Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. "I'm not working or studying at the moment.") then add one brief reason. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and grammar errors: use correct verb forms and phrasing ("preparing for an exam" not "else exam"). Keep answer to 1–2 sentences.

例: I'm not working or studying at the moment because I'm preparing for an important exam. I need to focus on my studies full-time for a few months.

提案: Answer directly and clearly: if you don't work, say so and give a concise reason. Use correct grammar ("I don't work at the moment" or "I'm not working because I don't have enough time"). Avoid repeating phrases and fillers. Limit to 1–2 sentences.

例: I don't work at the moment because I need to devote most of my time to exam preparation. Once I finish, I plan to look for part-time work.

提案: If you describe a workplace, use a clear topic sentence and specific details. For coherence, use linking words ("because", "also"). Correct grammar: "people are friendly", "there is a peaceful environment". Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, it's a good place to work because the atmosphere is peaceful and colleagues are friendly. Also, the company supports balance between work and personal life.

提案: Reply clearly whether you like the place and give a specific reason. Use correct nouns and possessives ("staff" not "staffs"). Avoid repetition and fillers. One clear sentence plus one supporting detail is enough.

例: Yes, I like the place because the staff are friendly and helpful, which makes daily work much easier. For example, colleagues often share tips and offer support when I need it.

提案: State your plan clearly with correct tense ("I want to become" or "I plan to be a content creator"). Then give a specific reason and one short detail about how you'll do it. Avoid repetition and finish the thought within 2–3 sentences.

例: I plan to become a content creator because I enjoy filming nature and sharing it with others. I hope to build a channel focusing on outdoor videos and learn editing skills to improve my work.

× Currently, uh, currently I'm not, uh, I'm not work and not a student.

✓ Currently I'm neither working nor a student.

The student used 'I'm not work' which is incorrect because English requires the -ing form after 'be' for continuous actions. Use 'neither ... nor' to connect two negative states. Suggestion: say 'I'm not working' or 'I'm neither working nor a student.'

× Uh, because, uh, because I'm, uh, preparing for else exam.

✓ I'm preparing for another exam.

'Else exam' is incorrect word choice and 'preparing for' should be followed by 'another exam' or the exam's name. Suggestion: use 'another' or specify the exam (e.g., 'preparing for the entrance exam').

× Currently I'm not working uh because of my uh, because of umm, because of because of my uh, I have no more time to work.

✓ I'm not working at the moment because I don't have time to work.

The student repeated phrases and used 'because of my I have no more time' which mixes prepositional phrase with a clause. Use 'because' + clause ('because I don't have time') or 'because of' + noun phrase ('because of my lack of time'). Also 'no more time' is unnatural; use 'don't have time' or 'no time.'

× As it is a good place to work, uh, because there, there, there is, there is good environment, good, uh, good.

✓ It is a good place to work because there is a good environment.

Repeated fillers aside, 'good environment' needs an article 'a' because 'environment' is a singular countable/uncountable noun here; use 'a good environment' or 'a good working environment.' Also remove redundant 'there is' repetition.

× There is peaceful environment and, uh, and uh, like peoples are friendly.

✓ There is a peaceful environment, and the people are friendly.

'Peaceful environment' needs the article 'a.' 'Peoples' is incorrect plural of 'people' (people is already plural); use 'people.' Also use 'the people' or 'people' depending on context. Suggestion: 'a peaceful working environment and friendly people.'

× As I like the place where I I work because because in because of their their Staffs are friendly, helpful.

✓ I like the place where I work because the staff are friendly and helpful.

Repeated words removed. 'Their staffs' is incorrect: 'staff' is a collective noun and does not take 'their' here; say 'the staff are' (plural) or 'the staff is' (singular). Capitalization of 'Staffs' is wrong. Suggestion: 'I like the place where I work because the staff are friendly and helpful.'

× In my future work plan, I want to I will be a content creator because I because I like to record nature in nature environment.

✓ In my future plans, I want to be a content creator because I like to record nature in natural environments.

Mixed future forms ('want to I will be') should be simplified: use 'I want to be' or 'I will be.' 'Nature environment' is awkward; use 'natural environments' or 'nature.' Remove repeated words. Suggestion: 'I want to be a content creator because I like recording nature in natural environments.'