Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời khá rõ ràng nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ không chính xác (ví dụ: "related to works"). Câu hơi dài và hơi lặp ý. Nên mở đầu trực tiếp, dùng thì đúng, sửa lỗi số nhiều/đếm được, và rút ngắn để tự nhiên hơn. Cụ thể: (1) Sử dụng thì hiện tại hoàn thành hoặc quá khứ đơn cho kinh nghiệm trước đây; (2) Thay "works" bằng "work" hoặc "jobs"; (3) Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu, mỗi câu rõ ràng; (4) Dùng từ vựng phù hợp như "part-time" hoặc "restaurant experience".

例: I'm currently a student. I used to work part-time in a local restaurant, so I have some practical work experience. That job taught me customer service skills and how to work under pressure.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý chính nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và collocation (ví dụ: "many modern equipment", "friendly environment" thiếu mạo từ/giới từ). Cần trả lời trực tiếp, dùng cụm danh từ đúng (uncountable), và nối các ý với từ liên kết ngắn. Cụ thể: (1) Sửa 'many modern equipment' -> 'modern equipment' hoặc 'many modern facilities'; (2) Thêm mạo từ 'a' trước 'friendly environment' nếu cần; (3) Tránh lặp từ 'study' nhiều lần; (4) Giữ 2–3 câu, nêu vị trí, lý do và một chi tiết cụ thể.

例: I study at a small high school in my hometown, which is close to my house. I chose it because it's convenient, and the school has modern facilities and a friendly atmosphere that helps me learn.

提案: Ý trả lời rõ nhưng nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, cấu trúc và từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ: 'enthusiasm' -> 'enthusiastic', 'the for the student' thừa từ). Cần bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó nêu lý do với ví dụ cụ thể. Sử dụng tính từ đúng, chia thì hợp lý, và tránh lặp từ 'study' quá nhiều. Cụ thể: (1) Dùng 'teachers are dedicated and enthusiastic'; (2) Sửa thì 'helped me' -> 'have helped me' nếu muốn nhấn kết quả hiện tại; (3) Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về cách họ giúp bạn.

例: Yes, it's a good place to study. The teachers are dedicated and enthusiastic, and they often give extra help after class, which has improved my grades and confidence.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng, nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng (ví dụ: 'still regret not going to another school that far away' cần sửa; 'that's going will provide' sai cấu trúc). Nên trả lời trực tiếp 'Yes/No/Not sure' rồi giải thích ngắn gọn và cụ thể. Cụ thể: (1) Dùng cấu trúc đúng: 'I regret not choosing a school farther from home'; (2) Giải thích lý do với cụm từ rõ ràng như 'better education' hoặc 'more opportunities'; (3) Giữ tối đa 3 câu và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

例: I'm not sure. I regret not choosing a school further away because I think a different school might have offered better academic programs and more extracurricular opportunities for improvement.

提案: Câu gần như không rõ nghĩa, nhiều lỗi cú pháp và lựa chọn từ không phù hợp ('not into fighting information' không hợp lý). Cần trả lời trực tiếp về kế hoạch nghề nghiệp, dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng cho dự định tương lai (will/going to/hope to), nêu động cơ và chi tiết cụ thể. Cụ thể: (1) Thay bằng 'I don't have firm plans yet' hoặc 'I'm not sure what I want to do yet'; (2) Dùng 'I hope to find a job that will provide enough money to support my family' và nêu loại công việc mong muốn nếu có; (3) Dùng tối đa 3 câu, tránh các cụm khó hiểu.

例: I don't have concrete plans yet, but in the future I hope to find a stable job that provides enough income to support my family. Ideally, I would like work in education or business, where I can use my skills and keep improving.

× I have some experience related to works.

✓ I have some experience related to work.

The noun 'work' here is an uncountable or abstract noun referring to employment or experience; using the plural 'works' is incorrect. Use 'work' or 'job experience'. Suggestion: say 'some work experience' or 'some experience related to work'.

× Where do you work?>

✓ Where do you study?

The examiner's question mark and greater-than symbol seem to be a typo; context shows the student meant to answer 'study'. For the student's reply, replace 'work' with 'study' because the topic is education. Suggestion: ensure the correct verb for the activity: 'Where do you study?' rather than 'Where do you work?'.

× I study in a small high school in my town.

✓ I study at a small high school in my town.

The preposition 'in' is not the best choice with 'school' when talking about attending; 'at' is idiomatic for institutions. This is listed under preposition use but also affects sentence correctness. Suggestion: use 'at a small high school'.

× It is near my house so I choose to study there.

✓ It is near my house so I chose to study there.

Tense inconsistency: the student is referring to a past decision, so 'choose' should be past 'chose'. 'Choose' is present; change to 'chose'. Suggestion: use past tense for past decisions: 'I chose to study there'.

× It is equipped with many modern equipment and friendly environment.

✓ It is equipped with a lot of modern equipment and a friendly environment.

'Equipment' is an uncountable noun so 'many' is inappropriate; use 'a lot of' or 'much' (rare). Also need articles: 'a friendly environment'. Suggestion: 'equipped with a lot of modern equipment and a friendly environment' or 'has modern equipment and a friendly environment'.

× I mean the teacher is dedicated and enthusiasm as well as the for the student.

✓ I mean the teachers are dedicated and enthusiastic, and they care about the students.

Multiple problems: subject-verb agreement and form errors. 'The teacher' vs 'they' inconsistent; 'enthusiasm' (noun) should be adjective 'enthusiastic'; 'as well as the for the student' is ungrammatical. Use plural 'teachers are' (if referring to staff) and 'enthusiastic'. Suggestion: 'the teachers are dedicated and enthusiastic, and they care about the students.'

× They are really friendly and helped me a lot in my study.

✓ They are really friendly and have helped me a lot with my studies.

Tense and aspect: maintain present perfect 'have helped' to link past assistance to present. 'Study' as noun meaning 'my course of study' is better as plural 'studies' or 'with my studies'. Suggestion: use 'have helped me a lot with my studies.'

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Would you like the place where you study?

Question from examiner contains 'work' but context is about study; change 'work' to 'study'. This is more lexical adjustment than modal error but ensures correct reference. Suggestion: match the verb to the context: 'Would you like the place where you study?'.

× Well, I'm not sure at all because right now I'm still regret not going to another school that far away from my home.

✓ Well, I'm not sure at all because right now I still regret not going to a school that was farther away from my home.

'I'm still regret' is ungrammatical: use 'I still regret'. Also 'another school that far away' needs comparatives: 'a school that was farther away' or 'a farther school'. Use past tense 'was' because the regret refers to a past choice. Suggestion: 'I still regret not going to a school that was farther away from my home.'

× I think that's going will provide me a better education system and I can improve better.

✓ I think that would have provided me with a better education and I could have improved more.

Original mixes future 'will' and 'going' incorrectly. The sentence expresses past conditional regret, so use perfect conditional: 'would have provided' and 'could have improved'. Also 'education system' is incorrect; say 'a better education'. 'Improve better' is redundant; use 'improved more'. Suggestion: use conditional perfect for unreal past: 'would have provided... could have improved...'.

× Currently, I am not into fighting information about what, however, I believe that in the future I will try my best to find a job that helped me make money enough to raise my son.

✓ Currently, I am not sure about what I want to do, however, I believe that in the future I will try my best to find a job that helps me earn enough money to raise my son.

Many errors: 'not into fighting information about what' is nonsensical; replace with 'not sure about what I want to do'. Verb tense: 'helped me make money enough' is wrong; use present simple 'helps' for future plan to describe job function and 'earn enough money'. Suggestion: 'I will try my best to find a job that helps me earn enough money to raise my son.'