Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence stating your status, then add one or two specific supporting details (school type, nationality, what you study) using linking words. Avoid hesitation and repetitions; use correct articles and plural forms.

例: I'm a high school student studying in Japan. I come from Uzbekistan and attend a first-year class at a Japanese high school, where I study with classmates from different countries.

提案: Start with a direct statement that you are not currently working, then say clearly where you want to work and why. Use linking words (because, so) and name languages correctly. Avoid filler words and incomplete phrases.

例: I don't work now, but in the future I want to work at an airport because I love traveling. For example, I hope to use languages such as French, Russian and Arabic when I meet passengers.

提案: Begin with a clear opinion sentence (Yes/No and reason). Then give specific reasons using linking words (because, for example). Use correct nouns and plural forms (people from other countries, other countries' cultures).

例: Yes, I think it would be a very good place to work because I would meet many people from other countries. For example, I could learn about different cultures and practice speaking foreign languages.

提案: Answer directly and clearly. Explain why you would like it with one or two specific reasons. Avoid unclear words (please/please) and unrelated details about exams unless linked. Keep sentences short and accurate.

例: Yes, I would like working there because the airport is an exciting and busy place. However, I know I must study hard to pass university entrance exams before I can follow this dream.

提案: Provide a clear plan starting with your immediate next step and long-term goal. Use linking words (first, then, finally) and give a specific reason or memory that inspired you, expressed clearly and simply.

例: First, I plan to work in airport customer service because I have wanted this job since I was a child. Later, I hope to travel and work abroad, using the languages I learn to help international passengers.

× I don't work because I'm student.

✓ I don't work because I'm a student.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before singular countable noun 'student'. Add 'a' to indicate one person belonging to that category. Suggestion: Always use 'a' or 'the' with singular countable nouns unless omitted for specific reasons.

× I study in Japanese high school.

✓ I study at a Japanese high school.

Use preposition 'at' for institutions like schools and include the article 'a' before 'Japanese high school'. 'In' can be used for being inside a building but 'at' is idiomatic for attending an institution. Suggestion: Use 'study at a ...' for general attendance.

× My class is, uh, one year a class and I, I am, I'm from Uzbekistan, but I live in Japan now.

✓ My class is one year long, and I am from Uzbekistan, but I live in Japan now.

Phrase 'one year a class' is ungrammatical. Use 'one year long' to indicate duration. Also remove filler commas and contractions for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'one year long' or 'a one-year class'.

× Uh, I, I study another country peoples.

✓ I study people from other countries.

'Another country peoples' is incorrect word order and pluralization. Use 'people from other countries' to express the idea. 'People' already plural; 'countries' should be plural. Suggestion: Use 'people from other countries' or 'people of other countries'.

× Where do you work?>

✓ Where do you work?

The original includes a stray '>' character likely a typo. Remove it. Suggestion: Proofread to remove stray symbols.

× I don't work, but in the future I want to work airport, uh, is Stardust because I like travel Uh, I will I want to use another country, for example, French, Russian, Arabic and.

✓ I don't work, but in the future I want to work at an airport, maybe at Stardust, because I like to travel. I want to use other languages, for example French, Russian and Arabic.

Multiple issues: need preposition 'at' before 'an airport' and the article 'an' for singular countable noun. 'I like travel' should be 'I like to travel' or 'I like travelling'. 'I want to use another country' is incorrect — should be 'use other languages'. Sentence fragmented; clarified and listed languages properly without trailing 'and'. Suggestion: Use 'work at an airport', 'like to travel', and 'use other languages'.

× Is it a good place to work?

✓ Is it a good place to work?

This sentence is correct. No change needed.

× Yes, of course I report is works very, very good place because I see a lot of people other country.

✓ Yes, of course, I think it is a very, very good place because I would see people from many other countries.

Original has several problems: 'I report is works' is ungrammatical — likely meant 'I think it is'. 'Very good place' needs 'a' before 'very' when used in noun phrase 'a very good place'. 'I see a lot of people other country' should be 'I would see people from many other countries' or 'I see many people from other countries'. Suggestion: Use 'I think it is a very good place' and 'people from other countries'.

× I like other country people because I know other people cultures and I want to learn other country language.

✓ I like people from other countries because I know about their cultures and I want to learn other languages.

'adjective+noun' order wrong: use 'people from other countries'. 'Other people cultures' should be 'their cultures' or 'other cultures'. 'Other country language' should be 'other languages'. Suggestion: Use 'people from other countries', 'their cultures', and 'other languages'.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Would you like the place where you work?

This question is correct as written. No change needed.

× Yes, I want to please because the, uh, this please very beautiful and I fly every time in the future, but uh, the study university exam very difficult.

✓ Yes, I would love to, because the place is very beautiful and I want to fly a lot in the future, but university entrance exams are very difficult.

Multiple issues: 'I want to please' incorrect — likely 'I would love to'. 'This please' should be 'this place'. 'I fly every time in the future' is unnatural — 'I want to fly a lot in the future'. 'the study university exam very difficult' should be 'university entrance exams are very difficult' and needs subject-verb agreement and articles. Suggestion: Use 'I would love to', 'the place is very beautiful', and 'university entrance exams are very difficult'.

× I want to learn very terrible because a lot of students.

✓ I find the studies very difficult because there are many students.

'Learn very terrible' is ungrammatical — use 'find ... very difficult' or 'learning is very difficult'. 'Because a lot of students' is a fragment; include verb 'there are' or explain relation. Clarity: maybe means crowded classes making learning difficult. Suggestion: Use 'learning is very difficult because there are many students' or 'classes are overcrowded'.

× My future work plans, a lot of the first I will work in the airport in service because when I was child, I saw, uh, were pretty sure this, uh, I loved him.

✓ My future work plans: first, I will work in airport customer service because when I was a child, I saw this and I liked it.

Original is disorganized and contains missing articles and unclear pronouns. Use 'first' to list plans, 'work in airport customer service' or 'work at an airport in customer service'. 'When I was a child' needs article 'a'. 'I saw, were pretty sure this' is unclear; simplified to 'I saw this and I liked it.' Suggestion: Use clear sequencing words ('first') and correct articles ('a child'), and avoid unclear pronouns.

× And so my dream is share this and go will go another country.

✓ So my dream is to share this and to go to another country.

Missing infinitive 'to' before verbs 'share' and 'go'. 'Go will go' is incorrect word order. Also add preposition 'to' before 'another country'. Suggestion: Use infinitive forms 'to share' and 'to go to another country'.