Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中有数字错误，且表达不够自然。建议准确表达人口数量，并简洁明了地介绍家乡。

例: My hometown is Beijing, which is one of the largest cities in China with over 20 million residents.

提案: 回答中有语法和词汇错误，表达不清晰。建议使用正确的词汇描述购物中心，并说明喜欢的具体原因。

例: I like the shopping malls in Beijing because they are very large and offer a wide variety of products, so you can find almost anything you need.

提案: 回答语法混乱，难以理解。建议直接回答居住时间，并用简单句表达。

例: I have lived in Beijing for 16 years since I was born.

提案: 回答不完整且无意义。建议明确表达观点，并给出理由。

例: Yes, Beijing is a great place for young people because it offers many job opportunities and entertainment options.

× Actually, Beijing is one of the biggest cities in China with 1,000,000 of people living here.

✓ Actually, Beijing is one of the biggest cities in China with 1,000,000 people living here.

这里“1,000,000 of people”中的“of”是不必要的，数字后直接加名词复数即可，正确表达为“1,000,000 people”。

× They are a big infant and you can buy anything when when you want her.

✓ They are very big and you can buy anything when you want.

“a big infant”用词错误，应该用形容词描述购物中心的大小，且“when when you want her”重复且用词错误，应改为“when you want”。

× Ever been leaving her for 16 years I was bring and rest up here.

✓ I have been living here for 16 years since I was born and grew up here.

句子结构混乱，时态和词汇使用错误，正确表达应为“我从出生起在这里生活了16年”。

× Ever been leaving her for 16 years I was bring and rest up here.

✓ I have been living here for 16 years since I was born and grew up here.

“her”指代错误，应该用“here”表示地点。

× It's a young people for.

✓ It's a good place for young people.

“a young people”用法错误，people是复数名词，不加冠词，且句子缺少形容词修饰，应为“a good place for young people”。