Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details. Avoid repetition and check collocations (e.g., 'assistant professor at a pharmacy college'). Use linking words if adding details (e.g., 'and', 'for example').

例: I work as an assistant professor at a pharmacy college. I teach subjects such as pharmaceutical inorganic chemistry, microbiology and biopharmaceutics, and I have been teaching for the past two years.

提案: Give a direct answer naming the workplace and add one or two specific details. Remove fillers ('uh') and avoid repeating 'teach'. Use a linking phrase to connect details ('where' or 'and').

例: I work at Siddharthi Pharmacy College in Kim, Surat. There I teach several pharmacy subjects and supervise laboratory practicals for undergraduate students.

提案: Be clearer and more confident. Use a direct opinion sentence (Yes/No) then explain with specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases like 'a little bit' and fix grammar (e.g., 'I have gained a lot of knowledge' not 'I've gained more knowledge regarding my regarding subjects'). Use linking words such as 'because' or 'so'.

例: Yes, it's a good place to work because I have gained a lot of subject knowledge there, which I can apply to my research and teaching.

提案: Answer directly and expand with one clear supporting detail. Avoid repeating phrases and fillers. Use correct verb forms ('it has helped me to grow' or 'I have gained'). Add a linking word like 'because' to connect reason.

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy working there because the teaching profession has helped me grow professionally and deepen my knowledge in the pharmacy field.

提案: Provide a clear, grammatically correct statement of plans with specific details and correct job title. Use future or present continuous appropriately ('I am preparing' is fine). Improve structure: state goal, reason, and intended role. Correct collocations: 'settle in Canada' -> 'settle in Canada' is ok but say 'to settle in Canada' and 'work as a pharmacy assistant' or 'work as a pharmacist's assistant'.

例: I am currently preparing for the IELTS because I plan to move to Canada. There I hope to work as a pharmacy assistant while I pursue further professional opportunities.

× I work as an assistant professor instrumentary pharmacy college where I teach many subjects such as such as pharmaceutical inorganic chemistry, pharmaceutical microbiology and biopharmaceutics and pharmacokinetics.

✓ I work as an assistant professor at Instrumentary Pharmacy College, where I teach many subjects such as pharmaceutical inorganic chemistry, pharmaceutical microbiology, biopharmaceutics, and pharmacokinetics.

The sentence lacks preposition 'at' before the college name and repeats 'such as'. Commas are needed between list items and before 'and' in a series. Suggestion: include the correct preposition 'at', remove the duplicate phrase, and use commas to separate items in a list. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I have been teaching for last two years.

✓ I have been teaching for the last two years.

The phrase needs the definite article 'the' before 'last two years' to indicate a specific time period up to now. Use present perfect continuous 'have been teaching' correctly with 'for the last two years'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I work at Siddharthi Pharmacy College Kim located in Surat City where I teach many subjects and uh, teach students and conduct practicals.

✓ I work at Siddharthi Pharmacy College, Kim, located in Surat City, where I teach many subjects, instruct students, and conduct practicals.

The college name needs commas to set off the location, and parallel structure is required in the list of activities ('teach students' -> 'instruct students'). Remove filler 'uh'. Use commas to separate clauses and list items. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Uh, but obvious it's a little bit good place for the work because at that place I've gained more knowledge regarding my regarding subjects I felt and it's implement in further my research work.

✓ Although it is a reasonably good place to work, I have gained more knowledge about my subjects there, and I feel this knowledge will help in my future research.

Multiple issues: unnecessary filler 'uh', incorrect conjunction 'but obvious', awkward phrase 'a little bit good place for the work', repetition 'regarding my regarding subjects', incorrect tense and structure 'it's implement in further my research work'. Corrections provide proper conjunction 'although' or 'it is', clearer adjectives, remove repetition, and use future helping verb 'will help' for intended outcome. Grammar problem type ID:16

× Yes I do. I like to work at that place because in teaching, in teaching profession, it's helped me to, uh, grow, uh, gained more knowledge regarding my pharmacy field.

✓ Yes, I do. I like working there because the teaching profession has helped me grow and gain more knowledge in my field of pharmacy.

Use gerund 'working' after 'like' for preference. Remove fillers. Use present perfect 'has helped me' followed by base verb forms 'grow and gain' for parallel structure. Replace 'regarding my pharmacy field' with 'in my field of pharmacy' for natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Currently I am preparing for IELTS examination for settle in Canada where I try to work in Pharmacist assistant.

✓ Currently, I am preparing for the IELTS examination to settle in Canada, where I hope to work as a pharmacy assistant.

Use infinitive 'to settle' to express purpose. Include article 'the' before 'IELTS examination'. 'Try to work in Pharmacist assistant' is ungrammatical: use 'hope to work as a pharmacy assistant' or 'pharmacist assistant' with correct preposition 'as' and noun phrase. Also add commas for readability and correct tense/modal 'hope' for intention. Grammar problem type ID:7