Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct verb forms; avoid fillers (umm) and keep to one or two clear sentences. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific support detail using correct grammar and a linking word.

例: I'm currently preparing for a PhD program, so I'm not working at the moment. At the same time, I'm improving my English and developing my research interest in anthropology because I plan to focus on cultural comparison in my studies.

提案: Good content and coherence. Improve by combining sentences to avoid repetition and use a linking phrase to connect ideas smoothly. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and add a specific detail (e.g., what you do in those corners).

例: I mostly work at home, where I've set up a few small corners for reading and writing, so I can switch locations when I need a break. For variety, I occasionally go to a cafe to change the scenery and focus on drafting papers or reading articles.

提案: Answer directly and reduce repetition (avoid repeating 'so' and 'little corners'). Use one linking word to present the negative point. Be specific about how noise affects your work and one strategy you use to cope.

例: Yes, it's a good place to work because I've arranged comfortable corners for different tasks, allowing me to change position when I need a break. However, nearby construction can be noisy at times, so I use noise-cancelling headphones or move to a cafe when I need quiet concentration.

提案: Correct word choice and grammar (overtime → over time; species → spaces). Avoid repeating 'comfortable' and 'quite'; be specific about what you like and why. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences with a linking word.

例: Yes, definitely. Over time I've made my workspace comfortable and private, with several different spaces for reading and writing. This variety helps me maintain focus and gives me the quiet atmosphere I need for study.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and correct phrasing (I hope to go into → I hope to go into research; avoid repeating 'future'). Add one specific research interest and a linking word to explain why. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I hope to pursue a career in research, probably in anthropology or a related field. I'm particularly interested in how cultural backgrounds shape people's worldviews, so I plan to study cross-cultural cognition and conduct ethnographic fieldwork to explore these differences.

× Well, I'm currently preparing for my PhD program, so I'm not working at the moment. UMM and I'm improving my English and also develop my umm research interest in anthropology.

✓ Well, I'm currently preparing for my PhD program, so I'm not working at the moment. Umm, I'm improving my English and also developing my research interests in anthropology.

The sentence mixes present continuous with a simple present verb 'develop'. When describing ongoing actions use present continuous ('am developing'). Also 'research interest' is better pluralized as 'research interests' to reflect multiple topics; this addresses present-tense continuity and noun form. Suggestion: use consistent continuous form for ongoing activities and pluralize when appropriate.

× Mostly at home, I've set up a few little corners for reading and writing. Actually, I quite enjoy studying there. Occasionally I'll go to a cafe just for a change of scenery.

✓ I mostly work at home; I've set up a few little corners for reading and writing. Actually, I quite enjoy studying there. Occasionally I go to a cafe just for a change of scenery.

The original sentence 'Mostly at home' is a dangling adverbial fragment. Reordering to 'I mostly work at home' completes the sentence structure. Also 'I'll go' implies future intention — 'I go' or 'I sometimes go' is more natural for habitual actions. Suggestion: start with the subject and use simple present for habitual activities.

× The only problem is the construction nearby, which can be a little noisy sometimes.

✓ The only problem is the construction nearby, which can be a little noisy at times.

'Sometimes' is acceptable but 'at times' is more idiomatic here; however the main issue is preposition choice with 'nearby'—keeping 'construction nearby' is conversational but more formal would be 'construction nearby' or 'a construction site nearby'. Suggestion: use 'a construction site nearby' or 'the construction nearby' and prefer 'at times' for occasional noise.

× Yes, definitely. I have made quite comfortable overtime and I really like having a few different species for me to read or write and it feels quite comfortable and private and also peaceful, which is quite important to me.

✓ Yes, definitely. I have made it quite comfortable over time, and I really like having a few different spaces where I can read or write; it feels private, comfortable, and peaceful, which is very important to me.

Several issues: 'made quite comfortable overtime' should be 'made it quite comfortable over time' (over time = gradual change). 'Species' is incorrect word choice; 'spaces' is intended (incorrect use of vocabulary but treated here as sentence structure/adjective/adverb use). Also sentence run-on and repetition; revise punctuation and word order for clarity. Suggestion: use correct collocations ('over time'), choose correct noun ('spaces'), and break long sentences into clear clauses.

× What I'm hoping to go into research in the future, probably in anthropology or related fields.

✓ I'm hoping to go into research in the future, probably in anthropology or related fields.

Sentence begins with 'What' creating an incorrect clause and sentence fragment. Removing 'What' yields a correct present progressive expressing future intention. Suggestion: drop extraneous 'What' and use 'I'm hoping to' to express planned future activity.

× I've always been interested in why people from different cultural backgrounds think of the world in such different ways, so I want to explore these questions deeply through academic.

✓ I've always been interested in why people from different cultural backgrounds think about the world in such different ways, so I want to explore these questions deeply through academia.

Use 'think about' rather than 'think of' for considering concepts. 'Through academic' is incorrect; the noun 'academia' is required. Suggestion: use correct verb-preposition collocation ('think about') and use the noun 'academia' when referring to the academic field or process.