Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence stating your status, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler sounds (e.g. "uh") and grammatical errors (possessives, articles). Use linking words if you add information.

例: I am a student at university, and I also do part-time work to support myself. For example, I work weekends at a café so I can pay for groceries and help my parents with some expenses.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence naming the workplace and one or two specific details about your role. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct verb forms (e.g. "I teach" -> "I teach students" or "I help them with their studies").

例: I work at Bright International School as a teaching assistant. I teach basic lessons and help students with their studies, especially in English and math.

提案: Answer directly and then support with specific reasons. Avoid sentence fragments and capitalize proper nouns. Use a linking phrase like "because" followed by concrete examples of what makes it good.

例: Yes, it is a very good place to work because the teachers and management respect and support each other. For instance, managers regularly organise training and colleagues help one another with lesson planning.

提案: Give a clear statement about your feelings, then add specific supporting details such as proximity, length of time, and relationships. Correct grammar for time expressions ("for four to five years") and use linking words like "because" or "and".

例: Yes, I like the place where I work because it is close to my home and I have worked there for four to five years. I have built strong relationships with my students and colleagues, which makes the job enjoyable.

提案: Be specific and realistic about future work plans. If you intend to travel, explain how it relates to your career or studies. Use correct country/city references (London is a city) and give concrete reasons with linking words.

例: I have several future plans related to my career and travel. For instance, I would like to teach abroad and travel to different countries; I especially want to visit the UK, and London in particular, because I am interested in its historic architecture, cultural scene, and educational opportunities.

× I am a student or UH with the studies.

✓ I am a student and I am studying.

The original sentence uses 'or' incorrectly and 'UH' is filler; pronoun/structure is unclear. Use 'and I am studying' to connect ideas and provide a clear subject and verb. Avoid fillers like 'UH'.

× I'm also doing work because I have to work for my groceries and parent for my.

✓ I'm also working because I have to earn money for my groceries and to support my parents.

The original has awkward phrasing and incorrect singular 'parent' and unclear 'for my'. Use gerund 'working' and correct plural 'parents' and clarify purpose with 'to earn money' and 'to support'.

× I work in Bright International School.

✓ I work at Bright International School.

Use the preposition 'at' with workplace names. 'In' is not correct here for a named institution; change to 'at'.

× I teach the students, help them in studies.

✓ I teach students and help them with their studies.

Article 'the' is unnecessary before 'students' in general statement; use 'and' to join verbs and 'help with their studies' is natural. Also add possessive 'their'.

× Yes, it is very good place to work because.

✓ Yes, it is a very good place to work.

Missing article 'a' before 'very good place' and sentence ends with an unnecessary conjunction 'because'. Complete the sentence or remove 'because'.

× In bright International School, teachers and management both respect and support each other.

✓ At Bright International School, teachers and management respect and support each other.

Use correct capitalization for the school's name and the preposition 'at'. 'Both' is optional and can be omitted; the verb phrase is fine.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

The examiner's question should be 'Do you like...' but as a student response prompt, avoid 'Would you like' confusion. Here, correction fits conversational use. (If correcting student answer, keep as question form.)

× Yes, I like the place where I work.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work.

This sentence is correct; no grammatical change needed. It clearly answers the question.

× The place is very close to me.

✓ The place is very close to my home.

Original is understandable but slightly informal. Clarify 'to my home' for precision; present tense is appropriate.

× I spend four to five year there in the school.

✓ I spent four to five years at the school.

Use past tense 'spent' for completed time, plural 'years', and preposition 'at' for institutions. Move 'there' or remove it for clarity.

× I'm very close to my students, teachers, staff.

✓ I'm very close to my students, fellow teachers, and staff.

List items need parallel structure and clearer roles. 'Fellow teachers' clarifies relation; include 'and' before last item.

× What are your future work plans?

✓ What are your future work plans?

Question is correct; no change needed.

× I have a lot of future work plans, like I want to visit the whole world.

✓ I have many future plans; for example, I want to travel around the world.

Use 'many' for countable 'plans' and 'travel around the world' is more natural than 'visit the whole world'. Use a semicolon or separate sentence for clarity.

× My favorite country is London.

✓ My favorite city is London.

London is a city, not a country. Using the correct noun avoids factual/pronoun confusion.

× I want to visit London because of their buildings, environment and atmosphere.

✓ I want to visit London because of its buildings, environment, and atmosphere.

Use the singular possessive pronoun 'its' for a city. Also add Oxford comma for clarity and pluralize/list items consistently.