Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and precise: use correct collocations and grammar, avoid awkward phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific responsibility as supporting detail. Keep within 3–4 sentences. Correct errors like “find tax returns with the authority.” Use linking words if adding details.

例: I'm currently working as an accountant for a small private company. I prepare monthly financial statements and handle tax filings with the local tax authority. In addition, I reconcile bank accounts to ensure our records are accurate.

提案: Good clear answer with specific details. Improve naturalness by combining sentences and using a linking phrase. Mention your city or office location briefly for extra specificity. Keep it concise and grammatical (e.g., “I am part of” rather than “a part of”).

例: I work for a small foreign-invested company in the renewable energy sector based in Ho Chi Minh City. Although the company is registered in Vietnam, some investors are from Thailand, and I work in the finance department.

提案: Correct major language and clarity issues: use correct words (e.g., “boss” or “post” not “POTS”), fix grammar (avoid “He's has”), and choose natural expressions (“highly motivated” or “highly professional” rather than “high emotion”). Limit to 2–3 sentences: topic sentence + one specific example of support. Use linking words like “for example.”

例: Yes, it is. My boss is very supportive and highly professional, and he deals with internal problems quickly. For example, when we had a billing error last month he guided the team through a fast solution.

提案: Improve phrasing and grammar: remove filler words (“in this one”), use singular/plural correctly (“a museum” or “museums”), and make sentences more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail and an example using a linking word like “for example.”

例: Yes, I really like it. The office is in downtown Ho Chi Minh City, which is very convenient with many shops, restaurants and museums nearby. For example, I can visit a museum or meet friends for dinner after work.

提案: This answer needs clearer structure, correct grammar and precision. Start with a direct topic sentence stating your goal, then add specific steps or a timeline. Avoid informal fillers like “yeah.” Use proper subject–verb agreement and precise vocabulary (e.g., “long-term goal,” “manage a small team of two to three people”).

例: My long-term goal is to become a senior accountant managing a small team of two or three staff. To achieve this, I plan to take advanced accounting courses and gain more experience leading month-end close processes.

× At the moment I'm working as an accountant for a small company.

✓ At the moment I'm working as an accountant for a small company.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses the present continuous to describe a current activity. Keep using present continuous for temporary present situations.

× My job is to prepare financial statements and find tax returns with the authority.

✓ My job is to prepare financial statements and file tax returns with the authorities.

The verb 'find' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'file' when submitting tax returns. The preposition 'with' plus 'the authority' is awkward; use the plural 'the authorities' to refer to tax authorities. Suggestion: use 'file tax returns with the authorities' to convey submitting returns to the relevant government body.

× Where do you work?>

✓ Where do you work?

The extra '>' is a typographical error and not a grammatical issue listed; removing it yields a correct question. Ensure punctuation is correct.

× I work for a small foreign invested company in the renewable energy sector.

✓ I work for a small foreign-invested company in the renewable energy sector.

Hyphenation 'foreign-invested' joins words functioning as a compound adjective before a noun. While not strictly a singular/plural error, this improves grammatical form. Keep singular 'company' because it refers to one firm.

× It is based in Vietnam but has investors from Thailand and I am a part of the financial department.

✓ It is based in Vietnam but has investors from Thailand, and I am part of the finance department.

Use a comma before 'and' to join independent clauses. 'A part of' is wordy; 'part of' is more natural. 'Finance department' is the common collocation instead of 'financial department.'

× My POTS is tight and very supportive.

✓ My boss is kind and very supportive.

'POTS' appears to be a typo for 'boss.' 'Tight' is incorrect to describe a supportive person; use 'kind' or 'friendly.' Choose appropriate adjectives that describe personality.

× He's has high emotion, intelligent and always helps resolve internal problems quickly.

✓ He has high emotional intelligence and always helps resolve internal problems quickly.

Remove the erroneous contraction 'He's has' — use 'He has.' 'High emotion' is unidiomatic; the correct phrase is 'high emotional intelligence.' Adjectives need correct nouns: 'intelligent' alone is less precise than 'emotional intelligence.' Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'He has ... and always helps' pairs correctly.

× My manager is also approachable and gifts clear guidance which makes the team work well together.

✓ My manager is also approachable and gives clear guidance, which makes the team work well together.

'Gifts' is the wrong verb; use 'gives' for providing guidance. Add a comma before 'which' for the non-restrictive clause. Ensure verb choice matches meaning.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

The examiner's question is asking for preference; the natural student response should be to 'Do you like...' 'Would you like...' asks about desire for something different. Use 'Do you like' to ask about current feelings.

× Yes, I really like it. My company is in this one, the downtown area of Ho Chi Minh City, so it's very convenient with many shops, restaurants and cultural attractions nearby.

✓ Yes, I really like it. My company is in the downtown area of Ho Chi Minh City, so it's very convenient with many shops, restaurants, and cultural attractions nearby.

Remove 'this one,' which is unnecessary. Use commas in lists. The definite article before 'downtown area' is correct; streamline the phrase for natural speech.

× For example, I can easily go to museum or meet friends after work.

✓ For example, I can easily go to a museum or meet friends after work.

'Museum' requires an article in singular countable form: 'a museum.' Use 'a' for a nonspecific single museum. Alternatively, use 'museums' for plural without an article.

× What are your future work plans?

✓ What are your future work plans?

No correction needed; this question correctly asks about future plans using 'future' and 'plans.'

× I have a long term goals is general accounting with two or three staff behind.

✓ I have a long-term goal of working in general accounting, supervising two or three staff.

Original has multiple structure errors: mismatched number ('a ... goals'), missing preposition, and awkward phrasing 'staff behind.' Use 'long-term goal' (hyphenated), 'of working in' to indicate the field, and 'supervising two or three staff' or 'managing a team of two or three.' This corrects singular/plural and clarifies role.

× I can lead a small team and yeah.

✓ I can lead a small team.

'And yeah' is informal filler and should be removed in a formal speaking test. The sentence is complete and clear without it. Maintain concise, formal responses in the exam context.