Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence then add one or two brief supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g. saying 'I'm a student' twice) and correct minor grammar (use simple past for finished, and give the university name once).

例: I am a student. I recently finished my 12th standard and am now studying for a BBA at Kushita University. I am not working at the moment because I want to focus on my studies.

提案: Answer directly and briefly: say you do not work, then give the correct, concise information about your university. Avoid long, confused clauses and grammatical errors (use 'located in' and correct university name consistently).

例: I don't work at the moment. I study at Kushita University, which is located in the Kushitra district of Haryana.

提案: Be clearer and give specific reasons. Use linking words (because, for example) and correct article use ('a very good place'). Mention concrete amenities or features rather than vague phrases.

例: Yes, I think it's a very good place to work because there are excellent libraries and cultural centres. For example, the campus museum and local libraries make it easy to learn about history and regional culture.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve grammar (use 'culture' not 'cultural' alone). Give one specific example of an opportunity and use linking words to make your point concise and coherent.

例: Yes, I do. I appreciate the campus because it offers professional workshops and cultural events. For example, the career seminars helped me understand different BBA career paths, so I really like studying there.

提案: Provide a direct topic sentence about your plans and expand with specific steps or timeline. Correct grammar: 'I am preparing for government jobs' or 'I plan to apply for government positions.' Add how you are preparing (studying, exams, training).

例: I plan to pursue a government job after graduation. Currently, I am preparing by studying for competitive exams and attending coaching classes to improve my chances.

× I'm a student and recently I finished my 12th standard and now I am a student of BBA in Kushita University.

✓ I'm a student; I recently finished my 12th standard and am now studying BBA at Kushita University.

Use present perfect or simple past appropriately and avoid repeating 'I am'. 'Recently I finished' is acceptable but more natural as 'I recently finished'. Use 'studying BBA at' to show current study location; 'at' is correct preposition for institutions. Also replace the comma splice with a semicolon or split into two sentences. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I'm not working at the moment.

✓ I am not working at the moment.

Contraction 'I'm' is acceptable in speech but keep consistency in formal responses; no grammatical error other than register. Here change contraction to full form to match formality. This is a pronoun/contracted form choice. Grammar problem type ID:12

× As I told you earlier that I'm not working right now but I'm studying in Krushchev University which is placed in Kushitra district which is take place in Haryana.

✓ As I told you earlier, I'm not working right now; I am studying at Krushita University, which is located in Kushitra district in Haryana.

Remove redundant 'that' after 'told you earlier'; use 'studying at' for institutions; 'placed' and 'take place' are incorrect — use 'located' and 'in' for regions. Fix punctuation and run-on sentence by splitting or using a semicolon. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Is it a good place to work?

✓ Is it a good place to study or work?

Context: student is asked about place to work but earlier said studying. Suggest clarifying question; no strict grammar error but preposition 'to' with 'work' is fine. Providing alternative improves clarity. This maps to preposition usage/word choice. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Yes, according to me it is very good place to work as in my place there are many amenities to learn about the history and to our culture.

✓ Yes, in my opinion it is a very good place to work because there are many amenities to learn about history and our culture.

Use article 'a' before 'very good place'; 'according to me' is unnatural — use 'in my opinion'; 'to learn about the history' should be 'about history' (no definite article unless specific). 'To our culture' should be 'our culture'. 'Because' is a better conjunction than 'as' here. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Yes, I like the place where I work because there are many opportunities and amenities to learn about the history, cultural and and about my profession.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I study because there are many opportunities and amenities to learn about history, culture and my profession.

Use 'study' rather than 'work' to reflect student context. Remove duplicate 'and'. Use 'culture' (noun), not 'cultural' (adjective) in this list. Omit 'the' before 'history' unless referring to a specific history. Parallel structure requires nouns: 'history, culture and my profession.' Grammar problem type ID:13},{