Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence naming the place, then give 1–2 specific supporting details. Avoid fragments and unnecessary words. Use correct grammar for place names and simple linking words to connect ideas (for example, “and” or “because”).

例: I come from Moncada, a town in Tarlac province in Region 3. It is a small, peaceful place surrounded by rice fields, and I am proud of it because it feels very safe and friendly.

提案: Organize your answer: give a topic sentence listing 2–3 things you like, then add one specific example using a linking word (for example, “for example” or “also”). Use correct grammar for countable/uncountable nouns and avoid repetitive words. Describe one specific food or activity to make it more vivid.

例: I like my hometown because it is safe, quiet and full of friendly people. For example, many families work in rice farming and they often welcome visitors to local festivals where you can try tasty dishes like pancit and homemade rice cakes.

提案: Answer directly with how long you have lived there, then briefly explain why you stayed using correct tense and simple linking words. Avoid unrelated place names and unclear phrases. Keep it to one or two sentences with correct subject-verb agreement.

例: I have lived in Moncada, Tarlac all my life — about 25 years. I have stayed because it is a calm place with a supportive neighborhood and less stress than city life.

提案: Give a clear opinion and support it with 1–2 specific reasons. Use linking words like “because” and “for example.” Correct grammar: use plural/singular forms and avoid vague endings. Mention particular opportunities or activities for young people (schools, sports, festivals).

例: Yes, I think it is a good place for young people because it is safe and there are many outdoor activities. For example, young people can join local sports teams, help with community farming projects, and enjoy festivals with music and local food.

× My hometown is Monkada Terlagu, it is located in Region 3.

✓ My hometown is Moncada Terlagu; it is located in Region 3.

The original has a comma splice joining two independent clauses with a comma. Use a semicolon, conjunction, or make two sentences. Suggestion: use a semicolon here to join closely related independent clauses.

× This is a province of Tarlac city that you always remember about the special traveling in Karlaka.

✓ This is a town in Tarlac province that is known for special trips to Karlaka.

The original mixes incorrect nouns and word order (province of Tarlac city is confusing). Also 'you always remember about the special traveling' is awkward and ungrammatical. Rephrase to clear subject and correct noun forms: 'town in Tarlac province' and 'known for special trips'.

× I am really proud to be a Monkadenian because.

✓ I am really proud to be a Monkadenian.

The original ends with a dangling subordinating 'because' without completing the reason, creating a sentence fragment. Remove 'because' or add the reason. Here the sentence is corrected by removing the incomplete conjunction.

× Is very safe and quiet please, especially no stressful.

✓ It is very safe and quiet, and not stressful.

The sentence lacks a subject and uses incorrect word forms ('please' and 'no stressful'). Add the subject 'It', connect ideas with 'and', and use the adjective 'stressful' with 'not' to make a correct negation.

× I really like my hometown because it is safe, comfortable and quiet place.

✓ I really like my hometown because it is a safe, comfortable, and quiet place.

The noun 'place' requires an article 'a' and commas are needed in a list. Add 'a' before 'safe' and include the Oxford comma for clarity.

× It is also surrounded by a rice field and agricultural areas.

✓ It is also surrounded by rice fields and agricultural areas.

Use plural 'rice fields' when speaking generally; the article 'a' is incorrect if multiple fields are meant. Plural better matches 'areas'.

× Many people in our town is hardworking and friendly, which is our place more exciting and welcoming.

✓ Many people in our town are hardworking and friendly, which makes our town more exciting and welcoming.

Subject-verb agreement: 'people' is plural so use 'are'. The clause 'which is our place more exciting' is ungrammatical; use 'which makes our town more exciting and welcoming' to show cause.

× You visit there.

✓ You should visit there.

Original is a fragment or imperative missing modal. Adding 'should' makes it a recommendation. Alternatively 'You can visit there' or 'Visit there' are acceptable.

× There are a lot of food that you might must be taste too delicious.

✓ There is a lot of food that you might want to taste; it is very delicious.

'Food' is uncountable, so use 'there is a lot of food'. 'Might must be' is a conflicting modal combination; use 'might want to' or 'you must taste'. 'Too delicious' is awkward—separate clauses clarify meaning.

× I am a residence sea of Moncada Tarlac and I live in Seoul about 10 years from now and I must say that it is very interesting and comfortable place to live because it is less stressful and.

✓ I have been a resident of Moncada, Tarlac, and I have lived here for about 10 years. I must say that it is a very interesting and comfortable place to live because it is less stressful.

Multiple issues: incorrect noun forms ('residence sea'), wrong city 'Seoul' seems misplaced, tense misuse. Use present perfect 'have been/resident' and 'have lived for about 10 years' to indicate duration up to now. Add article 'a' before 'very interesting' and remove the dangling conjunction at the end.

× Our neighborhood is generous and time.

✓ Our neighborhood is generous and close-knit.

Original uses 'time' incorrectly as an adjective; 'generous' used for people better paired with community traits like 'close-knit' or 'friendly'. Suggest appropriate adjective 'close-knit' to express community cohesion.

× Yes, of course, I really recommended in young people and into the next generation, because our hometown is comfortable place that you must enjoy a lot of breathtaking views, delicious food and especially.

✓ Yes, of course. I would really recommend it to young people and the next generation because our hometown is a comfortable place where you can enjoy many breathtaking views and delicious food.

Original has incorrect verb form 'recommended' (past) and wrong prepositions 'in' and 'into'. Use conditional/modal 'would recommend' for advice. Add article 'a' before 'comfortable place' and change 'that you must enjoy' to 'where you can enjoy'. Remove the dangling 'and especially'.

× Most of our Monkadenian citizen is friendly and welcoming.

✓ Most of our Monkadenian citizens are friendly and welcoming.

'Most of our ... citizens' is plural, so the verb should be 'are'. Also pluralize 'citizen' to 'citizens' to match 'most'.