Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 纠正语法与表达，回答要直接并逻辑清晰。你应先一句话明确身份，然后用1-2句补充细节。注意时态、介词和词汇（e.g. ‘graduated in’, ‘working for six months’, ‘preparing for IELTS’）。避免多余短语。

例: I am currently working. I graduated with a degree in gym management and have been working for six months. Now I am taking a course in Mumbai to prepare for the IELTS and to improve my professional skills for my future career.

提案: 句子要更自然，先给出公司类型与职位，然后具体说明职责。使用正确词汇（e.g. ‘small foreign-trade company’, ‘handle customer accounts’, ‘manage shipments’）。合并碎片句，使用连接词使表达连贯。

例: I work at a small foreign-trade company where I mainly handle customer accounts and coordinate shipments. I communicate with clients and arrange logistics to ensure orders are delivered on time.

提案: 回答应直接并用完整句子说明原因。避免错误的代词与不完整短语。说明具体方面（工作环境、发展机会、同事关系等）并用连接词如 ‘because’ 或 ‘and’。

例: Yes, I think it is a good place to work because it has a pleasant working environment and offers clear opportunities for career development. The team is supportive, which helps me learn new skills.

提案: 表达要清楚并提供具体原因。用正确词汇（e.g. ‘inconvenient’, ‘far from the city centre’, ‘no social life nearby’）。可提出改进建议或折衷看法，避免语法错误和模糊短语。

例: To be honest, I don't really like the place because it is quite inconvenient and far from the city centre. There are few shops or social places nearby, so it's hard to meet friends after work.

提案: 先直接回答计划，再给出具体原因。使用正确结构（e.g. ‘I plan to… because…’）。避免重复和语法混乱，说明具体目标（职位、行业、技能提升）以显得更具体有条理。

例: I plan to continue working for an international company because I find the work rewarding and it helps me build confidence. In the future, I hope to move into a management role where I can lead a team and develop my professional skills further.

× I am currently now working or studying.

✓ I am currently working.

句子中同时使用了 now 和 currently 冗余，且 or studying 与语境不符（面试回答需明确选择）。应去掉重复词并明确表述。建议使用“I am currently working.”或“I am currently a student.”来清晰表达。

× I graduated in gym and work in for six months and now I am taking to Mumbai to prepare for aisles and improve my professional skills for my future career.

✓ I graduated from university and worked there for six months. Now I have come to Mumbai to prepare for IELTS and improve my professional skills for my future career.

原句存在多处错误：使用 in gym 错误（应为 from university 或具体学校）；时态混乱（graduated 与 work in for six months 需用过去时或完成时）；短语 taking to Mumbai 不自然，应为 come/come to Mumbai 或 have come； aisles 拼写错误，应为 IELTS。建议按时间顺序分成两句并使用正确时态和词汇。

× While I am working in the small foreign trade company, I mainly handle the acquaintance of customers. And shipments.

✓ While working at a small foreign trade company, I mainly handle customer relations and shipments.

介词用法错误：应使用 at a company 而非 in the company（在公司内部可用 in，但常见搭配是 work at a company）。acquaintance of customers 不自然，应为 customer relations/customer accounts。将两个断句合并为完整句子更自然。

× Oh wow, I think that's a good place to work because which have a good environment and is provide. A path for to me.

✓ Oh, I think that's a good place to work because it has a good environment and provides a path for me.

使用了错误的关系代词 which；主语与动词不一致（which have → it has）；provide 用法不完整（is provide → provides）；path for to me 有多余介词 to。改为 it has/provides 并去掉多余词。

× To be honest, I don't like the place where I work because that is very inconvenient. It is far from the central and I couldn't have more intimate place.

✓ To be honest, I don't like the place where I work because it is very inconvenient. It is far from the city centre and I don't have a more convenient place nearby.

代词 that 用错，应为 it。the central 不自然，常用 city centre 或 downtown。couldn't have more intimate place 意思不清且时态/情态错误，应改为 I don't have a more convenient place nearby 或 I don't have a closer place to live. 注意表达清晰与词汇常用搭配。

× Yes, that's a good question. And I think that I will continue to join a foreign company because I am have be interesting in because they tell me more confidence and uh, have a sense of achievement.

✓ Yes, that's a good question. I think I will continue to work for a foreign company because I am interested in them; they give me more confidence and a sense of achievement.

句中时态和词序混乱：continue to join 不自然，应为 continue to work for/with 或 join (单次)；I am have be interesting in 完全错误，应为 I am interested in。they tell me more confidence 用词错误，应为 they give me more confidence。去掉语气词 uh 并理顺句子。