが、英語表現に不自然さがあります。「Young people may feel a little boring」→「Young people may feel a little bored」、「there are few entertainment facilities such as cinema or Sports Center」→冠詞と複数形に注意：「few entertainment facilities, such as cinemas or sports centres」。また理由を示す際、具体例や比較を加えると説得力が増します。

例: I don't think so. Young people may feel a bit bored because there are few entertainment facilities, such as cinemas or sports centres, compared with big cities.

× My hometown is Tochigi, which is countryside in Japan.

✓ My hometown is Tochigi, which is in the countryside in Japan.

Missing preposition 'in' before 'the countryside'. Use 'in the countryside' to indicate location within a general area. Suggestion: include 'in' and the definite article 'the' for 'countryside' when referring to a rural area.'

× My husband, my parents still live to there, so I often visited them.

✓ My husband and my parents still live there, so I often visit them.

Incorrect preposition 'to' and wrong verb tense. Use 'live there' (no 'to'). Use present simple 'visit' to match habitual action 'often'. Suggestion: remove 'to', connect subjects with 'and', and use correct tense for habitual actions.'

× To be honest, when I was young, I thought it it was, uh, boring.

✓ To be honest, when I was young, I thought it was boring.

Repeated word 'it' is a typo and unnecessary. Past tense 'thought' is correct for a past opinion. Suggestion: remove the duplicate 'it' and keep clear phrasing.'

× But now I love there because there are many Hot Springs.

✓ But now I love it there because there are many hot springs.

Pronoun 'there' cannot be the direct object of 'love'; use 'love it there'. 'Hot Springs' should be lowercase 'hot springs' unless a proper noun. Suggestion: add 'it' and use correct capitalization.'

× So whenever I go my hometown, I visited Hot Springs.

✓ So whenever I go to my hometown, I visit hot springs.

Incorrect verb tense and missing preposition. Use present simple 'go' and 'visit' for habitual actions. Add preposition 'to' after 'go'. Use lowercase for 'hot springs'. Suggestion: 'whenever I go to my hometown, I visit hot springs.'

× I lived there for 18 years old.

✓ I lived there until I was 18 years old.

Incorrect time expression. Use 'until I was 18 years old' to indicate duration up to that age. 'for 18 years old' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use 'until' with age or 'for 18 years' for duration.'

× After graduation, I moved to UH Tokyo to study in the university.

✓ After graduation, I moved to UH Tokyo to study at the university.

Preposition 'at' is correct with 'the university' or omit 'the' with a proper noun. 'in the university' is less natural. Suggestion: use 'at the university' or 'to study at UH Tokyo.'

× Young people may feel a little boring because there are few entertainment facilities such as cinema or Sports Center.

✓ Young people may feel a little bored because there are few entertainment facilities such as cinemas or a sports center.

Adjective 'boring' describes something that causes boredom; use 'bored' for people. 'Cinema' should be plural 'cinemas' after 'such as'. 'Sports Center' needs an article 'a' and lowercase 'sports center'. 'Few' is acceptable but note it means almost none. Suggestion: use 'bored', pluralize examples, and include appropriate articles.'