Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and avoid long run-on lists. Keep to maximum 3–4 short sentences, use past/perfect tense correctly and group subjects more naturally. Add linking words to show duration.

例: I work as an assistant professor at Sridharvanthari Pharmacy College. I teach subjects such as pharmaceutical inorganic chemistry, microbiology and biopharmaceutics. I have been teaching there for the last three years, so I have gained a lot of teaching experience.

提案: Start directly with a clear topic sentence, correct word order and use concise supporting detail. Use linking words to add information (for example, "and" or "also").

例: I work at Surgeon 130 Pharmacy College in Kim. I teach pharmacy students and also run practical laboratory sessions for them.

提案: Answer directly (yes/no) then give 1–2 clear reasons. Avoid filler words and unclear phrasing. Use linking words such as "because" or "however" and give specific examples of benefits or difficulties.

例: Yes, it is generally a good place to work because I can teach both theory and practical sessions. However, it can be challenging since I must prepare thoroughly for each topic before class.

提案: State your opinion clearly, then give specific reasons. Fix vague or mistaken words (e.g. "film") and avoid repetition. Use linking words like "because" and "so" to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I like working there because teaching students helps me deepen my knowledge of the subjects. It is also useful for my research, since I can apply and test ideas in classes and labs.

提案: Give a clear, concise statement of your plans, correct grammar and avoid hesitations. Use linking words to show sequence (e.g., "currently", "next"). Provide one specific goal and a brief reason or timeline.

例: Currently I am preparing for the LIS/PTS exam to move abroad to Canada. My next plan is to work there as a pharmacy assistant while I settle and gain international experience.

× I work as an assistant professor in Sridharvanthari Pharmacy College and I teach subjects such as Pharmaceutical inorganic chemistry, pharmaceutical microbiology and biopharmaceutics and pharmacokinetics and I have been teach last three years.

✓ I work as an assistant professor at Sridharvanthari Pharmacy College and I teach subjects such as pharmaceutical inorganic chemistry, pharmaceutical microbiology, biopharmaceutics, and pharmacokinetics, and I have been teaching for the last three years.

This sentence has multiple tense and verb form problems. 'At' is the correct preposition for a workplace. Subject names should be lowercased except proper nouns and separated by commas. The present perfect continuous requires 'have been' + present participle, so 'have been teach' is incorrect; it should be 'have been teaching'. Also add 'for' with 'the last three years' to indicate duration. Suggested improvement: break long sentences into smaller parts and ensure verb forms match the intended continuous action. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Work I work at Surgeon 130 Pharmacy college at Kim and I teach pharmacy students and also I conduct practical sessions.

✓ I work at Surgeon 130 Pharmacy College in Kim, where I teach pharmacy students and conduct practical sessions.

The original word order is awkward ('Work I work'). Use a clear subject-verb-object order. Use 'in' for a town/place rather than repeating 'at'. Use 'where' to connect clauses and avoid repetitive 'and also'. Capitalize proper nouns consistently. Suggested improvement: start with the subject 'I' and combine related actions with a relative clause or simple conjunction. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× As per my opinion that it's little beneficial or little bit more difficult, uh, place to work because of beneficial things are there that if I'm teach students, OK, before I read all the things regarding uh, topics, uh, theoretical person, practical person that.

✓ In my opinion, the workplace is somewhat beneficial but also a little difficult because, when I teach students, I prepare by studying both the theoretical and practical aspects of the topics.

'As per my opinion that' is incorrect; use 'In my opinion'. 'It's little beneficial' needs 'somewhat' or 'a little' and 'place to work' should be 'the workplace' or 'the place I work'. 'If I'm teach students' is wrong pronoun/verb form; use 'when I teach students'. 'Before I read all the things' is informal and unclear; use 'I prepare by studying'. The final fragment 'theoretical person, practical person' is incorrect; clarify as 'theoretical and practical aspects'. Suggested improvement: simplify and clarify thoughts, use proper conjunctions and verb forms. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Yes, obviously I like the place where I work because of some advantageous things like uh, teach students, gain more knowledge regarding subjects regarding my film. It's mainly helpful for me research in research.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because it has advantages: I can teach students and gain more knowledge about my subjects, which is mainly helpful for my research.

'Because of some advantageous things' is unnatural; say 'because it has advantages'. 'Like teach students' needs an infinitive or gerund phrasing: 'I can teach students'. 'Regarding subjects regarding my film' is unclear and likely wrong word choice; replace with 'about my subjects'. 'It's mainly helpful for me research in research' is ungrammatical; correct to 'which is mainly helpful for my research'. Suggested improvement: use clearer nouns and pronouns and avoid repetition. Grammar_problem_type_id: 11

× Uh currently I am preparing for LTS examination for settle down at UH abroad Canada. So my next plan is to doing work in Canada as a pharmacist assistant.

✓ Currently I am preparing for the LTAS examination to settle down abroad in Canada. My next plan is to work in Canada as a pharmacy assistant.

Use 'to settle down' not 'for settle down'. Place 'abroad in Canada' properly. 'LTS' likely a misspelling; ensure correct exam name (I used 'LTAS' as placeholder) — adjust to the correct acronym. 'So my next plan is to doing work' is wrong: use 'is to work'. 'Pharmacist assistant' is better phrased 'pharmacy assistant'. Suggested improvement: use infinitive 'to' after 'plan is' and correct job title; confirm exam acronym and capitalization. Grammar_problem_type_id: 6