Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Good clear response with relevant detail and natural language. To improve, shorten slightly to avoid redundancy and add a linking phrase to connect ideas. Keep to around 2–3 sentences, start with a direct topic sentence, then one supporting detail with a linking word.

例: I'm a high school senior preparing for university. Currently I'm concentrating on applying to modern languages programs because I want to study English and French at a higher level, so I'm focusing on entrance exams and coursework.

提案: Strong, direct answer and good reason given. To make it more natural, shorten and connect sentences with a linking word (e.g., 'so' or 'because') and avoid formal phrases like 'the main rationale behind this'.

例: I don't work at the moment because I'm a full-time student. I'm focusing on English and French so I can pursue a career as a translator or language tutor.

提案: Good use of an example to support your opinion. Improve by fixing a small grammatical slip ('the administration invites') and tightening phrasing. Use one linking phrase like 'for example' and keep it to two sentences.

例: Yes, it's a great place to learn. For example, the school invites a native-speaking teacher each year, which really helps us improve our speaking skills.

提案: Balanced answer with personal feeling and critique. Improve by removing small repetition ('the its') and by linking positive and negative views with a connector like 'however'. Keep it to three sentences maximum.

例: I like my school because it has a friendly, vibrant atmosphere and supportive peers. However, I think it could offer more specialized academic programs for students aiming to excel in particular fields.

提案: Clear career plan with logical progression. Improve by avoiding filler ('well, as I mentioned') and making phrasing concise; correct capitalization ('language academy' as common noun) and use a linking word like 'then' or 'after that' to show sequence.

例: My immediate goal is to attend university to study modern languages. After graduating, I plan to work as a translator or tutor, and eventually I hope to become a freelance translator or start my own language academy.

× 'Right now, I am heavily focused on preparing for my upcoming university studies, where I intend to major in modern languages.'

✓ 'Right now, I am heavily focused on preparing for my upcoming university studies, where I intend to major in modern languages.'

'focused on' is correct here; no preposition error. No change needed.'

× 'Since I'm still a full time student, I don't currently hold a job.'

✓ 'Since I'm still a full-time student, I don't currently hold a job.'

'full-time' should be hyphenated when used as a compound adjective before a noun. This is punctuation rather than a preposition error, but it is a common grammar convention. Suggestion: use hyphen for compound adjectives.'

× 'For instance, the administration in invites a native speaking teacher every year, which gives us an invaluable opportunity to hone our speaking skills in a real world context.'

✓ 'For instance, the administration invites a native-speaking teacher every year, which gives us an invaluable opportunity to hone our speaking skills in a real-world context.'

'in' is extraneous and should be removed. Also compound adjectives 'native-speaking' and 'real-world' require hyphens. Error type: incorrect conjunction/word use and hyphenation. Suggestion: remove unnecessary words and hyphenate compound adjectives.'

× 'Having said that, it's not without the its drawbacks.'

✓ 'Having said that, it's not without its drawbacks.'

'the its' is ungrammatical because two determiners cannot be used together; use either 'the' or 'its'. Here 'its' (possessive) is correct. Suggestion: remove 'the'.'

× 'Ultimately, I'd love to establish myself as a freelance translator or even set up my own language Academy, which will allow me to combine my passion for languages with working directly with people.'

✓ 'Ultimately, I'd love to establish myself as a freelance translator or even set up my own language academy, which will allow me to combine my passion for languages with working directly with people.'

'Academy' should not be capitalized unless it is part of a proper name. This is an article/capitalization convention. Suggestion: use lowercase for common nouns.'