Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and directly responds to the question with a topic sentence and a supporting detail. To improve, make the response a bit more concise and natural by combining information smoothly and adding a brief present-tense statement about your current status (e.g., your job role) to give context.

例: I’m not a student anymore — I graduated from university 15 years ago and I’ve been working in healthcare ever since.

提案: Good concise response with specific information. To improve, add one short detail about your role or the type of facility to enrich the answer and use a linking phrase to connect ideas if you expand further.

例: I work for one of the largest healthcare systems in Manila, where I’m employed in a hospital network that focuses on both inpatient and outpatient care.

提案: Your answer is honest but a little wordy and hesitant. Make it more natural by using a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific reasons. Avoid filler phrases like "somehow" and reduce redundancy.

例: I’m still fairly new, but so far it seems like a good workplace because colleagues are supportive and training is well organized.

提案: This is a positive, specific response. To improve, tighten the language and use a linking word to show cause and effect. Also replace longer phrases with more natural expressions.

例: Yes, I like it because the staff have been very helpful, which has made it easier for me to learn the procedures quickly.

提案: Clear and concise plan. To enhance, add a brief reason or a step you are taking to achieve it, using a linking word to connect the plan and the reason.

例: I plan to work as a registered nurse in the United States in two to three years, so I’m preparing by studying for the NCLEX and arranging the necessary paperwork.

× No, I am no longer a student.

✓ No, I am no longer a student.

No grammar error matching the provided list; sentence is correct.

× I graduated from university 15 years ago.

✓ I graduated from university 15 years ago.

No grammar error matching the provided list; sentence is correct.

× I work for one of the biggest healthcare systems in Manila.

✓ I work for one of the biggest healthcare systems in Manila.

Preposition 'for' is acceptable here; however some style guides prefer 'at' when referring to employment location (use 'I work at one of the biggest healthcare systems in Manila'). This is optional and not a strict grammar error.

× I haven't had the opportunity to know exactly if it's a good place to work because I only started a few weeks ago, but I could say that somehow it is meeting my expectations for a good workplace.

✓ I haven't had the opportunity to know for sure if it's a good place to work because I only started a few weeks ago, but I can say that it is meeting my expectations for a good workplace.

Present perfect negative plus present simple/modal: 'know exactly' is awkward; use 'know for sure'. 'Could say' implies conditional or tentative past ability; use 'can say' to indicate current judgment. 'Somehow' is vague and unnecessary. Suggestions: replace 'know exactly' with 'know for sure', 'could say' with 'can say', and remove 'somehow'. Maintain present perfect ('haven't had') and present simple/modal where appropriate.

× I like my current workplace because the people that I have been meeting so far have been very helpful to me when it comes to understanding the processes.

✓ I like my current workplace because the people whom I have met so far have been very helpful to me in helping me understand the processes.

Relative pronoun: 'that' for people is acceptable informally, but 'whom' is more correct when the pronoun is the object. Tense/aspect: 'have been meeting' suggests repeated meetings or ongoing meeting activity; if the meetings occurred already, use present perfect 'have met'. Also avoid redundant 'to me' and duplicate 'help' phrases. Suggestions: use 'whom' or 'that' depending on formality, use 'have met' for completed encounters, and streamline phrase to 'helped me understand' or 'have been very helpful in helping me understand'.

× I plan to work as a registered nurse in the United States in two to three years from now.

✓ I plan to work as a registered nurse in the United States in two to three years.

Redundancy: 'from now' is unnecessary when saying 'in two to three years'. Tense and time expression: 'plan to' correctly expresses future intention; drop 'from now' for conciseness. Alternatively, 'in about two to three years' is acceptable.