Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence stating your status, avoid unnecessary words, correct articles and prepositions, and keep it concise (1–2 sentences). Add a brief supporting detail if needed using a linking phrase.

例: I work full-time in the accounting department of a car dealership. I handle daily bookkeeping and invoicing, so I go to the office every weekday.

提案: Answer directly with a clear statement of place, then give one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words (for example, 'and', 'after that') to connect ideas.

例: I work in Toronto, Canada, at a car dealership’s accounting office. I moved there after I finished college to start my accounting career.

提案: Start with a clear opinion, then give a specific reason using a linking word like 'because' or 'as'. Correct vocabulary: use 'bosses' or 'colleagues' instead of 'boards'. Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

例: Yes, it’s a good place to work because my bosses and colleagues help me learn accounting software and new procedures, which improves my skills.

提案: Give a clear present preference (like 'Yes, I like it' or 'I would like to continue working there'), then support with a concise reason. Use present perfect or simple past correctly and avoid repeated phrases. Mention one concrete reason linking education to the job.

例: Yes, I like working in the accounting department because my studies at Hamburg College in Canada taught me practical accounting skills that I can use every day.

提案: Give a clear future plan in one sentence, then add one concise reason using linking words ('because' or 'so that'). Be precise with phrasing: say 'become a CPA' or 'get my CPA certification', and avoid redundant repetition.

例: I plan to become a CPA in the future because the certification will help me advance my accounting career and apply the knowledge I gained at college and work.

× I work in a accounting department at a car dealership every day.

✓ I work in an accounting department at a car dealership every day.

Use 'an' before a noun beginning with a vowel sound. 'Accounting' begins with a vowel sound, so 'an' is required instead of 'a'. Suggestion: Use 'a' before consonant sounds and 'an' before vowel sounds.

× I work in Canada because I because I work in accounting department. During our I was a college student. After that my.

✓ I work in Canada because I work in an accounting department. I was a college student before that.

This original contains repetition, missing articles, and fragmented clauses. Remove the repeated phrase 'because I', add the article 'an' before 'accounting department', and combine time references into a clear sentence. 'During our' and 'After that my.' are fragments; replace with 'I was a college student before that.' Suggestion: Keep one main clause per idea and ensure each clause has a subject and verb.

× Yes, it is because my boards and coworkers teach me how to use accounting software.

✓ Yes, it is because my bosses and coworkers teach me how to use accounting software.

The word 'boards' is incorrect in this context; the intended noun is 'bosses' (people who supervise). Use appropriate nouns to match meaning. Also present tense 'teach' fits the habitual action. Suggestion: Choose words that accurately reflect roles; proofread for similar-sounding but incorrect words.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

'Would you like' asks about desire for something (e.g., would you like to go), but the examiner likely asked about current opinion. Use 'Do you like...' to ask about a present preference. Suggestion: Match question form to intended meaning: use 'do' for general preferences and 'would' for offers or hypothetical situations.

× I'd like to work in accounting department because I had learned, uh, I had learned account business accounting at Hamburg College in Canada.

✓ I'd like to work in an accounting department because I learned business accounting at Hamburg College in Canada.

Remove duplicate 'I had learned' and use simple past 'learned' to indicate completed study. Add article 'an' before 'accounting department' and use 'business accounting' as the correct collocation. Suggestion: Use simple past for completed actions when no earlier past reference is needed; avoid repeating clauses.

× What are your future work plans?

✓ What are your future work plans?

This sentence is fine as written; no correction needed. Use present simple 'are' to ask about future plans. Suggestion: No change necessary.

× I'd like to. I'd like to get CPA in the future because I had a lot, I had to run a lot of accounting knowledge at college and to my working workplace.

✓ I'd like to get a CPA in the future because I learned a lot of accounting at college and use it at work.

Several issues: add article 'a' before 'CPA', change 'had a lot, I had to run a lot of accounting knowledge' to 'learned a lot of accounting' (simple past) and 'to my working workplace' to 'use it at work'. Use 'I'd like to get' to express future desire. Ensure concise expression of cause and use. Suggestion: Use 'learned' for past education, add articles where needed, and use natural collocations like 'use it at work'.