Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the town, then give one or two brief, specific details. Correct errors (use 'quiet' not 'quite', avoid unnecessary clauses like 'in which'). Keep to at most 3–4 sentences.

例: I come from Sunnam, where I have lived all my life. It's a small, quiet town surrounded by hills, and I enjoy the peaceful atmosphere and friendly neighbors.

提案: Answer directly with one main point and one supporting detail using correct grammar and linking words. Use singular/plural correctly and provide a specific example of the library resource. Avoid vague pronouns like 'them'.

例: I like the peaceful atmosphere of my hometown because it makes daily life relaxing. For example, the nearby public library offers a wide selection of books and free study rooms that I often use.

提案: Use the correct tense for duration questions (present perfect: 'I've lived...'). Give a concise direct answer, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid sentence fragments like 'The scenery.'

例: I've lived in Somnath since I was born, so almost 30 years. I still enjoy living there because the scenery around the river and the parks is beautiful.

提案: Begin with a direct answer then support it with clear, specific reasons. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'modern facilities') and plural agreement ('facilities' and 'offer'). Mention one concrete example of a program or facility for young people.

例: Yes, it is. Sunnam has many good schools and modern facilities that support young people. For example, the community college offers vocational courses in IT and hospitality that help students find local jobs.

× It is really quite and peaceful.

✓ It is really quiet and peaceful.

The student used 'quite' but wrote 'and' accidentally, producing 'quite and peaceful' which is ungrammatical. Replace 'and' with 'quiet' to form the correct adjective 'quiet' that pairs with 'peaceful'. Suggestion: use 'quiet and peaceful' or 'really quiet and peaceful'.

× I love them.

✓ I love it.

The pronoun 'them' is plural and does not agree with the singular noun 'my hometown'. Use 'it' for singular nouns. Suggestion: match pronoun number to the noun (my hometown = it).

× the Public Library nearby offer great resource.

✓ the public library nearby offers great resources.

Errors: unnecessary capitalization, subject-verb disagreement, missing plural noun. 'Public Library' should be lowercased unless a proper name; the subject 'the public library' is singular so the verb must be 'offers' (third person singular). 'Resource' should be plural 'resources' or 'a great resource'. Suggestion: 'the public library nearby offers great resources.'

× I'd lived in Somnath since I was born, so almost 30 years.

✓ I've lived in Somnath since I was born, so almost 30 years.

Using 'I'd lived' (would/had) is incorrect with 'since' to indicate an action continuing to the present. The present perfect 'I've lived' (I have lived) is correct for an action that started in the past and continues now. Suggestion: use present perfect with 'since' or 'for' (for almost 30 years).

× The scenery.

✓ The scenery is beautiful.

'The scenery.' is a sentence fragment lacking a verb and complete thought. To be complete, add a verb and adjective or continue the sentence: 'The scenery is beautiful' or 'The scenery is lovely.' Suggestion: avoid fragments; make full sentences.

× modern fact facilities

✓ modern facilities

The phrase 'fact facilities' is ungrammatical; likely the student meant 'modern facilities'. Remove 'fact'. Suggestion: use 'modern facilities' or specify 'modern factory facilities' if factories were intended.

× we have several high schools and Community College that overall range of courses.

✓ we have several high schools and a community college that offer a wide range of courses.

Issues: missing article before 'community college' ('a community college'), incorrect capitalization ('community college' not a proper name), verb agreement ('that offer' to match plural noun phrase), and awkward phrase 'overall range of courses' which should be 'a wide range of courses'. Suggestion: 'several high schools and a community college that offer a wide range of courses.'